REVISING AND EDITING TEST TAKING TIPS - 101

WHAT CHANGE, IF ANY, SHOULD BE MADE IN SENTENCE 1'

You should complete the following steps:

1. Find the sentence in the passage.

2. Place each suggested correction on the sentence in the passage with the Question

# and Answer Bank letter next to it.

3. Then attempt to answer the question as you read the passage.

(DO NOT ATTEMPT TO ANSWER THE QUESTION ON THE SPOT WITHOUT READING

THE WHOLE PASSAGE)

From James and the Giant Peach by Roald Dahl

They gaped. (2) They screamed. (3) They started to run. (4) They panicked. (5) They both got in

each other’s way. (6) They began pushing and jostling, each one of them was thinking only about

saving herself. (7) Aunt Sponge, the fat one, with the tightly fitting clothes. (8) She tripped over a

box that she’d brought along to keep the money in, and fell flat on her face. (9) Aunt Spiker

immediately tripped over Aunt Sponge and came down on top of her. (10)They both lay on the

ground, fighting and clawing and yelling and struggling frantically to get up again, but before they

could do this, the mighty peach was upon them.

(11) There was a crunch.

(12) And then there was silence.

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 9'

A. Add a comma after Sponge

B. Change tripped to trips

C. Change over to under

D. Make no change

From The House on Mango Street by Sandra Cisneros

(1) My papa’s hair is like a broom, all up in the air. (2) And me, my hair is lazy. (3) Its never

willing to obey barrettes or bands. (4) Carlos’ hair is thick and straight. (5) He doesn’t need

to comb it. (6) Nenny’s slick slippery hair slides out of your hand. (7) And Kiki, who is

youngest, has hair like fur.

What change should be made to sentence 6'

A. Change Nenny’s to Nennys’

B. Change slides to slide

C. Add a comma after slick

D. Add quotation marks around hair

WHAT IS THE BEST WAY TO REVISE SENTENCE 5'WHAT IS THE BEST WAY TO REWRITE THE IDEAS IN

SENTENCE 5'WHAT IS THE BEST WAY TO COMBINE SENTENCES 5 & 6'

WHAT REVISION, IF ANY, IS NEEDED IN SENTENCE 5'

You should complete the following steps:

1. Next to each answer choice put the following menu: S/F/RO

2. If you label any of the answer choices as F or RO, strike a line through that choice to

eliminate it as a possible answer.

3. Then proceed to consider only those answer choices that are not labeled as F or RO

(DO NOT ATTEMPT TO ANSWER THE QUESTION ON THE SPOT WITHOUT READING THE

WHOLE PASSAGE)

• Student Directions:

• As you browse the answers, if you decide the answer is incorrect,

• Choose from the given list why you believe it is incorrect.

• Circle the word(s) or punctuation mark in the incorrect sentence that is the reason for the error.

• Incorrect Reasons List

• Frag – Fragment

• RO – Run On

• Awk – misplaced punctuation mark or word

• Missing Punc – a necessary punctuation mark is missing

• Not True – this option changes the meaning of the original sentence (s)

• NN – not necessary – this option adds unnecessary punctuation or information

• Redundant – this option repeats the same ideas too often

• Relevant – this option brings up new and unnecessary information

The Amazing Jerboa

(1) Try to imagine an animal that lives in the desert and that doesn’t never need to drink. (2) If you don’t think that’s

possible, you’re wrong! (3) This animal does exist. (4) Its called the jerboa. (5) The more you learn about this

creature, the more amazing it seems.

(6) The jerboa is a mouse-sized rodent. (7) It is related to rats and mice it actually looks more like a kangaroo. (8)

Kangaroos can be very dangerous. (9) Its hind legs are four times as long as its front legs. (10) These enable the

jerboa to leap as far as 10 feet and jump three feet straight up in the air. (11) Unlike other desert rodents, the jerboa

also runs on its hind legs. (12) Its extremely long tail helps it balance and lets it change direction in midair.

(13) Jerboas eat both plants and animals. (14) They're omnivores. (15) The animals are small insects. (16) They

don't drink any water, though. (17) They get all the water they need from the food they eat. (18) Some scientists

think that jerboas can even reuse the moisture from there own breath. (19) Jerboas that have been captured don't

drink water even if it's offered to them.

(20) By staying hidden, jerboas are also protected from enemies like foxes in underground burrows. (21) The jerboas

come back out when the sun goes down. (22) Some of them deal with very cold winters or hot summers by going

into a sleep-like state until the harsh weather is over. (23) They usually live alone. (24) Maybe that's the reason they

make hardly any sounds. (25) With their huge eyes and ears, however, they don't miss much of what went on in their

world. (26) Jerboas are amazing animals!

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