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The Last LectureThe Last Lecture
Brick walls in-class essay
Brick walls in-class essay
OverallOverall
Most responded to the topic
See development of voice of authority
More comfortable using quotes
Most responded to the topic
See development of voice of authority
More comfortable using quotes
Continuing problemsContinuing problems
Not responding to topic Many simply gave impassioned
pleas to overcome walls; they did not:
Discuss the idea of the brick wall as explained by Randy Pausch in The Last Lecture. In your essay, be sure to explain what a brick wall is, why they exist in our lives, and how we can overcome them. Find three examples of brick walls from the book and thoroughly explain each.
Not responding to topic Many simply gave impassioned
pleas to overcome walls; they did not:
Discuss the idea of the brick wall as explained by Randy Pausch in The Last Lecture. In your essay, be sure to explain what a brick wall is, why they exist in our lives, and how we can overcome them. Find three examples of brick walls from the book and thoroughly explain each.
Continuing problemsContinuing problems
Weak thesis statement that lacks the three divisions of proof:
“From taking our first steps to struggling through college or a career, we all face brick walls or challenges every day throughout our life. Some, such as walking through a crowded hallway, are not as formidable as others.”
Weak thesis statement that lacks the three divisions of proof:
“From taking our first steps to struggling through college or a career, we all face brick walls or challenges every day throughout our life. Some, such as walking through a crowded hallway, are not as formidable as others.”
Continuing problemsContinuing problems
Using “you,” “I,” “we” Using “In this essay I will
tell you…” “Well,” “In conclusion” Their for they’re Their for there There for their
Using “you,” “I,” “we” Using “In this essay I will
tell you…” “Well,” “In conclusion” Their for they’re Their for there There for their
Incorrect internal citations
Incorrect internal citations
People used the following “ Brick walls are there for a
reason.” (pg. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a
reason” (p. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a
reason,” -- (79). Instead of the correct form: “ Brick walls are there for a
reason” (79).
People used the following “ Brick walls are there for a
reason.” (pg. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a
reason” (p. 79). “ Brick walls are there for a
reason,” -- (79). Instead of the correct form: “ Brick walls are there for a
reason” (79).
New problemsNew problems
Using quotes as assertions
Quotes are evidence, not topic sentences or assertions
Look at the following example
Using quotes as assertions
Quotes are evidence, not topic sentences or assertions
Look at the following example
Good introsGood intros
Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book
Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book
Good introsGood intros
Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book
Provide background information - engaging
Thesis statement with three divisions of proof that respond to topic
Look at the next two examples
Have a clever hook -- not quote from the book
Provide background information - engaging
Thesis statement with three divisions of proof that respond to topic
Look at the next two examples
IntroIntro
Intro with voiceIntro with voice
ConclusionsConclusions
Restate topic and give a strong finish
Look at the next example
Restate topic and give a strong finish
Look at the next example
Diction strengthens this conclusion
Diction strengthens this conclusion
Development of voiceDevelopment of voice
Speak with authority Show your personality
through diction (word choice) and sentence construction.
What makes the next paragraph so powerful?
How can you incorporate the techniques?
Speak with authority Show your personality
through diction (word choice) and sentence construction.
What makes the next paragraph so powerful?
How can you incorporate the techniques?
Looking forwardLooking forward
At the beginning of this unit, we read several poems -- “The Road Not Taken” (290), “Song of the Open Road” (289), “The Courage That My Mother Had” (610). We discussed courage and discussed making courageous choices in life.
Write an essay discussing the theme of courage using The Last Lecture and at least two of the poems – you may use all three if you like.
Each body paragraph must incorporate at least two direct quotations with correct parenthetical citations – one from the book and one from a poem.
Your essay must not contain the pronouns “I” or “you”.
At the beginning of this unit, we read several poems -- “The Road Not Taken” (290), “Song of the Open Road” (289), “The Courage That My Mother Had” (610). We discussed courage and discussed making courageous choices in life.
Write an essay discussing the theme of courage using The Last Lecture and at least two of the poems – you may use all three if you like.
Each body paragraph must incorporate at least two direct quotations with correct parenthetical citations – one from the book and one from a poem.
Your essay must not contain the pronouns “I” or “you”.
Structure of your essayStructure of your essay
Intro Hook -- no questions Background including general
idea of courage How it relates to (and include)
title of book and title of poem Thesis statement with definition
of courage and the three divisions of proof that you will develop in corresponding body paragraphs
Intro Hook -- no questions Background including general
idea of courage How it relates to (and include)
title of book and title of poem Thesis statement with definition
of courage and the three divisions of proof that you will develop in corresponding body paragraphs
Body paragraphsBody paragraphs
Transitional element -- Sentence or transition word
Assertion (one of your divisions of proof) Evidence from book or poem - introduced and
cited Explanation of how it supports the assertion -
often more than one sentence Evidence from book or poem Explanation of how it supports the assertion Concluding sentence -- clincher OR sentence
that sets up movement to next idea
Transitional element -- Sentence or transition word
Assertion (one of your divisions of proof) Evidence from book or poem - introduced and
cited Explanation of how it supports the assertion -
often more than one sentence Evidence from book or poem Explanation of how it supports the assertion Concluding sentence -- clincher OR sentence
that sets up movement to next idea
Strong body paragraphsStrong body paragraphs
Use transition words to connect sentences
Use precise diction that is colorful and engaging
Vary sentence structures “Sound good”
Use transition words to connect sentences
Use precise diction that is colorful and engaging
Vary sentence structures “Sound good”
Strong body paragraphsStrong body paragraphs
Will explain one element of courage as it appears in both the poem and the book (level 1 depth)
Will apply that lesson to “people” and how they can incorporate that into their lives (level 2 depth)
Will explain one element of courage as it appears in both the poem and the book (level 1 depth)
Will apply that lesson to “people” and how they can incorporate that into their lives (level 2 depth)
ConclusionConclusion
Transitional element that is NOT “In conclusion…”
Restates the thesis - different words
Mentions key points of essay
Leaves reader with final thought -- a strong finish
Transitional element that is NOT “In conclusion…”
Restates the thesis - different words
Mentions key points of essay
Leaves reader with final thought -- a strong finish
To prepareTo prepare
Read topic and determine your one sentence response
Step one: Courage is ________ and has these three parts:
Step two: textual support Step three: write the
thesis
Read topic and determine your one sentence response
Step one: Courage is ________ and has these three parts:
Step two: textual support Step three: write the
thesis
Thesis ideaThesis idea
Many people mistakenly limit the idea of courage to staring down fear on a battlefield when the truth is that courage appears in daily life and defines itself as the unquenchable desire to fulfill one’s dreams despite obstacles, the willingness to take chances no one else believes in, and the ability to transform one’s eventual death into inspiration for others.
Many people mistakenly limit the idea of courage to staring down fear on a battlefield when the truth is that courage appears in daily life and defines itself as the unquenchable desire to fulfill one’s dreams despite obstacles, the willingness to take chances no one else believes in, and the ability to transform one’s eventual death into inspiration for others.