Ruin! Lesson 8 objective: I am learning to manipulate clauses to create tension and suspense.

You will use a range of adverbial, prepositional phrases and sentencestructures to develop your plans and maybe start writing.

Watch this video…https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=70w9kDvrE0k

For this lesson, you will need…

• Pen/pencil

• Paper to write on

• There are work sheets

• To watch the film – all the way to the end

• Brain

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Ruin! Lesson 8

TASK: Look at your planning.Go through the sentences and make any edits to improve them? Success: Short, exciting, drama, choppy, pace…What are your favourite sentences? Why?

PAUSE AND COMPLETE

Ruin! Lesson 8

Today you will improve your planning with some techniques to make it exciting

Looking for opportunities to use of short, snappy sentences to create tension and suspense.

See the ideas left…

Where could you use them right?

Success:

Adverbial phrases; Running as fast as…

Prepositional phrases; Above me

Sentence structures: Repetition, short, word choice

to develop your plans and maybe start writing

Ruin! Lesson 8

Can you see the changes – snappy, emotion, effect..?

What are your favourite parts?

Highlight them?Magpie them?

Ruin! Lesson 8

Task nowNext – writing from the planI would like you to take your improved plan for part 1 and write it up – 1 paragraph – use ideas, base it on the example or use your own ideas…

Challenge: Go on to the parts 2,3 & 4 – 1 paragraph each – each paragraph can be short – 1 or 2 or 3 sentences…

Finally – check back to planning, edit for improvement

Success:

Short, snappy, breathless creating, excitingMovement – fast pacedPrepositional phrases – Above me…Adverbials – Dodging and weaving, I…

Part 1: I hear a sound, the drone/robot appearsPart 2: I jump on my bikePart 3: I use my weapons Part 4: Robot begins firing