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Logline

Your work can be your worst nightmarePremise

Norman the taxidermist finds himself in this brawling nightmare. The clumsy fiddleris stuck in a ginormous warehouse. With no way out Norman has to take on the life

size mousetrap, in order for him to escape he needs to overcome the challenge. This

is made more difficult for him when he finds out that theres a giant mouse after

him.

Treatment

Norman looks straight down an alleyway, the mood is mellow, and Norman looksdistressed as he walks down the alleyway. Once he gets to the other side the little

mouse he had been looking for runs across. Norman runs after the mouse. The

mouse leads Norman to an open door; Norman walks inside and starts looking for

the mouse. Norman walks into another open door that leads him to warehouse.

Norman looks at the size of the warehouse. Norman looks up the warehouse the

door behind him closes. Norman starts panicking; he then hears a loud roar out of

nowhere. Norman looks ahead and there's what seems to be a life size mousetrap

(The game). Norman feels dizzy by the size of the mousetrap. He's baffled by the

sudden appearance of the mousetrap.

Norman looks around and finds that there's no other escape. He hears another loud

roar but only this time louder and more aggressive. Norman legs start to wobble his

hands start to sweat. There's a big bang on the door. Norman starts to panic, the

door slams open. A giant mouse appears from the shade, Norman jumps and his

eyes pop out. The giant mouse comes after him. With no other way to get away from

the mouse Norman takes on the mousetrap game.

Norman jumps over hurdles, climbs giant stairs and runs for his life; eventually his

skinny legs weaken and slow down. The ground starts moving backwards (something

like a travelator but moving in the opposite direction of Norman). Norman looks

back and sees the mouse catching up to him. He tries to run but seems to be stuck

on the same spot. His legs start moving faster but hes stuck on the same spot,

eventually the giant mouse catches up to him. Norman falls on the floor and starts

crawling away from the giant mouse. The objects around him start coming alive, the

eyes in the jars start moving around. The scissors start to grow and start chopping

things around him. Sand papers start sanding down the environment; blow dryers

come alive and make the atmosphere more humid. Norman becomes restless. The


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giant mouse lifts his leg up to step on Norman and just when hes about to be

squashed Norman wakes up from his sweat dripping nightmare.

Norman wakes up from the nightmare he looks at the mouse he was stuffing before

he fell asleep; hes still out of breath from the nightmare he throws the mouse to the

other side of the room. He slowly gets up his thirst leads him to the fridge. Norman

reaches out for the drink in the carton, he takes it out without looking (as you would;

hes aware of where things are in his fridge). As hes drinking from the carton

Norman sees the giant mouse in the fridge from the corner of his eyes. He Drops the

carton and starts screaming.

Alternative Ending

I could have a dream within a dream sequence where Norman wakes up fromnightmare just to find himself within another nightmare.

Step Outline

Act 1

Norman walks down an alleyway Norman sees the mouse The mouse leads Norman into open door, Normans goes inside. Norman walks into another door which leads him to the ware house Norman is mesmerized by the size of the ware house. The door behind him closes

Act 2

Norman hears a big bang coming from the door. Norman is scared and starts panicking The mouse trap appears, Norman is baffled by the sudden appearance The giant mouse breaks the door. Norman finally sees the monster and is scared Norman tries to get away from mouse. Norman is unsuccessful. The giant catches to Norman. Objects are given life and start to attack Norman.

Act 3

Norman wakes from the nightmare Norman gets up and heads to the fridge to have a drink The giant mouse appears in the fridge


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Man TrapBy

Ilmi omar

Version 1


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ACT I

SCENE I:

FADE IN:

EXT.THE CAMERA LOOKS DOWN AN ALLEYWAY, MOOD IS VERY MELLOW AND

THE SKY IS GERY.

SOUND OF A SQUEKING METAL

HOLD SHOT, showing the distance of the alleyway

CUT TO NORMAN, MID SHOT

NORMAN walks down the alleyway. On the side are newspapers on

the ground and huge dirty green bins.

Most of the light is coming from the lights that are hanging

from the doors in the alleyway.

CLOSE UP ON Norman

Norman looks distressed, he starts moving keeping his eyes

out. He takes small steps.

He sees a little mouse running across from one side to the

other. Norman runs towards the mouse.

The mouse gets away from Norman and goes into one of the open

doors in the alleyway.

INT. THE CAMERA LOOKS INTO THE OPEN DOOR THE ATMOSPHERE IS

DARK AND GLOOMY. THE ONLY SOURCE OF LIGHT COMING FROM A DOOR

THATS HALF OPEN.

Norman follows the mouse and goes in the open door. He looks

around to see where the mouse is.

The space is cramped there are boxes everywhere. Broken glass

on the floor, Norman steps over objects to get to the otherside of the room, he reaches for the door and goes in the

room.

ACT II:

SCENE II:

INT.INSIDE THE WAREHOUSE, THE LIGHTS ARE BRIGHT AND THERES NO

SOUND IN THE WAREHOUSE.

Norman takes small steps; EXTREME LONG SHOT he looks at the

size of the warehouse. The door behind him slams, he goes back

to try and open it. A loud roar comes from behind the door.


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Norman steps back, he turns around and sees a massive

MOUSETRAP.

The mousetrap covers one side to the other; it has huge chains

hanging from the sides. The size of the steps makes Norman

Dizzy.

ACT III

SCENE III

Norman is confused by the sudden appearance of this ginormous

object. Norman tries to walk around the mousetrap but is

unsuccessful. He finds that theres no other way but to climb

the stairs.

CUT TO THE DOOR

Another loud noise comes from the door. The roar is louder and

more aggressive. Normans legs start to wobble.

(LIGHT) The Lights start to flicker.

The ground starts to shake. A loud bang comes from the door,

as if someone is trying to knock it down. The door shakes,

parts of it come off. Norman starts to panic; he starts to

chew on his fingernails. Theres another big bang on the door

but only this time it falls to pieces. Norman covers his face,

once all the noise from the bang vanishes and everything is on

the floor Norman slowly opens his eyes. He looks aroundtheres pieces of wood everywhere from the door. Then he

slowly looks up to see the door. A GAINT MOUSE stands before

him.

Norman swallows his breath as the giant mouse howls at him.

The giant mouse comes after Norman.

CLOSE UP ON Norman

Normans eyes pop out of his glasses before he tries to get

away from the giant. Norman has no other choice but to take on

the mousetrap challenge.

ACT IV

SCENE IV

CLOSE UP ON Norman CUT TO The giant steps

Norman reaches the giant steps, he looks up.

OVERHEAD VIEW

Norman starts climbing the steps one by one.


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SHOT OF THE SWINGING BALL

Norman gets to the top of the steps

CLOSE UP ON Norman

Norman is shocked, he dodges the swinging ball.

Slides down a pillar, gets to the ground and starts running.

LONG SHOT ON Norman as hes running.

Norman slows down CLOSE UP on him as tries to get his get

breath back.

Norman looks back and sees the giant mouse in a LONG SHOT

Norman tries to run in a LONG SHOT to see his movement

CLOSE UP on his legs

CUT to the giant mouse

A LONG SHOT on the giant mouse coming towards Norman

Norman tries to run in a LONG SHOT to see his movement

CLOSE UP on his legs

CLOSE UP on the giant mouse, another shot in a LONG SHOT

A LONG SHOT with both Norman and giant mouse.

Norman falls on the floor in a LONG SHOT

A CLOSE UP on Norman crawling away

A LONG SHOT on the jars with glass eyes that are on the shelf

A CLOSE UP on a few of the jars with the eyes moving, another

CLOSE UP on a scissors as it breaks of from his belt. A LONG

SHOT of the scissors growing into a bigger size.

CUT to a CLOSE UP on a blow dryer. A LONG SHOT of all thecharacters and objects in the scene as they surround Norman.

A MID SHOT on the giant mouse as he looks at Norman viciously

CUT to an EXTREME LONG SHOT with everyone in the scene. We see

the giant mouse lifting his feet up in this scene.

CANTED ANGLE on the mouse feet from a low angle.

A CLOSE UP on Normans Face


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ACT V

SCENE V

MID SHOT on Norman with his head on his working table, CLOSE

UP on his face as he wakes up from his nightmare. Norman is

out of breath as hes trying to recover.

CUT

A LONG SHOT of Norman walking towards the fridge then CUT to a

MID SHOT of Norman opening the fridge.

A CLOSE UP showing whats in the fridge, a MID SHOT of Norman

picking up a carton.

CUT

A CLOSE UP of Norman drinking

HOLD SHOT

Normans glances at whats inside the fridge.

CUT

CLOSE UP on whats inside the fridge.

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