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Using varied sentence patterns in writing.Using varied sentence patterns in writing.

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►Good writers use a Good writers use a

variety of simple and variety of simple and

compound sentences to compound sentences to

make their writing sound make their writing sound

interesting.interesting.

►They also use a variety of-They also use a variety of-

► introductory phrasesintroductory phrases and and ►clauses clauses and and ►transition wordstransition words ►to make their writing style to make their writing style

smoother and less smoother and less monotonous. monotonous.

How does this sound?How does this sound?

► Monotonous Cinderella

Cinderella moved in with her wicked Cinderella moved in with her wicked step-mother after her mother died.step-mother after her mother died.

Her father died.Her father died.

Her wicked stepmother took over.Her wicked stepmother took over.

Cinderella knew how much more her Cinderella knew how much more her stepmother liked her step-sisters.stepmother liked her step-sisters.

Her stepmother told her to clean the Her stepmother told her to clean the chimney.chimney.

Cinderella said, “No one likes me. “Cinderella said, “No one likes me. “

She had to clean the chimney, even She had to clean the chimney, even though it hadn't been used.though it hadn't been used.

She was sent to bed, every single She was sent to bed, every single night, with no supper.night, with no supper.

She always obeyed, even though She always obeyed, even though she knew the chores were unfair she knew the chores were unfair and ridiculous.and ridiculous.

One day the doorbell rang.One day the doorbell rang.

Cinderella answered the door.Cinderella answered the door.

There stood a messenger from the There stood a messenger from the

palace.palace.

Cinderella took the message.Cinderella took the message.

She ran upstairs gleefully to show She ran upstairs gleefully to show

her step-mother.her step-mother.

She did her chores joyfully.She did her chores joyfully.

She made a dress to wear to the She made a dress to wear to the

ball.ball.

Her step-mother said, kindly, "You Her step-mother said, kindly, "You can go as long as you get your can go as long as you get your chores done." chores done."

She laughed to herself as she She laughed to herself as she looked at Cinderella's impossible looked at Cinderella's impossible work list.work list.

Cinderella did her chores and made Cinderella did her chores and made her dress.her dress.

She dressed for the ball. She dressed for the ball. Her stepsisters tore off her dress in Her stepsisters tore off her dress in

a fit of jealousy.a fit of jealousy.Cinderella cried, "Now I won't be Cinderella cried, "Now I won't be

able to go to the ball!" able to go to the ball!"

Her Fairy Godmother appeared, and Her Fairy Godmother appeared, and

Cinderella stopped crying.Cinderella stopped crying.

Cinderella stood up and asked the Cinderella stood up and asked the

visitor who she was.visitor who she was.

The Fairy Godmother explained.The Fairy Godmother explained.

She raised her wand.She raised her wand.

She created a lovely coach and She created a lovely coach and

evening gown, complete with evening gown, complete with

glass slippers.glass slippers.

The Fairy Godmother sent Cinderella on The Fairy Godmother sent Cinderella on her way.her way.

She told Cinderella that she could stay She told Cinderella that she could stay until twelve, for when the clock struck until twelve, for when the clock struck twelve the spell would be over.twelve the spell would be over.

Cinderella arrived and the Prince saw her Cinderella arrived and the Prince saw her and immediately fell in love with her, and immediately fell in love with her, forgetting everything else.forgetting everything else.

Cinderella looked at the clock; it was one Cinderella looked at the clock; it was one minute to twelve!minute to twelve!

Cinderella ran from the ball. Cinderella ran from the ball.

She dropped her glass slipper.She dropped her glass slipper.

The prince picked it up and used as The prince picked it up and used as

a means of locating the a means of locating the

mysterious, beautiful girl.mysterious, beautiful girl.

The prince, on his journey from The prince, on his journey from

home to home, arrived at home to home, arrived at

Cinderella's house.Cinderella's house.

Her step-mother locked Cinderella Her step-mother locked Cinderella

in her room.in her room.

One of the prince's many servants, One of the prince's many servants,

demanded that the door be demanded that the door be

unlocked and Cinderella be unlocked and Cinderella be

permitted to try on the shoe.permitted to try on the shoe.

The shoe fit.The shoe fit.

Cinderella and the prince were Cinderella and the prince were

married!married!

They lived happily ever after.They lived happily ever after.

What did you notice?What did you notice?

►Sentences are short and choppy.Sentences are short and choppy.

►Not much variety.Not much variety.

►Make a list of ‘first words’ of each Make a list of ‘first words’ of each sentence. sentence.

►Tally them up and see how many Tally them up and see how many times the same word was used.times the same word was used.

Did you notice?Did you notice?

►Most of the first words are Most of the first words are

nouns and the sentence nouns and the sentence

structure for all of the structure for all of the

sentences is the same: sentences is the same:

Subject/predicate. Subject/predicate.

How can we do better?How can we do better?

►One way to make their story One way to make their story

sound less monotonous is to sound less monotonous is to

use a variety of sentences of use a variety of sentences of

different lengths and starting different lengths and starting

with different words.with different words.

Let’s practice….Let’s practice….

►Using a variety of sentences, Using a variety of sentences,

rewrite a fairytale so that rewrite a fairytale so that

every sentence starts with a every sentence starts with a

different letter of the alphabet. different letter of the alphabet.

It should look like this….It should look like this….

►A young lady named Cinderella moved in with her wicked step-mother after her mother died.

►Before her father died, everything was going well, but after his death her wicked step-mother took over.

►Cinderella knew and was many times reminded how much more her step-mother liked her step-sisters.

►“Dog gone, that woman is really getting to me,” Cinderella said to herself when asked to clean the chimney.

►Every day she had to clean the

chimney, even though it hadn’t been

used.

►Faithfully she was sent to bed, every

single night, with no supper.

►Good, obedient Cinderella always

obeyed, even though she knew the

chores were unfair and ridiculous.

►Hopeless and despondent, Cinderella answered the door one day when the bell rang, and there stood a messenger from the palace.

►In a rush, Cinderella took the message and ran upstairs gleefully to show her step-mother.

►Joyfully Cinderella did her chores and made her dress.

►Kindly her step-mother said, “As long as you get your chores done,” laughing to herself as she looked at Cinderella’s impossible work list.

►Lovingly Cinderella did her chores and made her dress.

►Merrily she dressed for the ball, but her dress was torn off by her sisters in a fit of jealousy.

►“Now I won’t be able to go to the ball!” she cried.

►“Oh why does this always happen to me!?” she lamented.

►Presently her Fairy Godmother appeared, and Cinderella stopped crying.

►Questionably Cinderella stood up and asked the visitor who she was.

►Raising her magic wand, the Fairy Godmother explained and created a lovely coach and evening gown, complete with glass slippers.

►So the Fairy Godmother sent her on her way, until twelve, for when the clock struck twelve the spell would be over.

►Then, as she arrived, the Prince saw her and immediately fell in love with her, forgetting everything else.

►Unbelieving, Cinderella looked at the clock; it was one minute to twelve!

►Vigorously she ran from the ball, dropping her glass slipper which, fortunately, was picked up by the prince and used as a means of locating the mysterious, beautiful girl.

►When the prince, on his journey from home to home, arrived at Cinderella’s house, her step-mother locked Cinderella in her room.

►Xavier, one of the prince’s many servants, demanded that the door be unlocked and Cinderella be permitted to try on the shoe.

►Yes, the shoe fit, and Cinderella and the prince were married!

►Zama was the town they moved to and lived happily ever after.

Now it’s your turn….Now it’s your turn….

►Rewrite a fairytale so that

every sentence starts with a

different letter of the

alphabet.

►Your story be 26 sentences long (duh).

►Each sentence must begin with the next letter of the alphabet.

►Compound sentences count as one sentence. The second sentence in the compound cannot be used for the next letter.

►Use a variety of parts of speech for the first words, not just nouns.

►The dictionary/thesaurus may be useful when you reach a “block” in your writing.