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THOU ART TOO WORDY
Cutting the Clutter and Needless Verbiage
IMPRECISE & WORDY VERBS
Be in agreement
Be capable of
Draw a conclusion
Have knowledge of
Hold a meeting
Make a proposal
Provide assistance
Show improvement
agree Can Conclude Know Meet Propose Help improve
AVOID AMBIGUITY
As
As long as
May
Once
On the other hand
Since
While
Because If Can After However Because Although
ROUNDAB OUT (& OVERLY WORDY) EXPRESSIONS
At present
A variety of
Due to the fact that
For the most part
In case of a
In order for
In the event that
With regards to
Now Various, several Because Usually In a For If, when about
In the cellar there are
wooden type crates with
nothing in them that
might perhaps be used by
us for storing paint cans
inside of.
This morning at 6:30
a.m., I woke up out of
sleep to hear my alarm go
off, but the alarm was
turned off by me, and I
returned back to a
sleeping state.
The reason that Merdine
was not able to be in
attendance at the hockey
game was because she
had jury duty.
Omar and I, we returned
back to the hometown
where we both grew up to
attend a reunion of the
people that we went to
high school with ten years
ago in the past.
Melba has designed a very
unique kind of shirt that is
made out of a polyester type
of material that never creases
into wrinkles when it rains
and the shirt gets wet.
She used her money to
purchase a large-type
desk made of mahogany
wood that is dark brown
in color and handsome to
look at.
In view of the fact that it
was raining down, orders
were given that the game
be canceled.
Some sort of
identification that would
show how old we were
was requested of us by
the man that collects
tickets from people at the
movie theater.
There is a possibility that
one of the causes of so many
teenagers running away from
home is the fact that many of
them have indifferent parents
who don't really care about
them.
A major company maintains a large personnel
database that it basically makes use of for many
kinds of employee-related applications such as
payroll and benefits. The company now has some
plans to extend the database significantly to include
current photographs of employees and use the
photographs as the basis for a very modern security
system. The system is specifically designed to
protect secure areas of the company’s building from
access by any people who really do not have
authorization to be there.
3 sentences. 82 words.
The student record? 18 words. (I’ll show it
when you’re done)
A company's personnel
database is expanding to use
photos for a new security
system to protect secure
areas.