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CHAPTER II
LITERATURE REVIEW
This chapter presents the review of related literature underpinning the study.
It starts with the definition of writing, the process of writing, aspects of writing,
ESL/EFL writing, academic writing, problems in ESL/EFL writing, the IELTS
test, writing of IELTS academic module, and writing task 1 of IELTS academic
module.
2.1 Definition of Writing
Writing is defined as a “reflective activity that requires enough time to think
of the specific topic and to analyze and classify any background knowledge
(Chakraverty & Gautum, 2000, cited in Ahmed, 2010). Therefore, writers need a
suitable language to structure these ideas in the form of a coherent discourse.”
Writing is seen as “a complex activity reflecting the writers’ communicative
skills which is difficult to develop and learn, especially in EFL context”
(Shokrpour & Fallahzadeh, 2007). L1 writing is perceived as being composed of
three domains: a cognitive psychological perspective, a socio-cultural perspective
and a linguistic perspective (Myhill, 2009, cited in Ahmed, 2010).
In addition, Ahmed (2010) perceives EFL writing as a multi-dimensional
process composed of a cognitive activity affected by a number of linguistic and
contextual factors: EFL linguistic proficiency, instructional, psychological, socio-
cultural, and socio-political issues.
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Ahmed’s definition of EFL writing stated above indeed represents an ideal
picture. If the factors stated are well-addressed, this will make writing an
unforgettable experience. However, communication in written language is
difficult for students, even for teachers (Alwasilah, 2007).
In sum, writing is a skill demanding one’s ability to combine his/her
previous knowledge and specific topic using different perspectives to create a
coherent discourse. It is indeed not an easy process but it can be learned through a
lot of practice.
2.2 The Writing Process
Alwasilah (2005:6) proposes complete stages of writing process. He says
that in writing, students pass the prewriting, drafting, revising, editing, and
publishing stages. The processes should be more appreciated than the product
because to go through these processes spend much more times, energy, and
thinking than to evaluate the product.
Similarly, Harmer (2007: 4-5) suggests that the process of writing has four
main elements: planning, drafting, editing (reflecting and revising), and final
version. When planning, writers have to think about three main issues. In the first
place they have to consider the purpose of their writing since this will influence
(amongst other things) not only the type of text they wish to produce but also the
language they use, and the information they choose to include. Secondly,
experienced writers think of the audience they are writing for, since this will
influence not only the shape of the writing (how it is laid out, how the paragraphs
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are structured, etc.) but also the choice of language – whether, for example, it is
formal or informal in tone. Thirdly, writers have to consider the content structure
of the writing – that is, how best to sequence the facts, ideas, or arguments which
they have decide to include.
Harmer says that drafting is writing the first version. This first ‘go’ at a text
is often done on the assumption that it will be amended later. As the writing
process proceeds into editing, a number of drafts may be produced on the way to
the final version.
Editing is about reading through what have been written. Perhaps the order
of the information is not clear. Perhaps the way something is written is ambiguous
or confusing. Reflecting and revising are often helped by other readers (or editors)
who comment and make suggestions. Another reader’s reaction to a piece of
writing will help the author to make appropriate revisions.
Once writers have edited their draft, making the changes they consider to be
necessary, they produce their final version. This may look considerably different
from both the original plan and the first draft because things have changed in the
editing process, but the written text is now ready to send to its intended audience.
However, Harmer (2004: 5-6) defines that this process is not entirely
satisfactory because of two reasons. First, it tells us little about how much weight
is given to each stage, but, more importantly, by suggesting that the process of
writing is linear it misrepresents the way in which the majority of writers produce
written text. The process of writing is not linear, as indicated above, but rather
recursive – it can be applied repeatedly without any definite limit. This means that
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writers plan, draft, and edit but then often re-plan, re-draft, and re-edit. Even when
they get to what they think is their final draft they may find themselves changing
their mind and re-planning, drafting, or editing.
It is not much different from what Chaffee defines (2002: 18-21). He states
that despite the many different writing forms and contexts, the basic elements of
the writing process remain constant: generating ideas, defining a focus (main idea
or thesis), drafting, organizing ideas into various thinking patterns, revising,
editing, and proofreading. Then, collaborating, in which all these activities can be
woven through. These elements of writing process occur within the writing
situation as a result of creative and critical thinking.
In terms of the academic writing process, Bailey (2006: 39-61) suggests that
there are six important stages: planning essays, organizing paragraphs, organizing
the main body, introductions, conclusions, and rewriting and proof-reading. He
elaborates that planning gives essays coherent structure and, most importantly,
helps to ensure that they answer the question set. Although all essays need
planning, they are written in two different situations: as coursework, and in
exams. Clearly, under the time pressure of an exam, planning is more hurried, but
can also be more critical.
Organizing paragraphs to be well-organized ones help readers understand
the arguments. On the other hand, it helps writers to structure their ideas
effectively.
In the case of longer assignments it is often better to write the main body
before the introduction. With shorter essays, for example in exams such as
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Writing Task 1 of IELTS Academic Module, this is impractical, and the
introduction has to be written first.
Bailey adds that an introduction is crucial, not just for what it says about the
topic, but for what it tells the readers about the writer’s style and approach. Unless
we can introduce the subject clearly, the reader may not wish to continue.
Conclusion usually links with the starting points, i.e. the title. If the title is
asking a question, the answer should be contained in the conclusion. The reader
may look at the conclusion first to get a summary of the main arguments or points.
It may be tempting to hand in our work immediately after conclusion has
been finished. However, it is almost certain that it can be improved by being
revised. With longer assignments, it may be worth asking a classmate to read our
work and make criticism. Proof-reading is a vital final step, which can prevent
confusion or misunderstanding due to simple errors. Computer programs that
check spelling will not detect other common types of mistakes.
Brown (2007:348) defines that process writing approaches tend to be framed
in three of writing: prewriting, drafting, and revising. It is explained that the
prewriting stage encourages the generation or ideas, which can happen in
numerous ways: reading a passage extensively, skimming or scanning a passage,
conducting some outside research, brainstorming, listing, clustering, discussing a
topic or question, instructor-initiated questions and probes, and free writing. The
drafting and revising stages is the core of process writing. In the traditional
approaches to writing instruction, students are either given time in-class
compositions to write from start to finish within a class hour, or they are given a
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homework writing assignment. The first option gives no opportunity for
systematic drafting, and the second assumes that if students did not any drafting at
all, they would simply have to learn the tricks of the writing on their own. In a
process approach, drafting is viewed as an important and complex set of
strategies, the mastery of which takes time, patience, and trained instruction.
There are a number of strategies and skills applied to the revising process in
writing (Brown, 2007:348): getting started by adapting the free writing technique;
optimal monitoring of one’s writing without premature editing and diverted
attention to wording, grammar, etc.; peer-reviewing for content by accepting or
using classmate’s comments; using the instructor’s feedback; editing for
grammatical errors; “Read aloud” technique, it can be done in small groups or
pairs, students read their almost-final drafts to each other for a final check on
errors, flow of ideas, etc., and proof-reading.
Meanwhile, Shields (2010: 14-15) mentions the four stages of writing: pre-
writing, drafting, revising and editing. Pre-writing involves the preparation for
writing, such as reading the assignment carefully, analysing it, drawing up a rough
plan, sourcing the necessary data/information, reading widely and reading in-
depth, taking and making notes, discussing ideas and information with others,
refining the plan, and so on. Drafting are related with arranging ideas into some
kind of structure to give the writing a shape, writing paragraphs to connect ideas,
and thinking about form and function, namely the language and style that will be
used. Revising is about re-drafting or re-writing, and even re-planning. This is
rather more focused than writing the first draft. Editing is the final, very important
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step before the assignment is handed in. Here, checking all conventions, rules, and
instructions; checking spelling, punctuation, grammar and reference; and
considering the presentation or layout of the writing need to be done. However,
evidence of editing is often missing in students assignments that have been put
together in haste because of the alloted time.
Related to the process of writing, in terms of writing Task 1 of IELTS
Academic Module, McCarter (2006: 22-31) proposes several ‘golden rules’ that
can be applied by candidates when they are completing the task. Since it is a task
limited by minimum length and time, test takers should be effectively manage
their time.
The first thing to do is skimming the instructions and studying the diagram.
General statement about the data should be used to help interpret the data. The 20
minutes recommended is spent on doing: analyzing and planning for about 2-3
minutes, writing in 14-15 minutes, and checking in 2-3 minutes. However, based
on the researcher’s experience, it will be better to add 1-2 minute for checking our
writing.
In checking or editing stage, both the values and numbers on the vertical and
horizontal axes of a bar graph or line graph or pie slices of a pie chart should be
checked carefully. Besides, we should check the length of words; if we write less,
it will affect our score.
We also should comparing general trends, differences, etc. and support this
with information from the diagram. If more than one graph or chart or mixtures
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are presented, the information should be linked, but we have to avoid focusing too
closely on the details.
Lastly, we have to make sure that we write in paragraphs: an introduction,
one or two paragraphs from the body of the text, and a brief conclusion. If one of
these three parts is missing, the description or summary is flawed.
2.3 The Aspects of Writing
In a writing process, students should pay attention to the aspects of writing
in order that they are able to produce a good writing. The students’ writing
performance can be seen from the aspects of writing existed. Jacobs et al.
(1981:30) suggest that the aspects of writing consist of: content - knowledge,
substantive, through development of thesis and relevant to the topic, organization
- fluent expression, well-organized, logical sequencing and cohesive, vocabulary -
effective word/idiom choice and usage, word form mastery, language use -
effective complex constructions, understanding to certain agreements, preposition,
articles, pronouns, and the likes, and mechanics - spelling, punctuation, and
capitalization.
Meanwhile, Cohen (1994:328-329) defines that the aspects of writing which
are usually measured are: content - main ideas stated clearly and accurately,
organization - whether the writing is coherent and logical or not, vocabulary -
choices of words, use of idioms, and word forms, grammar - control of structure,
and mechanics - mastery of spelling and function.
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According to Brown (1999, cited in Brown 2007:357), six categories or
aspects of writing that can be evaluated are: content - thesis statement, related
ideas, development of ideas (through personal experience, illustration, facts,
opinions), use of description (and cause/effect, comparison/contrast), consistent
focus; organization - effectiveness of introduction, logical sequence of ideas,
conclusion, appropriate length; discourse - topic sentence, paragraph unity,
transitions, discourse markers, cohesion, rhetorical conventions, reference,
fluency, economy, variation; syntax; vocabulary; mechanics - spelling,
punctuation, citation of references (if applicable), neatness and spelling.
The criteria stated by different experts above cover all needed to produce a
good writing. The difference lies in how they are explained; some are simple,
some others are detailed.
Related to the topic of the recent study, the aspects of writing Task 1 of
IELTS academic module marked and assessed (Terry & Wilson, 2007: 7, Kaplan:
2009: 22) are: task fulfilment - how well the main points of the information have
been reported, coherence and cohesion - how well the information across the
answer has been organised and how the ideas within and between sentences have
been linked, vocabulary and sentence structure - how a range of language has
been used appropriately and accurately.
Cameron and Todd (2010: 164) explain the aspects assessed as follows:
appropriate, accurate and complete responses addressing all parts of the question,
ensuring minimum word limit (150 words), organisation and linkage of
information – logical flow, range (and appropriate use) of vocabulary, correct
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spelling and punctuation, grammatical accuracy, range of sentence structures
(simple, compound, complex).
2.4 English as Second Language (ESL)/English as Foreign Language (EFL)
Writing
Writing in a second language is indeed a complex, challenging, and difficult
process. This difficulty and complexity arise from the fact that writing includes
discovering a thesis, developing support for it, organizing, revising, and finally
editing it to ensure an effective, error-free piece of writing (Langan, 2005). These
second language (L2) writing issues usually overwhelm lower proficiency L2
writers, sometimes to the point of a complete breakdown in the writing process
(Bereiter & Scardimalia, 1987, in Alsamadani, 2010).
In a review of differences between first and second language writing, Silva in
Weigle (2005:36), states that writing in a second language tends to be “more
constrained, more difficult, and less effective” than writing in a first language;
second-language writers plan less, revise for content less, and write less fluently
and accurately than first-language writers. Moreover, Weigle (2005:38) defines
that while writing in a first language is a challenging, complex task, it is more so
in a second language.
Research on the topic of L1/L2 similarities and differences reveals
contradictory and inconsistent findings. Some researchers (e.g., Bitcher &
Basturkman, 2006; Hinkel, 2004; Lee, 2005; McCarthy et al., 2005; Martinez,
2005; Thorson, 2000 cited in Alsamadani, 2010) argue that the L1 writing process
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is different from L2 writing (cited in Farvardin and Zare-ee, 2009). Others (e.g.,
Matsumoto, 1995; Cook, 1998; Hirose & Sasaki, 1994; Kamimura, 2009, cited in
Alsamadani, 2010) emphasize the similarity between the two processes and
confirm a linear association between the L1 and L2 writing proceses.
Regardless of their similarities and differences, ESL/EFL writing has always
been considered an important skill in teaching and learning. As stated by Rao
(2007, cited in Ahmed, 2010) EFL writing is useful in two respects: First, it
motivates students thinking, organizing ideas, developing their ability to
summarise, analyze, and criticize. Second, it strengthens students’ learning,
thinking and reflecting on the English language.
Cumming and Krapels in Weigle (2005:35) say that second language
proficiency – defined as control over the linguistic elements of a second language
– and expertise in writing are different, although not unrelated abilities, that is,
second - language writers use many of the same writing processes in their second
language as in their first, and expertise in writing can transfer from the first to the
second language, given at least a certain level of language proficiency. However,
because of the constraints of limited second-language knowledge, writing in a
second language may be hampered because of the need to focus on language
rather content.
2.5 Academic Writing
Writing, either in the first or the second language, can be divided into free
writing and academic writing. Gibbons (2002) defines that academic writing is a
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term covering writing about any subject studied in colleges and universities such
as mathematics, biology, business, etc. It takes different form such as books,
journal articles, proposals, formal reports, pamphlets which employ specialized
vocabulary unique to each subject area; and use different styles documentation.
Academic writing is the kind of writing used in high school and college
classes. It is different from creative writing, which is the kind of writing done
when stories are written. Academic writing is also different from personal writing.
Creative writing and personal writing are informal; however, academic writing is
formal. Academic writing in English is probably different from academic in other
native languages. The words and grammar and also the way of organizing ideas
are probably different from other language speakers are used to (Oshima and
Hogue, 2007:3). Academic writing has many rules, called “writing conventions,”
about the appearance and format of the writing, and academic readers will expect
writers to use those conventions (Reid, 2000: 7).
As a discourse written by a college or university student, the purpose of
academic writing is to inform, instruct, enlighten and to pursuit and it relies on
studies and work published by other scholars. When we write academic paper, we
should imagine that we write not only for our supervisors but also for an
examiner, whose precise interest we will not know.
Primarily, whatever type of writing we wish to produce, we must answer
four questions if we want our message to be clear. Shields (2010: 8-9) explains the
four Qs in academic writing as follows:
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• Who (our reader): Who will read our work? The main reader will be the
tutor(s) of the course or the examiner, who will most likely have had a hand in
setting the assignment. The reader will therefore be a person who is
knowledgeable about the content matter of the assignment and who has
designed the task with certain expectations in mind.
• Why (our purpose): Why do we write? The most obvious reason is that we have
to! Written assignments are still the most common way to assess what students
know and what they can do. We write because we want to get the qualification
that proves we have learnt something and can communicate this. Importantly,
however, the act of writing is a learning process in itself. When we approach
writing critically, we engage in a thinking and learning process. Moreover,
understanding what we achieve when we successfully complete an assignment
will give us a sense of satisfaction and purpose.
• What (the content): What do we write? The answer to this question is of course
the content and context of our writing. Different types of writing, and even
different types of essay, require us to select information in a discriminating and
appropriate way. Until we have understood an essay question, we will not
know what information is most relevant.
• How (the structure and style): How do we write? The answer refers to the
way information is organised or structured and the way or style in which it is put
together, and this may vary from one type of writing to another. All academic
writing is formally structured in a recognisable style, and this must be consistent
and appropriate for the particular type of writing. Nevertheless, each type of
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writing must comply with the academic standards set by most courses, which
require a more or less formal style as well as accurate grammar, spelling and
punctuation.
Shields agrees with Chaffe et. al. (2002: 7-9) who state that most writing
situations are shaped by considering the purpose, audience, subject, and writer.
Indeed, every act of writing has a purpose. When we complete a paper for college
course, we hope to show our professor that we can make significant statements
about concepts relevant to the class. In a business setting, our aim is to transmit
information or request in a memo or a report; in our social life, we want to
communicate with friends through letters or e-mail; in our private life, we write in
our journal so that we can later recall our activities and feelings. A crucial part of
becoming an accomplished writer is maintaining a clear sense of the specific goals
of whatever piece we are working on.
Moreover, thoughtful writing is shaped by consideration of its audience, the
intended reader or readers. Although there are some instances when a writer only
for himself/herself (a diary, for example), he/she probably intends most of his/her
writing to be read by someone else: the person receiving his/her letter, the co-
workers reading his/her memo, or the instructor grading his/her paper. The more
the writers think about their audience, the more concerned they will be about
making themselves clear and the better their writing will become. Then writing
has to be about someone or something – a subject. Much of college writing
involves responding to ideas presented in textbooks, class lectures, or research
resources. So, the writing task is usually to demonstrate the understanding of the
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ideas presented and also to apply, analyze, synthesize, or evaluate the ideas being
expressed. The quality of the writing, therefore, depends on the quality of the
writers’ thinking as they process ideas and present them in order to communicate
their own informed perspective on the subject.
The last, of course, any writing situation calls for a writer, and the
characteristics of the writer affect what is written and how it is produced.
Experienced writers usually approach writing with more abilities and confidences
than the inexperienced.
2.6 Problems in ESL/EFL Writing
Numerous studies about the problems ESL/EFL learners face when they
write have been conducted. A 1998-2002 study by Izzo (cited in Newfields,
2003) revealed some of the most common sentence-level errors of Japanese
university students writing in English. He noted how many universities EFL
writing courses did not teach academic writing skills. As a result students’ essays
tended to lack organization and contained features inappropriate for academic
writing. Previously, another study by Hirose (1998, cited in Newfields, 2003)
showed how Japanese EFL students had difficulty in writing cohesive paragraphs
in English since most high school EFL classes focused on sentence-level
translations.
Fujioka (2001, cited in Newfields, 2003) also surveyed how Asian EFL
students acquired academic writing skills. Most respondents in her study indicated
that their writing instruction had a strong grammar focus and concerned with
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paragraph-level form. Critical thinking skills were seldom taught. The value of
extensively reading academic papers was underscored by Fujioka. Extensive
reading might enable respondents to gradually gain a sense of what the features of
academic writing.
While teaching academic writing to Asian EFL students, Newfields (2003)
noticed certain problems came up constantly. He said that there were seven
consistent problems: the first problem is inappropriate genre – many Asian EFL
students fail to understand how academic writing is a distinct genre; too often they
write the same way they speak – in a casual tone. The second one is errors of
logic – if students focus on sentence level grammar, they often disregard discourse
level features such as cohesion and coherence; four particularly frequent logical
errors in student writing are: overgeneralization, contradiction, errors of causality,
and supported claims.
The third problem faced by Asian EFL students is lack of balance –
academic essay should strive for balance a semblance of objectivity and fairness
but many students writers have a tendency to present just one perspective and/or
rely on a single information source. The fourth is redundancy/superfluosity – if a
composition is required to have minimum word length, excessive redundancy is
often to occur, some students repeats information needlessly to fill up space.
The fifth problem is time management issues – writing semester-length
research report is like running a marathon, it is essential to maintain a steady pace
when working on full-length report. The sixth problem is plagiarism – some
students do not seem to realize how much writing is like a fingerprint; it is usually
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easy to detect passages from other sources. The seventh problem is lacking of
clear citations – the custom of keeping detailed citations when writing academic
reports is by no means universal in Asia. Student writers often omit references
entirely or else neglect key details.
Similar facts were also found in many non-English speaking countries, such
as in Iran, Korea, Vietnam, and other Asian countries. A study conducted by
Shokrpour and Fallahzadeh (2007) revealed that related to writing, the students at
Shiraz University of Medical Sciences had difficulties in vocabulary, spelling,
punctuation, cohesive devices and coherence. It is not much different from EFL
writing problems in Korea. Kim (2005) found that his respondents faced
difficulties mostly in organizing their writing, expressing ideas related to a given
topic – of contents, and grammar and word usage or collocation expression.
Thuy (2008) reported that Vietnamese students tend to present their ideas
inductively and indirectly in L2 since inductive and indirect presentation is
frequently conducted in their L1 as one popular culture practice. It is a fact that
cultural aspects of the L2 writing setting can create difficulties for learners
coming from a different academic culture.
Furthermore, Mojica (2010) who observed twenty-six EFL students coming
from different nationalities such as Korean, Turkish, Thai, Chinese, and
Mandarin, noted that vocabulary and grammar were not the only problems
encountered by the students. There were other problems related to aspects of
language and skills of writing, as organizing ideas, addressing the prompt, and
giving supporting details.
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Ahmed (2010) said that despite various approaches to the teaching of
writing having evolved from different teaching methods, tackling EFL writing is
still one of the most challenging areas for teachers and students. Egyptian student
teachers of English at Helwan Faculty of Education who have to pass many
academic courses in English still face problems in cohesion and coherence of their
English essay writing.
It can be concluded that the problems of ESL/EFL writing encountered by
ESL/EFL learners are quite similar. They have problems not only with language
skills (spelling, vocabulary, grammar and syntax) but also with writing skills
(punctuation, cohesive devices, coherence and organization).
Related to IELTS, a large number of studies have been also carried out
investigating issues related to writing section of the IELTS test. For example,
Moore and Morton (1999) conducted a research on authenticity in the IELTS
Academic Module Writing Test. From the findings, they speculated that the type
of writing prescribed in IELTS Task 2 items may have more in common with
certain public non-academic genres – the newspaper editorial and letter to the
editor – than the characteristic of the academic domain.
Mickan and Slater (2003) investigated candidates' interpretation of prompts
and compared the written responses of English background speakers with those of
IELTS intending candidates, who were not English background speakers. Their
findings suggest implications for item writers and for teachers preparing
candidates for IELTS examinations.
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O'Loughlin and Wigglesworth (2003) conducted a study on task difficulty in
the IELTS Academic Writing Task 1. The study examined firstly, the extent to
which the difficulty of the task is affected by the amount of information provided
to the candidate and secondly, the extent to which the difficulty of the task is
affected by the presentation of the information to the candidate. The findings
indicated that there were no substantial differences in difficulty between the tasks,
either in terms of the amount of information presented or in terms of the
differences in presentation of the tasks. Brown (2003) wanted to find out whether
handwriting and neatness have any impact on the overall judgment of the IELTS
writing quality of the candidates or not. The findings of her study clearly indicated
that in general the quality of handwriting in IELTS did not have an impact on the
scores awarded to essays, and that increased legibility results in higher ratings.
Despite numerous studies on IELTS Writing, in Indonesia there is no
research on students’ problems in completing the Writing tasks of IELTS.
Instigated by the fact, the researcher conducted a study on exploring students’
problems in accomplishing Writing Task 1 of IELTS Academic Module.
2.7 IELTS Test
IELTS, the International English Language Testing System, is designed to
assess the language ability of candidates who want to study or work where
English is the language of communication. IELTS is recognized by over 6,000
organizations worldwide, including universities employers, professional bodies,
immigration authorities and other government agencies (IELTS Guide, 2011).
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IELTS is internationally focused in its content. For example, a range of
native-speaker accents (North American, Australian, New Zealand, and British) is
used in the Listening test, and all standard varieties of English are accepted in
candidates’ responses in all parts of the world. This four-skill test has become the
world’s most popular English language proficiency test (IELTS Guide, 2011).
IELTS has become increasingly recognized as a “secure, valid and reliable
indicator of true to life ability to communicate in English for education,
immigration and professional accreditation” (UCLES, 2007, cited in Abe, 2008;
Griffiths, 2011). For overseas candidates wishing to study in tertiary institutions in
the United Kingdom or Australia, in particular, IELTS is the most widely
recognized assessment of English language proficiency (Tucker and van Bemmel,
2006).
There are two modules in IELTS test and candidates can choose either
general training or academic module depended on their purpose of taking the test.
Candidates planning university study should take the IELTS Academic Module,
whereas those who wish to enroll in vocational training or secondary school
should take the IELTS General Training Module. The two modules differ only in
the reading and writing subtests; listening and speaking subtests are the same.
The IELTS test comprises four parts, called ‘modules’ or ‘subtests:
Listening, Reading, Writing, and Speaking module. The time allotted to each part
is not the same, expect for Reading and Writing modules. The candidates have
about 30 minutes for completing Listening subtest, 11-14 minutes for Speaking,
Reading, and Writing tasks should be finished by the candidates in the same
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amount of time, that is 60 minutes for each. So, the entire test takes around two
hours and 45 minutes.
Candidates receive scores on a Band Scale from 1 to 9 for each skill tested.
They are equal importance. These four scores are then averaged and rounded to
produce an Overall Band Score (Hashemi and Thomas, 2011: 6). IELTS scores
(bands) of Academic Module have been used to determine whether the applicants
have sufficiency skills to follow studies at an undergraduate or a postgraduate
level in English speaking countries. To get a clear picture, the IELTS 9-band scale
(Hashemi & Thomas, 2011: 7; IELTS Guide, 2011: 12) is stated here.
IELTS Band Scores
9 Expert User – Has fully operational command of the language: appropriate,
accurate and fluent with complete understanding.
8 Very good user - Has fully operational command of the language with only
occasional unsystematic inaccuracies and inappropriaces. Misunderstandings may
occur in unfamiliar situations. Handles complex detailed argumentation well.
7 Good user - Has fully operational command of the language, though with
occasional inaccuracies and misunderstandings in some situations. Generally
handles complex language well and understand detailed reasoning.
6 Competent user – Has generally effective command of the language despite
some inaccuracies, inappropriacies and misunderstandings. Can use and
understand fairly complex language, paricularly in familiar situations.
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5 Modest user – Has partial command of the language, coping with overall
meaning in most situations, though is likely to make many mistakes. Should be
able to handle basic communication in own field.
4 Limited user – Basic competence is limited to familiar situations. Has frequent
problems in understanding and expressions. Is not able to use complex language.
3 Extremely limited user – Conveys and understands only general meaning in
very familiar situations. Frequent breakdowns in communication occur.
2 Intermittent user – No real communication is possible except for the most
basic information using isolated words or short formulae in familiar situations and
to meet immediate needs. Has great difficulty understanding spoken and written
English.
1 Non-user – Essentially has no ability to use the language beyond possibly a
few isolated word.
0 Did not attempt the test – No assessable information provided.
2.8 Writing of IELTS Academic Module
The Academic Writing Module consists of two different writings and whole
paper takes one hour. Candidates do not have any choice of tasks. Task 1,
descriptive essay, must be a minimum 150 words and it is recommended that
candidates spend no longer than 20 minutes on this. Task 2, argumentative essay,
must be at least 250 words and carries two third of the marks, so it is
recommended that candidates spend 40 minutes on this. Under length answers
lose marks.
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The Task 1, prompt is always type of diagram. Candidates have to write
about the information shown, describing the main features, trends, or differences.
They have to refer closely to the diagram, where relevant; illustrate their main
point with figures. Candidates are not required to give any explanation for the data
or opinion (Jakeman and McDowell: 59), but have to describe only the
information given in the task (Terry and Wilson, 2007: 7).
Task types may involve describing information from a graph, chart, or table,
a flow chart or process diagram, a plan or a map, a diagram showing how
something works, a diagram showing or comparing objects, or a set of small
diagrams (Terry and Wilson, 2005:6; McCarter: 2008:6; McCarter and Ash, 2003:
7).
Task 1 is assessed in terms of task fulfillment – how well candidates have
reported illustrated the main points of the information, coherence and cohesion –
how well candidates have organized the information across their answer and how
they have linked the ideas within and between sentences, vocabulary and sentence
structure – how appropriately and accurately candidates have used a range of
language.
In Task 2 candidates are require to discuss an issue, question or opinion of
general interest, and to give their own point of view. The topics do not require
them to have special knowledge, but they have to be able to present ideas on
general issues. The prompt is usually a background statement introducing the
topic, followed by an instruction to the candidates. This instruction tells them how
they should approach the topic and it is very important that they spend time
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analyzing exactly what they are expected to write about (Terry and Wilson, 2007:
7).
Instruction types include giving and justifying opinion, comparing opposing
opinion, evaluating advantages and disadvantages, comparing arguments for and
against, analyzing problems and suggesting solutions, and answering direct
questions on an issue. For Task 2 candidates are expected to write in a formal
style, appropriate for an academic exam.
Task 2 is assessed in terms of argument, ideas and evidence – how well
candidates have been able to present relevant ideas and opinions and develop
these into a well-supported argument or point of view, communicative quality –
how well candidates well candidates have organized and linked their points and
ideas, vocabulary and sentence structure – how appropriately candidates have
used a range of language.
The scores on the criteria are combined to give candidates a Task Band for
each task. These are then combined to give them Final Band for Writing. There is
no half band for this module.
2.9 Writing Task 1 of IELTS Academic Module
Writing Task 1 of IELTS Academic Module contributes to the whole band
of Writing. Although it is stated that Task 2 has more weight than Task 1, they
complete each other since the scores of both tasks are combined to give candidates
the band of Writing. To get a good overall mark for the IELTS Academic Writing,
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both tasks have to be well-answered. Therefore, any students’ problem with
completing not only Task 2 but also Task 1 should be coped with.
Writing Task 1 is not an easy part of the test. Describing a graph well in 20
minutes is not something most people can do straight away whether they are
English speakers or not. The fact is that it is in a foreign language for candidates
as well does not help.
Basically Writing Task 1 of IELTS Academic Module is an information
transfer task related to the factual content of a graph(s), chart(s), table(s) or
diagram(s) or process(es). It can be combinations of these inputs.
2.9.1 Types of graphs
As stated previously, IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 asks candidates to
describe, summarize, compare or contrast information given in a graph or
diagram. It can be a bar chart, pie chart, table, or line graph.
It shoud be noted that the function of many graphs is to describe a trend so
we have to be sure that we describe the trends (ieltshelpnow, 2011). A trend is
how values change generally over time and it is important to describe the changes
along with some of the individual values. We do not need to analyse the data, for
instance they do not need to give reasons why figures are low or high. Sometimes,
when there is more than one graph, there is a relationship between the two and we
can bring in some comparisons but more than this is not necessary. In the same
way, no spesialised knowledge is needed or wanted nor our opinions.
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One important issue with the IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 is how much
detail to include in our report. This depends really on how much detail there is in
the question. If there is only one graph and it does not have much numerical data
in it, then candidates will be expected to include all or nearly all of the numerical
detail. If, however, there are two graphs, both of which are very complicated with
a lot of values,we will not be expected to include everything as they only have
about 20 minutes and approximately 150 words to do the job. What we have to do
is to include a selection of what we feel is the most important and significant
detail that needs to be included to accurately describe the graph. Here the types of
graphs are explained.
Bar Charts
Bar charts, also known as bar graphs (Kaplan, 2009: 131), are similar to
line graphs in that they have two axes and are useful for showing something has
changed over a given period of time, especially when there are significant
changes. Bar graphs consist of rectangular bars, which can be orientated
horizontally or vertically, with the lengths proportional to the data values that they
represent. They are typically used for comparing two or more values.
Basically, with a bar chart, candidates need to describe the bars and their
values (Cole, 2011). When describing a bar chart we have to first decide in what
order to describe the bars, highest value to lowest value or lowest value to highest
value. It may be a mixture of this. If there are many bars, we can sometimes group
together for description one or two or three bars which have similar or the same
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values. If there are many and we cannot group them, then just describe the ones
that are the most significant.
Here is a sample:
Figure 2.1 An example of bar chart
Cole (2011) says that the first step to do is to analyse the graph carefully by
looking at the y (vertical) and x (horizontal) axes one by one. It is done to see
whether there are any patterns and/or exceptions. It can be very confusing to look
at the graph as a whole. As we do this, it is a good idea to look at the extremes as
these are almost always key details. Besides, since there is always more than one
way to organise a report, it is better for us to choose the simplest option.
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Here the main choices we have are: going through each type of
accomodation (the y axis option) and going through the countries (the x axis
option). It seems to be easier for us to use the countries. There are only four of
them and three of those are very similar and it seems natural and easy to group
England, Scotland and Wales together. Northern Ireland is the odd one out.
This sample answer is not perfect. However, we can see how it is logically
organised, grouping similar information together. There is one paragraph for
England, Scotland and Wales showing the main pattern started by noting the most
evident feature of the chart. England is used as a model and then the situation in
Wales and Scotland is compared. Then there is a separate paragraph for Northern
Ireland, highlighting the key exception.
This bar chart shows the results of a survey on whether people in England,
Scotland, Northern Ireland and Wales stayed in hotels, caravans, campsites or
self-catering accommodation when they went on holiday in 2010.
The most striking feature of the chart is that in all four countries the majority
of people chose to stay in hotels. This figure was highest in England at around
55%, almost twice the number of people who cooked for themselves (27% of
the sample) and far greater than the number who stayed in campsites (12%)
and finally caravans (6%). A similar pattern was repeated for the Scots and the
Welsh. In each case, around 50% of holidaymakers went to hotels with around
30% in self-catering apartments. The one difference being that caravan
holidays at 12% were twice as popular than camping holidays in Scotland,
while the opposite pattern could be seen in Wales.
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The one country that shows a different pattern is Northern Ireland. It is
notable how there just over 30% of the population chose caravan holidays in
preference to self-catering accommodation and camping (both around 12%).
(182 words)
Pie Charts
Pie charts are circular charts divided into sectors or ‘pie slices’, usually
illustrating percentages. The size of pie slice shows the relative quantity of data it
represents. Together, the slices create a full circle. They are commonly used in in
the business world and the mass media, and are less common in scientific or
technical publications (Kaplan, 2009: 129).
Pie charts are relatively straightforward as they usually only have a few
sections though it is not always the case. We need to describe the segments and
their values. If there are many then we just describe the ones that are the most
significant. The values are often expresses in percentages but not always, so we
have to be careful about the scale we use. A sample is given here:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and
make comparisons where relevant.
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Figure 2.2 Example of pie chart
The first step to do is identifying the main points of the two charts (Cole, 2011).
This is not just an important part of the task, it will also help us write our
description. The main points are normally obvious. Sometimes they are so
obvious that candidates ignore them. Here we get three important parts: there are
8 activities for each year, 7 of 8 activities are the same, and there are a number of
differences in popularity between the two years.
More than that, there are 16 different figures you can include. This is too
many. The task is to select and report the most important details. This will include
naming all the activities, but not all the numbers. To do this, we should look for:
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the biggest number and the smallest number. These are generally important details
to include. We should also consider what changes between the two charts such as
what has gone up, what has gone down, what has not changed, and what is new;
not least because the task asks us to make comparisons. Then, we get these
details: walking is most popular in both periods; yoga disappears and weightlifting
is new; swimming doubles; aerobics, jogging and cycling all fall; and soccer and
camping do not change much.
As we write our paragraphs, we shoud think of three key ideas: highlight
the main points – they come first, group similar ideas together and find a logical
structure to present the points. Therefore, we have this sample answer:
These two pie charts show the changes in popularity of different leisure
activities in the United States of America between 1999 and 2009. We can see
that the most popular leisure activities were almost the same in both
periods, but there were a number of differences in popularity between the
various activities.
It is clear that walking was the most popular activity in both 1999 and
2009, with around 30% of Americans saying that they preferred it. Also, yoga
was no longer among the preferred activities in 2009, but
weightlifting was chosen by 10% of people.
The second most popular activity was soccer at just under 20% in both
years, a figure that was matched by swimming in 2009, having almost
doubled in popularity over the previous decade. Most of the other activities
became less popular over the same period of time, with cycling, jogging and
aerobics all falling by at least a half to under 10%. The one exception to this
trend was camping which stayed almost unchanged at around 9%.
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Line Graphs
Line graphs can be used to show how something changes over time (Cole,
2011; Kaplan, 2009). They have an x-axis (horizontal) and a y-axis (vertical).
Usually the x-axis shows the time period and the y-axis shows what is being
measured.
The function of a line graph is to describe a trend pictorially. Therefore,
we should try and describe the trend in it. If there are many lines in the graph(s),
then just generally describe the trend. If there is only one or two, then we should
use more detail. So, we describe the movement of the line(s) of the graph giving
numerical detail at the important points of the line.
Figure 2.3 Example of a line graph
Sample answer:
The line graph shows estimated sales of gold in Dubai for 12 months in
2002 in millions of dirhams. There were two main seasons for gold sales.
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The main season for sales is in the December to May period. Sales were
consistently above 200 million dirhams per month, rising sharply to a peak of 350
million dirhams in March. However, for the next four months, sales declined
steadily, reaching an annual low of 120 million dirhams in July.
In August, there was a sudden increase. Sales almost doubled, rising from
120 million dirhams in July to 210 million dirhams in August. This was followed by
a drop in September, the July figure.
From September to October, sales recovered, from 120 to 180 million. In
October and November, sales remained steady, and there was a small increase in
December to 190 million dirhams.
In conclusion, the main sales period is in the early part of the year,
slumping in the summer, except for a sudden increase in August.
(167 words)
Tables
Tables contain words and numbers, displayed in columns or boxes to
illustrate a set of facts and the relationships among them. Describing a table is
almost the most challenging in IELTS writing task (Cole, 2011; Kaplan, 2009). As
we can see in the sample task below, there are usually a lot of data we have from a
table. We cannot describe all of the data, and do not try to.
The table below shows the in which sector of the economy different age groups
were employed.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features,
making comparisons where relevant
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Figure 2.4 Example of table
We cannot describe all of the data since there are 30 different pieces of
information here. Moreover, we should remember the task is to summarise and to
select the main featutes of the table. This means leaving some items of
information out.
The first step to do is dividing and conquering by looking at the table in
columns and rows. This way makes us more esaily identify the key details and
comparisons. The key is to understand that we have two sets of data: the data from
the rows (across) and the data from the columns (down). The main features are
typically high numbers, low numbers, the biggest contrast, and the closest
similarities.
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Process diagram
The process diagram is in many ways the odd one out in academic task 1
and it requires some different language from the other task types. Candidates
often encounter difficulties in describing a process.
Every stage of the process one by one should be described and they are
connected by using linking words and it should be mentioned whether or not the
stages are being performed at the same time. Alternative stages should also be
noticed, either stage A or B is performed.
The first step in learning to write about a process diagram is to see where
the process starts and ends. Sometimes it is evident, frequently it is less so. The
next point is try and understand how the process work. Typically, there will be
some problem in understanding the diagram: it is not always the case that
everything is in a natural order. The key is to stop and think, and look. This is a
visual task and we need to look at all the visual clues.
In the diagram below, we see the following details: there are five parties
involved (the pictures – Who), there are seven stages in the process (the numbers
– How many), some of the arrows point in two different directions – this need to
be explained, item 4 seems to be out of order as it is next to item 1.
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Figure 2.5 Example of process diagram
In the diagram, the process falls into two parts: the customer receives her goods
and the merchant gets his money. We should do the logical thing and divide or
description into two main paragraphs. One to describe the autorisation process
until the customer gets her/his goods and one for the payment process until the
merchant is paid.
The process will normally be an everyday event that everyone is familiar
with. We should not need any spesialised language. Sometimes we are given some
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topic vocabulary, as in this example; but we have to be careful of two points:
trying to vary the language and not copying the language incorrectly.
Some of the most important language we need is vocabulary to say in what
order things happen. It is important to have some variation. Some very basic
options are; next, then, after, before, once. Besides, a key grammatical area is very
often the passive. We use this when it is not important who “does” the action.
Sample answer:
This diagram shows the different stages in the process of making a purchase with
a credit card. We can see from it that there are five different parties involved in
such a transaction and there are seven different steps until the merchant
receives payment.
The first step is that the customer offers to pay for the goods by credit card. At
that point, the merchant has to request for the payment to be authorised by the
credit card organisation, which must also request authorisation in turn from the
consumer’s bank. Once that authorisation has been received, the merchant can
then release the goods to the customer.
The merchant, however, does not receive the money for the transaction until it
has paid a fee to the credit card organisation. After that has been paid, the
consumer’s issuing bank will transfer the money for the transaction to the
merchant’s own bank, which will then credit the merchant’s bank account with
the amount of the purchase less the credit card fee.
(166 words)
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2.9.2 Assessment Criteria
The IELTS Academic Writing Task 1 will be marked in four areas.
Candidates will get a mark from 1 to 9 on Task Achievement, Coherence and
Cohesion, Lexical Resources and Grammatical Accuracy. The final band for Task
1 will be effectively an average of the four marks awarded in these areas. It is said
that Task 1 is less important than Task 2, and to calculate the final writing mark,
more weight is assigned to the Task 2 mark than to the mark of Task 1. However,
to get a good overall mark for the IELTS Academic Writing, both tasks have to be
well-answered. These are four criteria assessed in Task 1:
Task Achievement
This criterion assesses how appropriately, accurately and relevantly the
response fulfils the requirements set out in the task, using the minimum of 150
words. Academic Writing Task 1 is a writing which has a defined input and a
largely predictable output. It is basically an information-transfer task which relates
narrowly to the factual content of an input diagram and not to speculated
explanation that lie outside the given data.
In other words, Rooy (2010: 85) concludes that task achievement is a
measure of candidates’ ability to summarise information presented in graphic
form in the time given (20 minutes is recommended), using at least 150 words.
Related to this criterion, Rooy suggests the candidates to ask themselves whether
they have summarised significant features of the graphic text, have included key
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data to support and complete their summary, have completed sentences and
avoided using bullet points, and whether they have written at least 150 words.
Coherence and Cohesion
Coherence and cohesion help organise the text. Cohesion refers to the micro
level of the text – how words are linked to form sentences, and how sentences are
joined together logically to form the argument. This is achieved in several ways
(Rooy, 2010: 85): agreement betwen subject and verb; with number (singular and
plural forms); agreement with case (word forms before and after verbs, and
possessive forms); and gender forms. These are all important features of language
which help the reader follow a written text; the sequence and order of tense, and
verb forms from different tenses, help organise information in a text; articles (a/an
and the) assist the reader follow the participants in a text (for example: a man, the
man, men); pronouns help the reader follow the participants and the arguments in
a text; and conjunctions (joining words) are important for linking ideas, causes
and results, giving reasons, presenting conditions and contingencies, and
explaining and clarifying statements.
Cole (2011) defines that cohesion is how sentences and parts of sentences
link together. It matters because if our sentences are cohesive, our writing
becomes easier to read and we become able to write more sophisticated English
by linking ideas together. More than that, it is an important factor in how a writing
is graded in IELTS Academic Writing, as with coherence it is 25% of the total
score.
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There are a variety of ways to make our writing more cohesive. One very
useful piece of advice is to make sure that each sentence starts with a reference
back to the previous sentence, for instance in this example:
There are many people who claim that global warming is the most significant
threat facing us today. They argue this because it is a danger not only to the
current generation, but also to the generations to come. Indeed, it is this threat to
our future that is of most concern. For instance, some research shows that one
effect of global warming might be there will not be enough food to feed the world
in the near future. If that did happen…
If we look at how this links together, we see:
many people they (pronoun)
that global warming is … this (pronoun)
claim argue (synonym)
not only but also (a matching pair)
current generation generations to come (repetition)
a danger this threat (pronoun + synonym)
Indeed (linking phrase for further explanation)
generations to come future
global warming global warming (repetition of technical phrase)
there will be not enough food that (pronoun)
One very common mistake is to overuse certain linking phrases such as
“furthermore” and “moreover”. This can be a problem because they are frequently
misused: and to link badly is not any better than not linking at all. A secondary
problem is that by only using such phrases, candidates forget to use pronouns
(especially “this”) for linking (Cole: 2010).
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Coherence refers to the organisation of the whole text – the macro level.
This means the structure of the response – the introduction, body paragraphs and
the concluding paragraph. It also means how paragraphs are organised – the topic
sentence, supporting and developing sentences and concluding sentence. The use
of transition signals (linking words) is important as theysignal the stages and
sequence of the processes and procedures, narratives, and the logical development
of ideas.
Meanwhile, Kies (2011) states that coherence is product of many different
factors, which combine to make every paragraph, every sentence and every phrase
contribute to the meaning of the whole piece. Coherence in writing is much more
difficult to sustain than coherent speech simply because writers have no nonverbal
clues to inform them if their message is clear or not. Therefore, writers must make
their patterns of coherence much more explicit and much more carefully planned.
Coherence itself is the product of two factors – paragraph unity and sentence
cohesion.
Kies adds that paragraph unity can be achieved if a writer ensures two
things. First, the paragraph must have a single generalization that serves as the
focus of attention, that is a topic sentence. Second, a writer must control the
content of every other sentence in the paragraph’s body such that (a) it contains
more specific information thatn the topic sentence and (b) it maintains the same
focus of attention as the topic sentence. Furthermore, to achieve cohesion, the link
of one sentence to the next, should consider the following techniques: repetition,
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synonymy, antonymy, pro-forms, collocation, enumeration, parallelism, and
transitions.
Lexical Resource
Lexical resource refers explicitly to the use of words. This means the range
of vocabulary across academic topic areas and paraphrasing to easily and clearly
summarise and describe a variety of graphic texts with an appropriate tone and
level of formality. Besides, the command of word forms (for example, machine,
mechanic, mechanisation, mechanical, mechanisem mechanically); and the correct
spelling (the number of spelling mistakes is a clear indicator of language ability).
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
This refers to candidates’ command of the grammar of English and the rate
of error, to how many mistakes the candidates make. Rate of error is another key
indicator of English proficiency. How well the candidates manage active and
passive voice structure; adjective/noun and verb/adverb choices for describing
information; and the correct use of prepositions of time and place, and others.
Grammatical range also refers to the range of sentence types and the length
of these sentences. It is related to whether candidates use a mis of simple
compound and complex sentences of varying lengths,
Braverman (2008: 32) reminds candidates that when IELTS examiners
grade the candidates’ Academic Writing Task 1, they look for this structure:
introduction (1 paragraph), body (2-3 paragraphs) and conclusion (1 paragraph).
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The introduction should describe the purpose of the report and say what overall
trends seen. For example, if the trend in the graph is rising or falling, it should be
mentioned. Candidates need to remember that they are describing a graph to
someone who does not see it, so their words must draw the picture. It includes
telling what the graph is about, its dates and location.
The body should describe the most important trends, while all information is
summarized to avoid unnecessary details. For example, if there is a graph that has
two peaks, they should be depicted clearly; when those peaks appear and what the
peak values are. How many distinctive features the diagram has should be noticed
and the information is divided into paragraphs; one paragraph for one feature (or a
group of similar features). Paragraphs should be linked by sentences that logically
connect them to one another. The last, the conclusion, should sum up the global
trends shown and compare them if possible. It means selecting what is important,
organizing it, then comparing or contrasting it.
Candidates’ opinions should not appear anywhere in the report. They should
not include other information that does not appear in the graph because that kind
of writing can be (and probably will be) penalized.
1.9.3 Assessing Academic Writing Task 1
It will be very important to know how the way of assessment. Here is the
example of how a writing is assessed (Terry and Wilson: 2005: 155-156):
You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The chart below gives information about the percentage of the adult population
who were overweight in four different countries in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
(Figures are given for the year, or the nearest year available.)
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and
makea comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.
SAMPLE ANSWER A
The chart gives information about the percentage of the adult population who were
overweight in Japan, Australia and the US in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
In 1980 Japan had 2% overweight, Finland had 7%, Australia about 8% and the US
15%. In 1990 Japan was still 2%, Finland 8%, Australia had about 11% and the USA
24%. In 2000 maybe all the countries had more fast food because Japan was 3%,
Finland 11%, Australia 21% and USA 31%.
(79 words)
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Assessment:
Although this answer does not have any grammar or vocabulary mistakes it would
get a low IELTS band because:
• it is significantly underlength (it would lose a lot of marks for this)
• the introduction is copied from the rubric with only slight changes
• it is not clear what the figures relate to
• there is no focus on trends, the figures are just listed
• there is no comparison between the figures
• there is little organisation: no paragraphs, no signals, no linking
• the candidate tries to explain the information in the last sentence
• there is no summarising statement
• the range of grammar and vocabulary is extremely limited’
• there is a lot of repetition
SAMPLE ANSWER B This chart shows changes in the proportion of overweight people in the adult
population of countries in four different regions in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
First of all we can see that Japan had the lowest proprortion of overweight
adults in all three given years. It also showed the smallest change across the
period, rising only 1% to reach 3% by 2000.
Both Finland and Australia had over 5% of adults overweight in 1980, but the
increase in figures for Australia was much greater in the following decades,
rising to 11% in 1990 and almost doubling Finland at 21% in 2000.
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However, the highest proportion of overweight adults in each of the given
year was in the USA. The percentage rose from 15% in 1980 to a dramatic
31% in 2000.
Overall, the chart shows that the proportion of overweight adults is rising in
all four countries, but the scale of the problrm is greater and the rate of
increase much higher in Australia and the US. (167 words)
Assessment:
This answer would get a high IELTS band because:
• it is over the minimum word length
• it has a praphrased introduction
• it is clear what the figures refer to
• it focuses on the main trends and supports these with figures
• it groups and compares the main sets of data
• the answer is clearly organised using paragraphs, signals, linkers
• there is a clear summarising statement
• the answer describes the information rather than trying to explain it
• a good range of vocabulary and grammar is used
• there is no repetition
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2.9.4 IELTS Task 1 Writing Band Descriptors (Public Version)
To get a clear picture of IELTS Task 1 Writing score, the band descriptors
(Academic Module only) issued by the British Council, IDP, IELTS Australia,
and University of Cambridge ESOL Examinations is stated here.
Band Task Achievement Coherence and Cohesion
Lexical Resource
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
9 • fully satisfies all the requirements of the task
• clearly presents a fully developed response
• uses coherence in such a way that it attracts no attention
• uses a wide range of vocabulary with
very natural and sophisticated control of
lexical features; rare minor errors occur only as ‘
• uses a wide range of structures with full
flexibility and accuracy; rare minor errors
occur only as ‘slips’
8 • covers all requirements of the task sufficiently
• presents, highlights and illustrates key features / bullet points clearly and appropriately
• sequences information and ideas logically
• manages all aspects of cohesion well
• uses paragrpahing sufficiently and appropriately
• uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently
and flexibly to convey precise mea ings
• skilfully uses uncommon lexical items but
there may be occasional inaccuracies in
word choice and collocation
• produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation
• uses a wide range of structures
• the majority of sentences are error-free
• makes only very occasional errors or inappropriaces
7 • covers the requirements of the task
• logically organises
• uses a sufficient
• uses a variety of complex
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Band Task Achievement Coherence and Cohesion
Lexical Resource
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
• presents a clear overview of main trends, differences or stages
• clearly presents and highlights key features / bullet points but could be more fully extended
information and ideas; there is clear progression throughout
• uses a range of cohesive devices appropriately although there may be some under-/over-use
range of vocabulary to allow some flexibility and precision
• uses less common lexical items with
some awareness of style and collocation
• may produce occasional errors in word
choice, spelling and/or word formation
structures • produces
frequent error-free sentences
• has good control of grammar and punctuation but may make a few errors
6 • addresses the requirements of the task
• presents an overview with information appropriately selected
• presents and adequately highlights key features / bullet points but details may be irrelevant, in appropriate or in accurate
• arranges information and ideas coherently and there is a clear overall progression
• uses cohesive devices effectively, but cohesion within and/or between sentences may be faulty or mechanical
• may not always use referencing clearly or appropriately
• uses an adequate range of vocabulary
for the task • attempts to use
less common vocabulary
but with some inaccuracy
• makes some errors in spelling and/or
word formation, but they do not impede communicati-on
• uses a mix of simple and complex sentence
forms • makes some
errors in grammar and
punctuation but they rarely reduce communication
5 • generally addresses the task; the format may be inappropriate in places
• recounts detail mechanically with no clear overview; there may be no data to support the description
• presents, but inadequately covers, key features / bullet points; there may be a tendency to focus on details
• presents information with some organisation but there may be lack of overall progression
• makes inadequate, inaccurate or over-use of cohesive
• uses a limited range of vocabulary, but this is minimally adequate for the task
• may make noticeable errors in spelling
and/or word
• uses only a limited range of structures
• attempts complex sentences but these tend
to be less accurate than simple sentences
may make frequent
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Band Task Achievement Coherence and Cohesion
Lexical Resource
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
devices • may be
repetitive because of lack of referencing and substitution
formation that may cause
some difficulty for the reader
grammatical errors and punctuation may be faulty; errors can cause some difficulty for the reader
4 • attempts to address the task but does not cover all key features / bullet points; the format may be inappropriate
• may confuse key features / bullet points with detail; parts may be unclear, irrelevant, repetitive or inaccurate
• presents information and ideas but these are not arranged coherently and there is no clear progression in the response
• uses some basic cohesive devices but these may be inaccurate or repetitive
• uses only basic vocabulary which may be
used repetitively or which may be
inappropriate for the task
• has limited control of word formation
and/or spelling;
• errors may cause strain for the
• uses only a very limited range of structures
with only rare use of subordinate clauses
• some structures are accurate but errors
predominate, and punctuation is often faulty
3 • fails to addresss the task, which may have been completely misunderstood
• presents limited ideas which may be largely irrelevant/repetitive
• does not organise ideas loogically
• may use a very limited range of cohesive devices, and those used may not indicate a logical relationship between ideas
• uses only a very limited range of words
and expressions with very limited control
of word formation and/or spelling
• errors may severely distort the message
• attempts sentence forms but errors in
grammar and punctuation predominate and distort the meaning
2 • answer is barely related to the task
• has very little control of organisational features
• uses an extremely limited range of vocabulary; essentially no control of word formation and/or spelling
• cannot use sentence forms except in memorised phrases
1 • answer is completely unrelated to the task
• fails to communicate any message
• can only use a few isolated words
• cannot use sentence forms at all
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Band Task Achievement Coherence and Cohesion
Lexical Resource
Grammatical Range and Accuracy
0 • does not attend
• does not attempt the task in any way • writes a totally memorised response
Table 2.1 IELTS Task 1 Writing Band Descriptors (Public Version)
2.9.5 Vocabulary for Task 1 of IELTS Academic Writing
When we describe a chart or graph there are not many words we can use.
That means we need to be able to vary the form of the words we use, wisely. One
reason why candidates make mistakes with vocabulary is that they concentrate on
learning new and complex words to impress the examiner. It is not always the
right approach. Complex words are hard to use and are often used wrongly. The
alternative is to concentrate on using fewer words, but using them accurately
which means learning all their different forms.
The most basic vocabulary – a few variations
The graph below is given as an example. See what words we need to
describe it. Put simply we need language that describes: up (2009 to 2010), down
(2008 to 2009), up and down (between 2006 and 2009), no change (2006 and
2007), and the top (2010).
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Figure 2.6 A line graph showing changes
We can say the same thing in up to six different ways by changing the form
of it, for instance, from a verb to a noun. It has been proven in many candidates’
works that even with the basic language, there are a variety of grammar problems
that bring them problems.
Here are some words that can be used.
Up variations
Verb Nouns Example
rise a rise It rose by 2% or There was a rise of 2%.
increase an increase It increased by 2% or There was an increase of 2%.
go up an upturn It went up by 2% or There was an upturn of 2%.
Down variations
Verb Nouns Example
fall a fall It fell by 3% or There was a fall of 3%.
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decrease a decrease It decreased by 3% or There was a decrease of 3%.
go down a drop It went down by 3% or There was a drop of 3%.
Up and down
Sometimes you need to describe a graph that goes up and then down. Here we
have fewer options
Verb Nouns Example
fluctuate a fluctuation It fluctuated between by 6% and 8% or There was a 2% fluctuation.
No change
Verb Adjective Example
stabilize stable It stabilized 6% or It remained stable at 6%
remain (steady) steady It remained steady at 6%.
Top
Verb Noun Example
peak (reach) a peak It peaked at 10% or It reached a peak of 10%.
Preposition problem 1 – by and to
Prepositions are horrid in English. Have another look at the previous graph.
The rate of unemployment rose to 12% in 2010.
The rate of unemployment rose by 5% in 2010.
Preposition problem 2 – in and of
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This one is harder. We use “in” to describe changes in things and “of” to describe
changes in number or amount. For example:
There was a rise in the rate of unemployment
There was a rise of 5% in the rate of unemployment.
However, candidates if look for a band score of 7 or over, they need to think about
using some more advanced vocabulary as stated below.
Some more advanced trend vocabulary
Verbs
These verbs are alternatives to the basic rise and fall vocabulary. One benefit of
using them is that sometimes they help us avoid repeating too many numbers. If
we have a strong verb, we don’t always have to give the exact figure.
Up verbs
Verb Example
soar The price soared in November.
rocket It then rocketed to a high of 75%.
leap This figure leapt to 80,000 by the end of the period.
climb The number of televisions sold in 2010 climbed.
surge It then surged to a high of 75,000 units.
Notes:
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‘Soar’ and ‘rocket’ are both very strong words that describe large rises. ‘Rocket’
is more sudden. ‘Leap’ shows a large and sudden rise; whereas ‘climb’ is a
relatively neutral verb that can be used with the adverbs below.
Down verbs
Verb Example
plummet It then plummeted to a low of 20%.
sink After that it sank to 75.
drop This amount dropped by 30% in the third quarter of the year.
slip back ... only to slip back to 900 in May.
dip The number of female doctors dipped in the last decade.
Notes:
‘Plummet’ is the strongest word here. It means to fall very quickly and a long
way. ‘Drop’ is normally used for fairly small decreses. ‘Slip back’ is used for falls
that come after rises. ‘Drop’ and ‘dip’ are also frequently used as nouns, e.g., ‘a
slight dip’, ‘a sudden drop.’
Adjectives and adverbs
This is a selection of some of the most common adjectives and adverbs used for
trend language. This is an area where it is possible to make low-level mistakes.
Candidates should make sure that they use adjectives with nouns and adverbs with
verbs, for example: ‘a significant rise’, ‘rose significantly’; not ‘a significantly
rise.’ Besides, the spelling of the adverbs should be paid attention. There is a
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particular problem with the word ‘dramatically’. ‘Dramatically’ is correct, not
‘dramaticly’ or ‘dramaticaly.’
Adjectives of degree
Adjective Example Adverb Example
spectacular a spectacular fall spectacularly fell spectacularly
dramatic a dramatic rise dramatically rose dramatically
substantial a substantial rise substantially rose substantially
significant a significant fall significantly fell significantly
sudden a sudden fall suddenly fell suddenly
sharp a sharp decrease sharply sharply decreased
Notes:
‘Sudden’ and ‘sharp’ can be used of relatively minor changes that happen quickly.
‘Spectacular’ and ‘dramatic’ are very strong words only to used big changes.
Steady adjectives
Adjective Example Adverb Example
steady a steady increase steadily increased steadily
consistent a consistent decrease consistently decreased consistently
gradual a gradual increase gradually increased gradually
Small adjectives
Adjective Example Adverb Example
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modest a modest increase modestly increased modestly
slight a slight increase slighly rose slightly
marginal a marginal fall marginally fell marginally
Notes: ‘Marginal’ is a particularly useful word for describing very small changes.
Other useful adjectives
These adjectives can be used to describe more general trends.
Adjective Example
overall It is evident that the overall trend was consistently upward.
downward ... showed a downward trend throughout the period.
upward This upward trend finished in 2010.
Notes:
‘Overall’ can be used to describe changes in trend over the whole period. It is very
useful in introductions and conclusions.
‘Upward’ and ‘downward’ are adjectives, while the adverbs are ‘upwards’
and’downwards.
Amounts and numbers in comparison
Words Amount/Number More/Less/Fewer
considerably a considerably greater amount considerably more
significantly a significantly greater amount significantly less
slightly a slightly greater number slightly more
marginally a marginally greater number marginally fewer
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Notes:
‘Considerably’ and ‘significantly’ have similar meanings.
A useful alternative to ‘marginally’ is ‘fractionally.’
‘Amount’ and ‘less’ are used with uncountable words such as gas, oil; ‘number’
and ‘fewer’ are used with countable words such as people, cars.
‘Al ot more’ is rather non-academic language; the alternatives would include ‘far
more’ and ‘a great deal more.’
Differences
Words Difference Different
considerable considerebale difference considerably different
significant significant difference significantly different
notable notable different notably different
slight slight different slightly different
marginal marginal different marginally different
Notes:
It is correct to say ‘a difference between two things’, but say ‘one thing is
different from (sometimes to) something else.’
Similarities
Word Similar Similarity
striking/strikingly strikingly similar to a striking similarity
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broad/broadly broadly similar to a broad similarity
fairly fairly similar to
Notes:
‘Almost similar’ is not correct; use ‘almost the same as’ instead.
Other useful adjectives in comparison
Word Example
identical an almost identical number to ...
comparable a comparable amount to ...
Notes:
The preposition used with both these words is to. So one thing can be identical or
comparable to somehing else.
Useful phrases
Introduction
The table/diagram illustrates a breakdown of …
The table/diagram shows the … broken down into …
The graph/chart provides information about …
The diagrams show the process …
Second Paragraph From an overall perspective, …
Taking a general overview, …
Third Paragraph Moving to other main points in the chart, …
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We can see that …
It can be seen …
Surprisingly …
Conclusion
As a final point, it is interesting to note that …
To conclude, it is worth pointing out that …
To sum up, …
In conclusion, …
It is interesting to note that …
2.9.6 Learning Material for IELTS Writing
The most common materials are commercially produced textbooks designed
for IELTS practice, available from many publishers. Besides, there are many other
sites in the internet that can be searched and downloaded by whoever needs
IELTS materials, such as at:
http://ielts.org
http://www.britishcouncil.org/learning-ielts.html
http://www.cambridgeesol.org/exams/academic-english/ielts.html
http://www.idp.com/examinations/ielts/about_the_test.aspx
http://www.ieltsusa.org
http://www.ieltshelpnow.com
http://www.goodluckielts.com
http://www.ielts.schol.nz
http://www.ielts-pass.com
http://dcielts.com
http://IELTS-Blog.com
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The textbooks differ according to the learning targets: there are textbooks
for comprehensive preparation for IELTS to ones exclusively focused on certain
skills. The writing section in those textbooks usually consists of exercise
questions, useful resources of vocabulary and expressions, practice test and the
answer keys. The answer keys mostly refer to either essays (sample answers) or
sample essays (sample answer). A model essay refers to a model written text
written by a native or a writer of native-like proficiency, whereas a sample essay
usually means a text written by a non-native writer.