Revisel Using Descriptive Words

One thing the writer could have done better was to use descriptive words.

These words can help paint a colorful picture of the events that the writer is

describing. Here is how a sentence from the Student Model could be improved

usi ng descri ptive words.

@ The only breeze I felt all day was the wind of passing trucks.

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Revise these sentences by using descriptive words. Use the Word

1. Litter patrol was work, but it was rewarding work.

Bank to help you.

2. The day began when I put a soda can into the bag.

3. Next I pulled a plastic bag from a shrub.

4. I turned around.

Revise the autobiographical narrative you wrote for page 22; Be sure to use

descriptive words. Do your writing on another sheet of paper.

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Writer's Companion'. UNIT 1

Lesson 3 Writing a Strong Lead