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Although the computer's ability to translate is remarkable, its abilities do yet reach our expectations.

In the case of languages whose stems are totally different, computers have more difficulty translating

from one language to another language.

Countless people would like to print out materials acquired from the Internet. his implies thatprinted materials are easier or more comfortable to read than a computer screen.

he !orean "inistry of #ducation has attempted to initiate e$books, which implies that this

innovation may have potential compared to traditional books.

hroughout time, animals have been close to human beings.

Animals have been sources of food and clothing. %efore the advent of today's remarkable textile and

food industries, channels for food and clothing were scarce.

&acial consciousness can be higher when schools are segregated.

tudents in segregated schools show a tendency to consider their culture as the best.

tudents( uneasy emotions can lead to unsettled actions.

eachers and parents working together can be one of the best methods to help students in trouble.

It allows us to gain new experiences.

tudents can advance their knowledge and expand their hori)ons by being exposured to new cultures

abroad.

*ingua franca has occurred throughout the world.

peaking the #nglish language has caused the world's cultures to draw closer together.

%ecause #nglish has been considered dramatically important, people today pay less attention to

being educated in their mother tongue.

+ften, children or youth are unprotected while their parents are working.

he computer contributes to an increase in youth crime.

hen it comes to raising children, the quality of education should surpass the quantity of education.

-urthermore, the government needs to become involved in reducing youth crime rates.

arents should at least give a phone even though they are living hectic lives.

In #nglish$speaking countries, we are exposed to the #nglish language in our daily lives.

/ybrid buses, which are fuel efficient, are now available.

If the elderly live in clubs, they will not be a burden to their sons and daughters.

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A club for elderly men can give them to have opportunities make friends with their peers and thus

lead to greater en0oyment in life.

oday's technology is developing quickly. It is demanding for people to keep track of the changes.

In !orea, retirement comes earlier in a person(s life than in the past.

Animals have long been used in medical experiments. hese experiments have expanded our

hori)ons in science.

In the hospital, electromagnetic waves negatively influence surgeries..

"obile phones are not permitted in the hospital.

If radio waves are not detrimental to surgeries conducted in the hospital, the use of mobiles phones

can be more beneficial than a beeper.

+ver time, the arts have provided us with a lot of pleasure.

cience cannot replace the arts because science cannot express deep and delicate emotions and

thoughts that the arts can reveal.

After retirement, the elderly may suffer from financial problems. If these problems are severe, the

government should subsidi)e their living. In this case, people must pay more taxes.

he balance of the 1ational ension in !orea may collapse.

he advent of aerial technology has allowed us to travel to other places more quickly.

If planes were not available, how could we travel to other countries2 -urther, the world economy and

politics would be paraly)ed.

In urban areas, security measures have a positive impact on reducing crime rates.

ecurity measures can violate people(s privacy and rights.

"achines have already replaced many things that humans used to do.

eachers( primary role is to equip students with knowledge.

ho will teach students the difference between right and wrong2 hen it comes to religion, many

believe teachers should take a neutral attitude..

In the case of drugs, rape, deceit, and other ills, teachers must instill fear of such perils.

Is there a vehicle that can replace airplanes2

In the long run, airplanes may be replaced by other vehicles that are more fuel$efficient.

hat will happen if we limit the use of airplanes2

he increased the cost of fuel will be a burden to us.

#lderly people have difficulties keeping track of today(s fast$changing technology.

3oung people are less likely to know how to behave toward elderly people.

tudents can make a lot of friends in school.

arents can be considered the best teachers.

#dison and the right brothers have dramatically advanced science. he former invented television

and the latter invented airplanes. heir inventions have allowed us to experience other worlds.

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Countless researchers and medical doctors have worked to find the keys to incurable diseases.

ome people don(t like museums because they are perceived as boring. he displays in the museum

are almost always the same. hus, if museums can eliminate such pre0udice, they can attract more

visitors.

he role of a museum is to teach people about history. /istory, however, can be lackluster.

%oth are important. "useums need to pursue aspects of both entertainment and history.

*anguage is deeply related to culture. 4nless we understand a country(s cultures, we will have

trouble effectively communicating with native speakers.

4nderstanding cultures is not easy5 thus, this difficulty can detract students from focusing on

learning a language.

In the long run, especially at a high level, mastering a language must go hand$in$hand withunderstanding culture.

Advertising can make people aware of good items.

2. Essay

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eople have been debating the pros and cons of improving computer technology as far back as I can

remember. /owever, many people are against it because the development of computer technology

requires a huge outlay of capital at a time when many, if not most people in the world, are suffering from

a lack of fundamental necessities. I agree with this stance against computer development and present my

reasons below.

eople around the world, especially in Africa, are undernourished. hey don(t have enough

money to buy basic needs. A recent 41IC#- report reveals that a third of the children in Africa do not

have enough food. Accordingly, 41IC#- has put a special emphasis on this matter in an attempt to

reduce starvation. hey point out that if we each send 0ust one dollar to Africa, the people of Africa will

be free of worries for two days.

%ut, even assuming the above is very plausible, some may argue that with the advent and rapid

development of technology, today(s world has provided us with greater conveniences. +ne of the best

illustrations is the Internet. hese days, countless people can access a vast wealth of information with a

single click of a mouse. It(s very convenient. his idea is compatible with mine, but there is one important

matter to consider6

he earth is gradually weakening. #ven though current high$tech products give us a greater

en0oyment of life, if the future of the earth is threatened, saving it will be imperative. Although science

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has made the impossible possible, and the unrealistic realistic, its advances have been more of a curse

than a blessing. -or example, we are now suffering from air pollution, scorching summers, massive

flooding, and so forth. 7o you still believe we should focus on improving science2 he more we

concentrate on science, the worse the earth will become. 1ow is the time to look after the earth.

o sum up, everyone may hold a different position on this issue. %ut, in my case, all things

considered, I firmly believe that spending money on basic needs is a better idea. his is because many

people throughout the world are malnourished, and the earth needs our protection.

2)

here has been an ongoing debate over the pros and cons of mandatory curriculum for as long as I can

remember. omepoint out that such compulsory courses may prevent students from thinking creatively.

/owever, others believe that university should encourage students to choose their own classes. I agree

with the former stance.

o begin with, if a school makes courses optional, many students, perhaps most, are reluctant to

take courses in ethics, history, and philosophy. he reasons might be that they are too boring, and that

they are not relevant for their future success. /istory, believe that is very relevant to today(s world. e

can be sure to learn something about the future by studying history since it repeats itself. -urthermore,

legendary figures, such as Alexander the 8reat, 1apoleon, %uddha, and 8enghis !han, have inspired

countless of today(s leaders. his well insinuates that history 9as well as other courses: can teach us

invaluable lessons.

%ut, even assuming the aboveis very plausible, some may argue that mandatory courseslimits

students( creativity and ingenuity. I concede this idea. %ut, I still put an emphasis on required courses

because there is a more important matter to consider6

tudents can be more successful if they follow the courses proposed by university. he

curriculum is planned carefully by experts in the administration and on the faculty. heir roles are to lead

students down correct paths. o, my point is that students can better prepare for their future success in

both their future studies and employment. he chance to fail will be much lower than that made by

students.

o sum up, people disagree on this issue. 3et, , I firmly believe that required courses have more

advantages than optional ones. his is because history, ethics, and philosophy classes offer students

wisdom, and they have the support or many educational specialists.

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3)

here is an ongoing debate over whether or not games play an important role in adults( lives. "any

people, perhaps most, believe that games are not valuable to adults. +thers, however, believe that games

have positive impacts on adults. I agree with the latter stance and present my reasons below.

8ames instill a sense of cooperation regardless of age. /ence, even though adults are already

grown, games give them an opportunity to learn the importance of mutual aid and are reminded of that

importance as they play on a regular basis. As you know, as human beings, we are social animals.

#verything in the world is mutually interwoven. -or this reason, I firmly believe that cooperation plays a

vital role in sustaining peace and controlling today(s complicated society.

#ven assuming the above is very plausible, people who disagree with my view may argue thatgames are not helpful for adults. *ike the following proverb, ;he child is father of the man,< they assert

that games cannot change one(s characteristics. I somewhat agree with this assertion. 3et, I still emphasis

my position because there is one more important matter to consider6 Adults can stay healthy by

participating in sports games.

As people age, they have a greater chance of contracting diseases or becoming fat. o illustrate,

we can look at my uncle(s case. /e underwent lung surgery after his retirement. According to his doctor,

the main reason he needed this operation it is that he had not exercised when he was young. hese days,

my uncle recovered his health because he has worked out regularly. As far as I know, he goes to the

mountains every week. hat(s more, many clinical studies have shown that => percent of !orean men

suffer from being overweight. -or this reason, I strongly believe that games can provide us with better

lives.

o summari)e, although everyone may hold a different position on whether games are valuable

to adults or not, my position is that games are important to adults. In fact, games may be more important

to adults than children. "y rationale is that games teach adults a sense of cooperation as well as help

adults live healthier lives when they exercise.

4)

here is an ongoing debate over whether or not we should protect endangered species throughout the

world. ome are against this proposition, saying that we must focus on our basic needs, whereas others

point out that we must look after endangered animals. I agree with the latter position and present my

reasoning below.

he earth has become sick due to heedless construction to serve human needs. his means that

the more we develop lands for ourselves, the more threatened the earth will become. /ence, saving the

earth is an imperative. As is known, overexploiting resources and deforestation have devastated our

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planet. 1ow is the time to care about the earth.

#ven assuming the above is very plausible, some still argue that countless people are suffering

from a lack of fundamental needs. A recently released 41IC#- report says that one$third of the children

in Africa are undernourished. he report also states that if we each send 0ust one dollar to Africa, they will

be able to buy food for two days. Accordingly, they firmly believe we should continue to develop land for

our own use. I partially concede this. 3et, I still place emphasis on my idea because there is one more

important matter to consider6 endangered species imply that the ecosystem of the earth is in danger.

ith the advent of modern technology and rapid development, we have benefited from

remarkable advances. oday(s science has made the once impossible possible5 the unrealistic realistic.

/owever, everything has its down side5 thus, the negative impact on the earth. e are suffering from

scorching summers, habitat destruction, air pollution, and so on. hat I want to emphasi)e is thatendangered species have been severely affected by today(s technology. omeday, the ecosystem will be

mostly destroyed due to humans( unlimited appetite. -or this reason, when we take care of endangered

species we protect ourselves and the earth.

o summari)e, everyone may hold a different position on this issue. %ut, I am for the idea that

we should protect endangered species. I have two reasons for this6 +ne is that the earth is already fully$

developed. he other is that our basic ecosystem will be destroyed if we continue.

5)

here has been an ongoing debate over the pros and cons of being a leader versus being a

follower. ome people believe that being a leader is much better than being a follower5 whereas others

believe that the former is not that attractive because leaders usually handle more work than followers. I

agree with the latter stance.

7oes everyone have skills for leadership2 he answer to this question is no. -or this reason,

many companies$$perhaps most$$attempt to attract good leaders. hey often try to invite proven, qualified

candidates outside of the company. hese companies do not mind paying a great deal of money for

scouting talented C#+s. his implies that there are only a small number of people who are considered

good leaders.

#ven assuming the above is plausible, some are against my view because leaders have the right

to control some things within their boundaries. -urthermore, they get paid more than lower$level

employees. /ence, with the allure of a high salary, most people would like to assume a leader(s position. I

concede this. %ut, I put an emphasis on my stance since there is one more important matter to consider6

*eaders are more likely to experience stress in the workplace.

It(s entirely possible that conflicts and?or cacophonies might frequently occur in any group. At

those times, leaders should take care of every small detail of the conflict that has occurred within the

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group. +n the other hand, in the case of followers, they simply focus on their duties. o illustrate, my

uncle was promoted to vice president last year, and numerous people congratulated him. %ut these days,

he has often been sick due largely to his overloaded work schedule. After this, I came to reali)e that

leaders might have more advantages than followers, and vice versa.

o summari)e, although everyone may hold a different position on this issue, I am for the

position that followers can better en0oy themselves because they have less work than leaders, and less

work allows them a greater en0oyment of life.

6)

hould the government subsidi)e women who must give up opportunities to work in order to havebabies2 ome are against this stance that the government is responsible for child$bearing women, whereas

others believe that the government must assist in allowing them to have children and their own 0obs. I

agree with the latter stance and present my reasons below.

-irst, countless married couples in !orea do not want to have more than two children. he main

reason for this preference is that raising a child requires a huge sum of money. +ften, when a woman is

pregnant, she worries about the financial burden related to giving birth. o illustrate, she may need to quit

or resign from her 0ob5 thus, her income will decrease. In addition to this loss, she will be required to

spend vast amounts of money to raise her child. %ecause !orean couples do not want to have many

children, the government should encourage them to have as many babies as possible by giving them

appropriate subsidies.

#ven if you assume the above scenario is very plausible, some may disagree with my view

primarily because this subsidy would increase taxes. he government(s subsidy would be backed by our

taxes, which will cause all of us to be pressed for money. I agree with this rebuttal. I still, however,

support my position because there is a more important matter to consider6 !orea will face a difficult

future unless we, !orean people, have as many babies as we have had in the past.

hese days, the population in !orea is decreasing. In an attempt to increase the population, the

!orean government established a policy to help married couples who have more than three children. his

effort is attributed to boosting the !orean economy. he fewer babies we have, the worse our economy

will become. Accordingly, the government must subsidi)e !orean women who give up their 0obs to have

children. his will foster the birth of many babies throughout !orea. If women are supported by the

government, they will be free to raise their children.

o summari)e, although each person may hold a different position on this issue, all things

considered, I firmly believe that married people should be pecuniarily supported by the government. I

believe this because the !orean economy will be devastated if we don(t have babies5 the subsidi)ing

policy allows !orean people to have children and helps them with the money they need to do so.

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7)

A debate persists over whether or not developed countries should help alleviate poverty in

underdeveloped countries. ome people are against the policy of developed countries aiding poor

countries. +thers, however, believe that poor countries should be financially backed by rich countries. I

agree with the latter stance and present my reasons below.

-irst, developed countries, including the 4nited tates have spent huge sums of money on

things like exploring outer space. eople in wealthy countries may argue that advances in the field of

science have provided numerous benefits to humankind. Countless people, however, are currently

struggling with things as basic as having enough food to eat. A recent 41IC#- report reports that one$

third of children in Africa are undernourished. he report points out that if every person who could affordto do so gave 0ust one dollar to Africa, the African people could be free to access food for two days. -or

this reason, I believe that assisting African people far outweighs doing research on things like outer space.

#ven assuming the scenario above is very plausible, some may disagree with my viewpoint,

arguing that they have no reason to help those who are malnourished. hey may also blame the

administration of the countries in which most people can(t easily obtain food. I somewhat approve of this

position. I still, however, emphasi)e my idea that wealthier governments should help because there is a

more important matter to consider6 he world seems to be much ;smaller< than before due to

communications and travel.

ith the remarkable improvements in the field of science, our world is globali)ed. "any

countries @ perhaps most @ have an -A contract with each other. hese often eliminate tariffs between

countries. articularly in the case of #urope, they have already unified a monetary system called the #uro.

his trend implies that we become ;one.< In the Bst century, everything is mutually interwoven.

-urthermore, countless companies have located branches abroad, becoming multinational corporations.

hey frequently advance into Africa where not only are the labor costs reasonable, but the cost of land is

attractive as well. %ecause Africa gives many advantages to us, we need to help them alleviate their basic

concerns of having enough food.

o summari)e, although each person may hold a different position on this issue, I firmly believe that

poor countries should pecuniarily supported by rich ones. he rationale is that as the world is becoming

more globali)ed, it is a better idea to devote vast amounts of money to help others rather than investing in

exploring outer space.

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spaces and we are getting much closer.

2. Edited version

A debate persists over whether or not developed countries should help alleviate poverty in

underdeveloped countries. ome people are against the policy of developed countries aiding

poor countries. +thers, however, believe that poor countries should be financially backed by

rich countries. I agree with the latter stance and present my reasons below.

-irst, developed countries, including the 4nited tates have spent huge sums of money

on things like exploring outer space. eople in wealthy countries may argue that advances in the

field of science have provided numerous benefits to humankind. Countless people, however, arecurrently struggling with things as basic as having enough food to eat. A recent 41IC#- report

reports that one$third of children in Africa are undernourished. he report points out that if

every person who could affort to do so gave 0ust one dollar to Africa, the African people could

be free to access food for two days. -or this reason, I believe that assisting African people far

outweighs doing research on things like outer space.

#ven assuming the scenario above is very plausible, some may disagree with my

viewpoint, arguing that they have no reason to help those who are malnourished. hey may also

blame the administration of the countries in which most people can(t easily obtain food. I

somewhat approve of this position. I still, however, emphasi)e my idea that wealthier

governments should help because there is a more important matter to consider6 he world seems

to be much ;smaller< than before due to communications and travel.

ith the remarkable improvements in the field of science, our world is globali)ed.

"any countries @ perhaps most @ have an -A contract with each other. hese often eliminate

tariffs between countries. articularly in the case of #urope, they have already unified a

monetary system called the #uro. his trend implies that we become ;one.< In the Bst century,

everything is mutually interwoven. -urthermore, countless companies have located branches

abroad, becoming multinational corporations. hey frequently advance into Africa where not

only are the labor costs reasonable, but the cost of land is attractive as well. %ecause Africa

gives many advantages to us, we need to help them alleviate their basic concerns of having

enough food.

o summari)e, although each person may hold a different position on this issue, I firmly

believe that poor countries should pecuniarily supported by rich ones. he rationale is that as the

world is becoming more globali)ed, it is a better idea to devote vast amounts of money to help

others rather than investing in exploring outer space.

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)

here has been an ongoing debate over whether or not there should be an equal number of male

and female students in every lecture. ome are against this stance, arguing that this policy can

discourage students from thinking creatively. /owever, others firmly believe that male and

female students can learn different perspectives from one another. I agree with the former

position and present my reasons below.

o begin with, what is the policy of maintaining the equal number of males and

females in class intended to accomplish2 #ven if this is plausible, in my opinion, it sounds

possible 0ust in theory, but not in actual practice. his is not only because each person has

different tastes, but also because males and females usually have dissimilar interests. +ne cansee this fact, relating to students( choice of ma0or. o illustrate, there were = female and D male

students in my department 9-rench language and literature:, at undergraduate school. his

proportion equates to approximately seven to one. In my department, female students

demonstrated more interest in -rench. "any studies have revealed that women possess more

abilities connected to humanities, whereas men excel in engineering, or abilities related to math.

Accordingly, the policy seems to prevent students from truly enhancing their aptitudes.

#ven assuming the scenario above is plausible5 people who disagree with my view

argue that students can improve themselves by being exposed to a different gender in the

classroom. his is attributable, in general, to the notion that women better handledetails than

men do5 yet, men can take care of larger scale ideas easier than women. I still, however,

emphasi)e my idea because there is a more important matter to consider6 he policy is not

conducive to our individual ingenuity.

If each country(s "inistry of #ducation establishes this policy, every sub0ect at

universities will become a compulsory one. Allschools will attempt to control the percentage of

males and females in every class. #ventually, this effort will be detrimental to students(

learning. heywould be frequently urged to take unwanted classes for the purpose of arriving at

the perfect proportion of genders. In stead of this, universities should offer autonomies where

students can pursue in$depth knowledge as well as expand their hori)ons in their fields.

o summari)e, although each person may hold a different position on this issue, in my

case, after considering all sides I am for the idea of allowing students to determine for

themselves what classes they take to fulfill their individual courses of study.. I have two

reasons for this. +ne is that people have different interests. he other is that mandatory

curriculums can have a negative impact on students.

Comment @ I think you need 0ust a bit more of a close.. if you want to include some of

the suggestions I think that will work.

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1!)

"ore and more women go out to work. Is it the government(s responsibility to subsidi)e them

and provide free staff and facilities to care for their children2 o what extent do you agree or

disagree to this idea2

1. First version

here is an ongoing debate over whether or not the government should subsidi)e women who

have babies for giving them opportunities to work. ome are against this stance that the

government is responsible for them, whereas others believe that the government must assist inletting them have their own 0obs. I agree with the latter stance and present reasons below.

-irst of all, countless married couples in !orea do not want to have more than two

babies. he main reason is that it takes huge sums of money to raise a baby. In case a woman is

pregnant, she will be financially worried about giving a birth. o illustrate, she should quit or

resign her 0ob5 thus, her income will decrease. In addition to this loss, she will suffer from

spending vast amounts of money on raising a baby. -or this reason, since !orean couples do not

want to have lots of babies, the government had better encourage them to have as many babies

as possible by giving them proper subsidies.

#ven assuming the above is very plausible, some may disagree with my view because

people should pay for more taxes. his is because the government(s subsidy is backed by our

taxes which will cause us to be pressed. I agree with this rebuttal. /owever, I still put an

emphasis on my position because there is a more important matter to consider6 !orea will have

a hard time in the future unless we, !orean people, have as many babies as the past.

hese days, the population in !orea is getting more decreased. In an attempt to

increase the population, the !orean government set up a policy to help married couples who

have over three babies. his effort is all attributed to boosting !orean economy. he fewer

babies we have, the worse our economy will become. Accordingly, the government must

subsidi)e !orean women to have their 0obs for the purpose of fostering many babies throughout

!orea. If they are supported by the government, they will be free of raising babies.

o summari)e, although everyone may hold a different position on this issue, all things

considered, I firmly believe that married people should be pecuniarily supported by the

government. his is not only because !orean economy will be more devastated unless we have

babies, but also because the subsidi)ing policy allows !orean people to have more babies.

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2. Edited version

hould the government subsidi)e women who must give up opportunities to work in order to

have babies2 ome are against this stance that the government is responsible for child$bearing

women, whereas others believe that the government must assist in allowing them to have

children and their own 0obs. I agree with the latter stance and present my reasons below.

-irst, countless married couples in !orea do not want to have more than two children.

he main reason for this preference is that raising a child requires a huge sum of money. +ften,

when a woman is pregnant, she worries about the financial burden related to giving birth. o

illustrate, she may need to quit or resign from her 0ob5 thus, her income will decrease. In

addition to this loss, she will be required to spend vast amounts of money to raise her child.%ecause !orean couples do not want to have many children, the government should encourage

them to have as many babies as possible by giving them appropriate subsidies.

#ven if you assume the above scenario is very plausible, some may disagree with my

view primarily because this subsidy would increase taxes. he government(s subsidy would be

backed by our taxes, which will cause all of us to be pressed for money. I agree with this

rebuttal. I still, however, support my position because there is a more important matter to

consider6 !orea will face a difficult future unless we, !orean people, have as many babies as we

have had in the past.

hese days, the population in !orea is decreasing. In an attempt to increase the

population, the !orean government established a policy to help married couples who have more

than three children. his effort is attributed to boosting the !orean economy. he fewer babies

we have, the worse our economy will become. Accordingly, the government must subsidi)e

!orean women who give up their 0obs to have children. his will foster the birth of many babies

throughout !orea. If women are supported by the government, they will be free to raise their

children.

o summari)e, although each person may hold a different position on this issue, all

things considered, I firmly believe that married people should be pecuniarily supported by the

government. I believe this because the !orean economy will be devastated if we don(t have

babies5 the subsidi)ing policy allows !orean people to have children and helps them with the

money they need to do so.

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11)

ith the advent of the media and rapid development, E has constantly given us vivid

information regarding this world. "oreover, we have also gained pleasure by watching our

favorite E stars and programs. /owever, E has also had a negative effect on us. It has been

the main cause of gossiping others ranging from politicians to entertainers. -urthermore,

through E, people could see E stars heedlessly spend huge sums of money without proper

reasons. A longstanding debate for this has existed. ome believe that we don(t have to care

little about their styles of wasting, whereas some are against this stance by saying that there are

countless people who are undernourished throughout the world. I agree with the former

viewpoint and present my reasons below.-irst, entertainers deserve every penny they earn. 1ot all the people who are engaging

in the field of entertainment are rich. hey make every effort in order to be successful. hey

continuously try their best to stay on top. It(s not that easy for them to maintain their popularity

since there are thousands of thousands rivals behind them who also attempt to fulfill their goals.

%ecause many audiences @ perhaps most @ 0ust observe their bright outer aspects, those

audiences seem to be grossly mistaken and?or misunderstood. If they look into hardships which

numerous entertainers face, they will not complain the way entertainers waste their money any

more.

#ven assuming the above is very plausible, some may disagree with my assertion,

arguing that one$third of the children in Africa are malnourished. 41IC#- recently reports that

if we each send 0ust one dollar to Africa, they could be free of having foods for two days. I

agree with this stand. %ut, I still put an emphasis on my idea because there is one more

important matter to consider6 %eing rich is our distinct.

"ost people would like to have as much money as they can. -or this reason, they study

hard in order to go to top$notch universities. hey also work hard for the purpose of saving a lot

of money. ho would like to be poor2 In my opinion, having a lot of money is our basic

appetite. hen, if they become rich, most of them will be willing to waste money on buying

wonderful cars and gorgeous houses, and eating expensive foods. I firmly believe that if we

were in movie or E stars( shoes, we would also have high chances of spending vast amounts of

money on something. herefore, we don(t have the right to blame them.

o summari)e, although each person may hold a different position on this issue, all

things considered, we should not reprimand movie or E stars some of whom, these days, show

tendencies to waste much money without caution. he rationale for my idea is that not only do

they deserve what they earn, but we would also take the same way they do as same humankind.

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12)

"niversity s#ould acce$t e%ual nu&'ers of &ale and fe&ale students in every su'(ect.

o *#at e+tents do you agree or disagree,

here has been an ongoing debate over whether or not there should be the equal number of

males and female students in every lecture. ome are against this stance, arguing that this policy

can detract students from thinking creatively. /owever, others firmly believe that male and

female students can access different perspectives from one another. I agree with the former

position and present my reasons below.

o begin with, what is the policy of maintaining the equal number of males andfemales in class good for2 #ven if this is plausible, in my opinion, it sounds possible 0ust in

theory, but not in practice. his is not only because each person has different tastes, but also

because males and females usually have dissimilar interests. +ne can see this fact, relating to

students( choices of their ma0ors. o illustrate, there were = female students and D male ones in

my department 9-rench language and literature: at undergraduate school. he proportion

denotes approximately seven to one. In my department, females had shown more interest in

-rench. "any studies have revealed that women possess more abilities connected to humanities,

whereas men excel in engineering. Accordingly, the policy seems to prevent students from truly

enhancing their aptitudes.

#ven assuming the scenario above is plausible, people who disagree with my view

argue that students can improve themselves by being exposed to a different gender. his is

attributed that, in general, women better handle delicacies than men5 yet, men can take care of a

big$scale one easier than women. I still, however, emphasi)e my idea because there is a more

important matter to consider6 he policy is not conducive to our ingenuity.

If each country(s "inistry of #ducation establishes this policy, every sub0ect at

universities will make a compulsory one. All the school will attempt to control the si)e of males

and females in every class. #ventually, this effort will be detrimental of students( learning. hey

are frequently urged to take unwanted classes for the purpose of making the perfect proportion

of genders. In stead of this, universities should offer autonomies where students can pursue an

in$depth knowledge as well as expand their hori)ons in their fields.

o summari)e, although each person my hold a different position on this issue, all

things considered, in my case, I am for the idea of giving students self$controls. I have two

reasons for this. +ne is that people have different interests. he other is that mandatory

curriculum can have negative impacts on students.

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13)

ith the dawn of globali)ation and the expansion of interaction among nations, countries are

beginning to lose their national identities and inherent cultures and traditions. Cite some effects

of this international trend and list some plausible solutions to prevent this loss.

1. First draft

he world has been much closer with the advent of aerial technology and rapid development. In

the past, especially BD> years ago, people might never have dreamed visiting #ngland within B>

hours. #ven if the globali)ation has given numerous benefits to us, it has also had negativeimpacts on each country(s own national identities as well as cultures. his essay will explore

what the internali)ation has caused and enumerate possible ways to lessen the causes.

-irst of all, lingua franca has occurred through the world. his is largely attributed to

#nglish which has been considered the world language. Accordingly, countless languages across

the world have undergone morphological alternations heavily influenced by the influx of

#nglish. o illustrate in detail, !orean has a lot of words imported by #nglish. ince the !orean

ar, !orean has combined wit #nglish. "oreover, as people are more exposed to the media and

the Internet, they can easily access foreign cultures. hrough these channels, original !orean

has been altered to a contaminated language. In addition to this language problem, the young

generation in !orea pays less attention to traditional cultures, such as !orean history and

costumes. hey are largely fascinated by the western cultures.

If the above is plausible, how can we relieve these problems2 *et(s look at the

language matters first. In the case of 1orth !orea, every time they import foreign words, they

attempt to change them to !orean languages. 4nless they have proper words, they try their best

to coin new words. %ut, we haven(t tried to make new vocabulary. his is the very policy we

should pursue. econd, history should be required courses at university. herefore, university

students must take history lectures in order to graduate from undergraduate school. #ven if they

are urged to enroll such classes, the classes can consciously or unconsciously instill the

importance of history.

o summari)e, the world is getting closer and closer. his phenomenon not only has

presented benefits, but also has offered disadvantages. he disadvantages might be included in

the following categories6 language alternations5 lack of interests in traditional heritages and

outfits. In order to alleviate these problems, we should change foreign words to proper !orean

ones and history lectures should be prerequisite for graduation.

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2. Edited version

he world has been much closer with the advent of aerial technology and rapid development. In

the past, especially BD> years ago, people might never have dreamed visiting #ngland within B>

hours. #ven if the globali)ation has given numerous benefits to us, it has also had negative

impacts on each country(s own national identities as well as cultures. his essay will explore

what the internali)ation has caused and enumerate possible ways to lessen the causes.

-irst of all, lingua franca has occurred through the world. his is largely attributed to

#nglish which has been considered the world language. Accordingly, countless languages across

the world have undergone morphological alternations heavily influenced by the influx of

#nglish. o illustrate in detail, !orean has a lot of words imported from#nglish. ince the!orean ar, !orean has combined wit #nglish. "oreover, as people are more exposed to the

media and the internet, they can easily access foreign cultures. hrough these channels, original

!orean has been altered to a contaminated language. In addition to this language problem, the

young generation in !orea pays less attention to traditional cultures, such as !orean history and

costumes. hey are largely fascinated by the western cultures.

If the above is plausible, how can we relieve these problems2 *et(s look at the

language matters first. In the case of 1orth !orea, every time they import foreign words, they

attempt to change them to !orean language9s:. 4nless they have proper words, they try their

best to coin new words. %ut, we haven(t tried to make new vocabulary. his is the very policy

we should pursue. econd, history should be a required course9s:at universities. herefore,

university students must take history lectures in order to graduate from undergraduate school.

9#ven if: It(s because they are urged to enroll such class, the class can consciously or

unconsciously instill the importance of history.

o summari)e, nationsaregetting closer and closer. his phenomenon 9not only has:

has not onlypresented benefits, but 9also has:has also offered disadvantages. he disadvantages

might be included in the following categories6 language alternations5 lack of interests in

traditional heritages and outfits. In order to alleviate these problems, we should change foreign

words to proper !orean ones and history lectures should be a prerequisite for graduating

students.

14)

ome people say that international travel gives certain advantages and disadvantages to

businessmen, especially with the globali)ation of trade and commerce. #xamine the advantages

and disadvantages of international travel in relation to business.

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here is an ongoing debate as to whether or not international travel plays an important role in

business. ome people are against this stance that international travel is not conducive to

business as expected. /owever, others believe that it is beneficial for businessmen(s having an

eye for international trends. In this essay, I will compare the pros and cons of the international

trade related to business.

*et me first address the benefits of international travel. As today(s society becomes

fast$paced, everything changes at a faster speed than before. he field of business is not

exceptional, either. As businessmen, they should overcome fast$changing consumer tastes. -or

this reason, if they frequently travel abroad, the travel will allow them to have an opportunity to

keep track of the world(s trends. -urthermore, as this world is much closer, more companies arewilling to locate their branches abroad. In this sense, frequent travels are to function as the

sources of forming a better relationship with foreign companies. his might assist in having a

better contract with others.

econd, let me explain the disadvantages of international travel. If businessmen focus

on international travel, it will prevent them from having a good infrastructure in the domestic

market. ince trends in each country fully vary from country to country, they may have higher

chances of being failed. In addition, it takes huge sums of money to have an international travel

even if it instills an international sense for business. hat(s more, there are countless races, and

numerous religions. his point implies that people in this world have different values. /ence,

although companies are eager to expand their boundaries to the world, their plans might be big

challenges.

o summari)e, there are the benefits and disadvantages of international travel connected to

business. he former ones help businessmen to improve their senses for international

popularities and also help them to advance their companies to the world market. /owever, in the

case of disadvantages, not only can businessmen get track off the domestic market, but they also

need a lot of money to invest their companies abroad.

15)

-inancial loans between friends can harm or damage the friendship. 7o you agree or disagree2

4se specific reasons and details to support your answer.

An ongoing debate exists over whether loaning money to friends can damage the friendships or

not. &egarding this controversial issue, I strongly support the saying ;lend your money and lose

your friends.F he reasoning behind my thinking is that the pursuit of money can make people

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disregard friendships. hat(s more, loans from friends are not seriously considered.

o start with, money can make people so selfish and greedy that even friendships seem

meaningless to them. his largely results from the fact that people believe that ;money talks.< A

main reason friends should not borrow money from each other is that when hard$earned money

is not paid back on time, lenders become furious and hold grudges against borrowers, regardless

of their friendships. o show this point, a countless number of court cases deal with hostile

friends fighting over unpaid money. *enders often file lawsuits against their friends who

borrowed from them. In return, borrowers feel extremely betrayed and hurt by their cold$hearted

friends who seem to value money more than their friendships. In this respect, money

transactions among friends can unquestionably damage friendships.

Another reason is that loans from friends are not taken seriously. his is becauserelationships based on familiarity and fondness often cause borrowers to take the loans for

granted and to care little about punctuality in repayment. At the same time, friendships make it

difficult for lenders to become formal and businesslike when asking for repayment. In my own

experience, when I was a freshman in college, my friend asked me to lend him two hundred

dollars. ithout any hesitation, I lent him the cash without any written agreement or payment

plan because I did not want to cloud the friendly relationship. 4nfortunately, my friend

neglected to repay my loan for almost a year. herefore, whenever I saw my friend, I started to

feel bitter and doubted his trustworthiness.

o conclude, I strongly believe that financial transactions between friends can damage

relationships. he reason is that money can make people become blind with greed. "oreover,

friends often delay in paying back the money. Consequently, I believe that the best way to solve

this problem is by following the saying, ;he that lends, gives.F

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