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The Last Lecture. Brick walls in-class essay. Overall. Most responded to the topic See development of voice of authority More comfortable using quotes. Continuing problems. Not responding to topic Many simply gave impassioned pleas to overcome walls; they did not: - PowerPoint PPT Presentation

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Brick walls in-class essay

Brick walls in-class essay

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OverallOverall

Most responded to the topic

See development of voice of authority

More comfortable using quotes

Most responded to the topic

See development of voice of authority

More comfortable using quotes

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Continuing problemsContinuing problems

Not responding to topic Many simply gave impassioned

pleas to overcome walls; they did not:

Discuss the idea of the brick wall as explained by Randy Pausch in The Last Lecture. In your essay, be sure to explain what a brick wall is, why they exist in our lives, and how we can overcome them. Find three examples of brick walls from the book and thoroughly explain each.

Not responding to topic Many simply gave impassioned

pleas to overcome walls; they did not:

Discuss the idea of the brick wall as explained by Randy Pausch in The Last Lecture. In your essay, be sure to explain what a brick wall is, why they exist in our lives, and how we can overcome them. Find three examples of brick walls from the book and thoroughly explain each.

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Continuing problemsContinuing problems

Weak thesis statement that lacks the three divisions of proof:

“From taking our first steps to struggling through college or a career, we all face brick walls or challenges every day throughout our life. Some, such as walking through a crowded hallway, are not as formidable as others.”

Weak thesis statement that lacks the three divisions of proof:

“From taking our first steps to struggling through college or a career, we all face brick walls or challenges every day throughout our life. Some, such as walking through a crowded hallway, are not as formidable as others.”

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Continuing problemsContinuing problems

Using “you,” “I,” “we” Using “In this essay I will

tell you…” “Well,” “In conclusion” Their for they’re Their for there There for their

Using “you,” “I,” “we” Using “In this essay I will

tell you…” “Well,” “In conclusion” Their for they’re Their for there There for their

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Incorrect internal citations

Incorrect internal citations

People used the following “ Brick walls are there for a

reason.” (pg. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a

reason” (p. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a

reason,” -- (79). Instead of the correct form: “ Brick walls are there for a

reason” (79).

People used the following “ Brick walls are there for a

reason.” (pg. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a

reason” (p. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a

reason,” -- (79). Instead of the correct form: “ Brick walls are there for a

reason” (79).

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New problemsNew problems

Using quotes as assertions

Quotes are evidence, not topic sentences or assertions

Look at the following example

Using quotes as assertions

Quotes are evidence, not topic sentences or assertions

Look at the following example

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Good introsGood intros

Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book

Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book

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Good introsGood intros

Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book

Provide background information - engaging

Thesis statement with three divisions of proof that respond to topic

Look at the next two examples

Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book

Provide background information - engaging

Thesis statement with three divisions of proof that respond to topic

Look at the next two examples

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IntroIntro

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Intro with voiceIntro with voice

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ConclusionsConclusions

Restate topic and give a strong finish

Look at the next example

Restate topic and give a strong finish

Look at the next example

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Diction strengthens this conclusion

Diction strengthens this conclusion

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Development of voiceDevelopment of voice

Speak with authority Show your personality

through diction (word choice) and sentence construction.

What makes the next paragraph so powerful?

How can you incorporate the techniques?

Speak with authority Show your personality

through diction (word choice) and sentence construction.

What makes the next paragraph so powerful?

How can you incorporate the techniques?

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Looking forwardLooking forward

At the beginning of this unit, we read several poems -- “The Road Not Taken” (290), “Song of the Open Road” (289), “The Courage That My Mother Had” (610). We discussed courage and discussed making courageous choices in life.

Write an essay discussing the theme of courage using The Last Lecture and at least two of the poems – you may use all three if you like.

Each body paragraph must incorporate at least two direct quotations with correct parenthetical citations – one from the book and one from a poem.

Your essay must not contain the pronouns “I” or “you”.

At the beginning of this unit, we read several poems -- “The Road Not Taken” (290), “Song of the Open Road” (289), “The Courage That My Mother Had” (610). We discussed courage and discussed making courageous choices in life.

Write an essay discussing the theme of courage using The Last Lecture and at least two of the poems – you may use all three if you like.

Each body paragraph must incorporate at least two direct quotations with correct parenthetical citations – one from the book and one from a poem.

Your essay must not contain the pronouns “I” or “you”.

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Structure of your essayStructure of your essay

Intro Hook -- no questions Background including general

idea of courage How it relates to (and include)

title of book and title of poem Thesis statement with definition

of courage and the three divisions of proof that you will develop in corresponding body paragraphs

Intro Hook -- no questions Background including general

idea of courage How it relates to (and include)

title of book and title of poem Thesis statement with definition

of courage and the three divisions of proof that you will develop in corresponding body paragraphs

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Body paragraphsBody paragraphs

Transitional element -- Sentence or transition word

Assertion (one of your divisions of proof) Evidence from book or poem - introduced and

cited Explanation of how it supports the assertion -

often more than one sentence Evidence from book or poem Explanation of how it supports the assertion Concluding sentence -- clincher OR sentence

that sets up movement to next idea

Transitional element -- Sentence or transition word

Assertion (one of your divisions of proof) Evidence from book or poem - introduced and

cited Explanation of how it supports the assertion -

often more than one sentence Evidence from book or poem Explanation of how it supports the assertion Concluding sentence -- clincher OR sentence

that sets up movement to next idea

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Strong body paragraphsStrong body paragraphs

Use transition words to connect sentences

Use precise diction that is colorful and engaging

Vary sentence structures “Sound good”

Use transition words to connect sentences

Use precise diction that is colorful and engaging

Vary sentence structures “Sound good”

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Strong body paragraphsStrong body paragraphs

Will explain one element of courage as it appears in both the poem and the book (level 1 depth)

Will apply that lesson to “people” and how they can incorporate that into their lives (level 2 depth)

Will explain one element of courage as it appears in both the poem and the book (level 1 depth)

Will apply that lesson to “people” and how they can incorporate that into their lives (level 2 depth)

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ConclusionConclusion

Transitional element that is NOT “In conclusion…”

Restates the thesis - different words

Mentions key points of essay

Leaves reader with final thought -- a strong finish

Transitional element that is NOT “In conclusion…”

Restates the thesis - different words

Mentions key points of essay

Leaves reader with final thought -- a strong finish

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To prepareTo prepare

Read topic and determine your one sentence response

Step one: Courage is ________ and has these three parts:

Step two: textual support Step three: write the

thesis

Read topic and determine your one sentence response

Step one: Courage is ________ and has these three parts:

Step two: textual support Step three: write the

thesis

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Thesis ideaThesis idea

Many people mistakenly limit the idea of courage to staring down fear on a battlefield when the truth is that courage appears in daily life and defines itself as the unquenchable desire to fulfill one’s dreams despite obstacles, the willingness to take chances no one else believes in, and the ability to transform one’s eventual death into inspiration for others.

Many people mistakenly limit the idea of courage to staring down fear on a battlefield when the truth is that courage appears in daily life and defines itself as the unquenchable desire to fulfill one’s dreams despite obstacles, the willingness to take chances no one else believes in, and the ability to transform one’s eventual death into inspiration for others.