Do Now Task

Do Now TaskTake out your annotated article (which you completed for homework).

Put a star next to the points that you think you could develop and make inferences from.Put a circle around any supporting detail you could use.

Wednesday 15th AprilQuestion 1: Development and Detailhow you feel about the discovery of the truth about the monsterJust then, a bubbling began astern and the boat started to move. We barely had time to hang on to its topside, which emerged about 80 centimetres above water. It was imperative to make contact with whatever beings were confined inside the machine. I searched its surface for an opening, but the lines of rivets were straight and uniform. We would have to wait for daylight to find some way of getting inside this underwater boat, and if it made a dive, we were done for!Lets look for detail and develop our ideas together.Model together on the board. Detail: that it might dive, speed, waves and battering could not find a way in means they are scared and desperate. Development: likely to be reactions to the fact that it is a submarine, he understands it is an underwater boat and that scientists will need to review their understanding- it is not what it seemed!3

Highlight key points as a class4Class Example: First Bullet PointFacts and events leading to being on board the submarine: attacked/rammed thrown/jumped overboard by collision [det. (initially think) ship hit by the 'tusks' of a monstrous creature, at least three men fell overboard, Ned lands on monster straight away] [dev. all three lucky/might have drowned] tried swimming/not possible to catch ship as it disappeared [det. weighed down by water-logged clothes/sinking] found his friend [poss. dev first lucky break] shared swimming/worked together stayed afloat/saved energy [dev. couldnt have done it alone] received answer to calls for help couldnt go on sinking again/exhausted [det. swallowed seawater, dev. Nearly drowned/cramps] saved by Ned/hauled onto surface of monster/sub by Ned rode on top of monster/sub all night (det. speed, hanging on to ring) taken below deck/into sub at daylight (8 crew, violence, noises before)Write an example together using the first bullet point. Model how to start the report/formal use of language. Bullet points and quotations to get started.5Pair Task: Development and DetailNow, using the evidence below, come up with your own development and detail for the second bullet point. Complete these in your table.

Write an example together using the first bullet point. Model how to start the report/formal use of language. Bullet points and quotations to get started.6how you feel about the discovery of the truth about the monsterEvidencePlanningI hoisted myself to the summit of this half-submerged creature that was serving as our refuge.Development:I tested it with my foot.Development:

This animal, this monster, this natural phenomenon that had puzzled the whole scientific world, that had muddled and misled the minds of sailors, was an even more astonishing one made by the hand of man!Detail (can find from outside this quotation):

Development:The blackish back supporting me was smooth and polished with no overlapping scales.Development: We would have to wait for daylight to find some way of getting inside this underwater boat, and if it made a dive, we were done for!Development:

Detail:how you feel about the discovery of the truth about the monsterEvidencePlanningI hoisted myself to the summit of this half-submerged creature that was serving as our refuge.Development:I tested it with my foot.Development:

This animal, this monster, this natural phenomenon that had puzzled the whole scientific world, that had muddled and misled the minds of sailors, was an even more astonishing one made by the hand of man!Detail (can find from outside this quotation):

Development:The blackish back supporting me was smooth and polished with no overlapping scales.Development: We would have to wait for daylight to find some way of getting inside this underwater boat, and if it made a dive, we were done for!Development:

Detail:Pair Task: Write up bullet point 2Advice from the examiner:The second bullet allowed them to infer the professorspersonal response to the shocking discovery through a full exploration of his feelings

Middle-range responses made reasonable use of the passage, with some attempt at own words, but tended to stick closely to the events and ideas in the passage, and to present them in the same order as in the passage, often using some of the same words

Opportunities were also missed for the development of ideas and the drawing of conclusions in bullet 2. For example, the professors reaction to the truth about the monster wouldbe limited to shock and fear, rather than curiosity about its structure or amazement at its design.8HomeworkWrite up bullet point 3 for tomorrow.

You should then have a full response.910 MINUTES

You need three highlighters (or different coloured pens).

Look at the bullet points for the question - underline each one in a different colour. Call these A1, A2, A3. Circle the form you are writing in and who you are writing as.

Read the text highlighting the passage as you go along. You have ten minutes and there are time reminders below.

Time reminders:1 minute: You should have between 1 and 2 points underlined.3 minutes: You should have between 5 and 8 points underlined.6 minutes: You should have between 9 and 12 points underlined.9 minutes: You should have between 13 and 15 points underlined. If you have finished, you need to go through and find MORE points to underline.

5 MINUTES

Draw a quick grid with 3 columns, with headings of A1, A2 and A3. Now write down the points you have for A1, A2 and A3. Count up how many you have in each column.

Are they equally covered? If not, go back into the passage and find some more points. Do that now.

Now look at the points you have made for A1 and A2 and A3. Can you add DETAILS from the passage to each of your points? DETAILS are facts names of people, place names, temperatures or any factual details you have from the passage. Do this now.

1- 2 minutes - List your ideas in a grid.

3-5 minutes - Add Facts to your bullet points.

5 MINUTES

Now try and add DEVELOPMENT to each of your points DEVELOPMENT is often an emotional response to the A1/A2/A3 point. You will get marks for developing the ideas in the text but you MUST stay true to the original. With this question, it is not just about taking information from the text and putting it in your own words; its also about inferring from these points so that you can develop them.

1-2 Minutes - Add emotions to A1 / A2

3-5 Minutes - Add emotions to A3

30 MINUTES

You have to include all of the information you have underlined and included in your table. As you include it, tick it off.

The best tip is to try and put a each bullet point into every paragraph.

Before you begin, look back to the question to check how you have to start:

Dont forget, include all of the key points you have underlined and planned in your table and tick them off as you go, develop the ideas, making inferences about thoughts and feelings your character might have had but stay true to the text and remember to write carefully, using paragraphs, high level vocabulary and correct punctuation.

Include high level vocabulary - make sure it is in your own words.Include your key pointsTick the points off as you use themMake sure you include DETAILS (facts from the passage)Extend on each of the points you make (DEVELOPMENT emotions)Check you 've been true to the meaning of the textCheck you' ve covered all 3 bullet pointsPlenaryWhat the examiner said about bullet point 3:the third to develop their ideas on the possible threats or advantages posed by the submarine and its captain. The best responses firmly linked their ideas for the third bullet to details in the passage: the violence of the collision with the ship, the rough handling of the sailors and professor by the submarines crew, and the secret existence of the vessel are some examples of details used to support the notion that the submarine may be used for criminal activities in the future.10