Weekly English · 2020-07-03 · LI: to start a story with an interesting opening Success Criteria...

Weekly English

Kidbrooke Park Primary School – Home Learning

Ada’s Violin is shown on the next slides or you can listen to it being read here.

This is only if you need to recap on the story.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=djv9wsF6pqQ

Monday 6th July 2020


Spot the Errors

maggie was unhappy. She had tried her best all day. But nothing had gone well it was like the word was against her. ‘why does it always happen to me’ she cried


Monday 6th July 2020

LI: to plan a story from a different character’s perspective.

Success Criteria

I can identify the characters and setting.

I can organise events into the opening, build up, problem, resolution and ending.

I can include my characters thoughts and feelings.


Have a look at the story mountain you made last week following Ada’s Violin.

• The events will happen in the same order, but the main character has changed so these events are going to happen from a different perspective.

• You will also be writing in 1st person.


Using the story mountain from last week, plan out your story as another member of the Recycled Orchestra

Your task

Use some notes from your setting and character descriptions

Mr Chavez did not have enough instruments for all of us.

We couldn’t walk around town with expensive instruments.

My uncle saw an advert and signed me up for music lessons!There were lots of other children there with me, one girl was called Ada.

Example plan


Vocabulary

What interesting language has the author used?Any key words?

We worked really hard to help make our own instruments.

I was so lucky, I got to go on tour with my favourite band!

We have become a huge family who uplift those around us in Cateura.

This plan is not completed in detail to make sure you do not copy everything. As we are retelling the story, a lot will be the same. You need to put your own twist

on describing the characters, setting and adding speech.

Tuesday 7th July 2020


Choose the correct version

1. It was definitely there/their/they’re fault.

2. There/their/they’re my favourite!

3. It’s up there/their/they’re on the shelf.

4. There/their/they’re so happy they won!

5. They left there/their/they’re dog with there/their/they’re auntie

while they were on holiday.


Tuesday 7th July 2020

LI: to start a story with an interesting opening

Success Criteria

I can know stories can start with different types of openings.

I can write my own interesting opening based on a setting.

I have used descriptive language.


Some Ways to Hook the Reader

➢ Open with a Question.

➢ Dialogue.

➢ Description of character or setting.

➢ Dramatic statement.

➢ Start in the middle of action.

➢ Leave the reader with questions that intrigue them.


“Where’s Papa going with that axe?” said Fern to her mother as they were

setting the table for breakfast.

“Out to the hoghouse,” replied Mrs Arable, “Some pigs were born last

night.”

“I don’t see why he needs an axe,” continued Fern, who was only eight.

“Well,” said her mother, “one of her pigs is a runt…”

Story Opening 1


One afternoon, when Bruno came home from school, he was surprised to

find Maria, the family’s maid – who always kept her head bowed and never

looked up from the carpet – standing in his bedroom, pulling all his

belongings out of the wardrobe and packing them in four large wooden

crates, even the things he’d hidden at the back that belonged to him and

were nobody else’s business.

Story Opening 2


MARLEY WAS DEAD, to begin with. There is no doubt whatever about that.

The register of his burial was signed by the clergyman, the clerk, the

undertaker, and the chief mourner. Scrooge signed it. And Scrooge’s name

was good upon exchange for anything to put his hand to.

Old Marley was as dead as a doornail.

Story Opening 3

How do each of these stories start? What is similar and what is different?How is the reader engaged?


Ada’s Violin starts with a setting description.

A good opening tantalises the reader with an idea of who, where, when or what is happening (or is going to happen).

Story openers help to set the tone for the rest of our writing.


Write the opening of your story, refer to character and setting descriptions from last week to help you. It should make the reader want to know more without giving too much away.

Go into detail about you character and setting. This should be 2 paragraphs.

Your task


In the early hours of the morning, just as the birds started to sing, loud crashes echoed through the town.

The garbage trucks churned as they made their way through the narrow dirt roads.

I looked outside my window and saw rubbish piled high as tall as mountains.

There was a strong stench that lingered in the air as the sun began to set.

Examples from last week.

As we are going to retell the story as another member of the recycled orchestra, we

would write in 1st person.


Use your senses to describe the landfill.


When describing a setting, it is good to use the senses so the reader can imagine it clearer.

Wednesday 8th July 2020


Be creative – what could you replace ‘nice’ with?

1. He was a very nice man.

2. Last night’s meal was nice.

3. She is always nice.

4. The children’s behaviour was very nice.


Wednesday 8th July 2020

LI: to use direct speech.

Success Criteria

I can use inverted commas around what is being said.

I know the punctuation goes inside the inverted commas.

I can use synonyms for said.


Inverted Commas

There are two places where inverted commas are needed when writing direct speech:

“What’s the matter, Dina?” said Sid.

You need to open your inverted commas with a “ before the first

word which is being spoken.

You need to close your inverted commas with a ” after the last word which is being spoken.

Inverted Commas Inverted Commas

Imagine that inverted commas are like hands; They hold within them only the words which are being spoken.



Punctuation

There are two places where other forms of punctuation are needed when writing direct speech:


Examples of other punctuation in direct speech are:“How exciting it is!” exclaimed Sarah.“I don’t know what to do,” said Sayeed.

You will need to finish your sentence with a

full stop after the reporting clause.

You need to end the speaking with:• a comma• a question mark, if it is a question.• an exclamation mark, if it is an exclamation.


Reporting Clauses

After the speech itself, a reporting clause gives a little bit of information about who is speaking and how it was said.


If Sid said it in a different way, you could change ‘said’ to...

In this case, Sid is speaking.Reporting Clauses

“What’s the matter, Dina?” asked Sid.

“What’s the matter, Dina?” whispered Sid.

“What’s the matter, Dina?” uttered Sid.

“What’s the matter, Dina?” shouted Sid.


You need to get off the bus here” said the driver.

Stop annoying me! shouted Sophie.

“Who goes there” grumbled the troll.

“What a beautiful day it is! rejoiced Sheila.”

“That’s all the money I have, explained Frank.

Write these sentences with the correct punctuation.


Your task

Write a conversation between your character and Ada.

It should be relevant to the story.

Your conversation could be about:• Which instruments you like• What you like about playing music• How much you want to get out of Cateura• Being nervous just before going on stage

Remember, it must fit with your storyline!

Thursday 9th July 2020


Add or delete the apostrophes

Vinny was always on time. It had been years since he had been late for anything.

Lateness upset him and he just couldnt keep quite when Sarah strolled in late

again for the managers meeting. ‘Youre late!’ he boomed. Sarah flushed red.

‘Here we go again,’ she thought ‘ I wish hed give me a break’.


Thursday 9th July 2020

LI: to write a creative build up and problem using

emotive language

Success Criteria

I can follow my plan carefully.

I can create a build up towards the problem.

I can choose my word choices to suit the situation.


Emotive Language

We want the reader to really feel the struggles that Ada and your character have been through to get to where they are now. We can do this by using emotive language. We usually use emotive language in persuasive writing but this time it is to help create empathy.

Empathy is the ability to understand and share the feelings of another. We want the reader to share the experiences of Ada and your new character.


For example

Ada often had to look after her younger sister. To write it more emotively you could sayYoung Ada had to look after her younger sister, making sure she kept safe and outof trouble.

By adding more detail about her responsibilities, emphasizes how much Ada had to do. The author starts the sentence with Young Ada which reminds the reader that Ada is very young herself so looking after a child would be difficult.


Write the middle part of your story now.

Remember to use your plan so you're writing makes sense and is in chronological order. It is also in past tense as you are the character writing about how you became part of the Recycled Orchestra.

You should have a range of vocabulary and sentence starters.

It was a hot, sticky day when I had my first music lesson. As I walked past the gancheros, I waved, sweat already starting to form on my forehead. One of them threw me an old magazine to use as a fan. It wafted the old garbage smell a little further into my nose but I was used to it by now. As I approached the town centre, I can see a crowd of children

Your task

Friday 10th July 2020


Add commas to the sentences below

1. ‘I need to pick up bread ham cheese milk and biscuits’ said Sam.

2. Bina who had never like surprises looked at the door nervously.

3. ‘finally we’ll have some peace’ thought Gerry.


Friday 10th July 2020

LI: to write the ending of my story.

Success Criteria

I can write the resolution and ending to my story.

I have read through my whole story and checked it makes sense.

I have included interesting vocabulary.


Ada’s Violin typically ends with a ‘happily ever after’ style but also with the moral of the story being revealed. It is important to have a good ending for the reader so they are content with the outcome.

Quite often we can rush the end of the story and have it over in 2 sentences. Read back through Ada’s Violin and look at how the author slowly brought the story to a close.


Write the ending part of your story. This will include the resolution as well. What did your character/s do to solve the problem

Remember to use your plan so you're writing makes sense and is in chronological order. It is also in past tense as you are the character writing about how you became part of the Recycled Orchestra.

You should have a range of vocabulary and sentence starters.

Your task


Task TwoRead your story in one go.• Does it flow?• Are there any key parts you have missed out? • Use the checklist below to see if you have written a good story.

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