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NESCBWI Workshop
Kate Messner
May 2, 2013
http://www.katemessner.com
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Time to
Write!
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WHAT REVISION ISN’T…
Spell Checking
Hiring a professional editor
Solitary
A process with a single correct solution or end point
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http://devilduck.tumblr.com/post/3834151230
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http://devilduck.tumblr.com/post/3834151230
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WHAT REVISION IS
Finding & Strengthening the Heart of a project
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My book is about _________________________________________________________________________________________.
(But underneath that, it’s really about __________________________________________________________________________________________.
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My book is about three kids whose families are part of a secret society to protect the world’s artifacts & they go racing through the Costa Rica rainforest, searching for a lost society artifact.
But underneath that, it’s really about the things we choose to hide…and the reasons we choose to hide them.
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My book is about a future world where killer tornadoes are widespread and four kids at a science camp who are trying to stop them but discover a terrifying secret.
But underneath that, it’s really about using your powers for good.
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My book is about _________________________________________________________________________________________.
(But underneath that, it’s really about __________________________________________________________________________________________.
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WHAT REVISION IS
Brainstorming
Free-Writing
(and maybe
starting over)
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Princess Marty Frog-Slimeand the
Nutcracker Ballet
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Confessions of a Sea Monster
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“Well…This is funny. But it sounds more
like a New Yorker cartoon than a book for
kids.”
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Reconsidering a
character’s motivation
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What if things turned
out differentl
y?
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Two Books
in One?
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Who’s that guygirl?
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The Gift of a
Crashed Hard
Drive…
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Considering
different formats
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Draft 1
Draft 2
Draft 3
Draft 4
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WHAT REVISION IS
65 Off-Draft Writing Prompts
to Jump-Start Revision
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Write a metaphor-poem describing one of your characters, in another character’s voice.Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
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Write a metaphor-poem describing one of your characters, in another character’s voice.
Thanks, Kelly Fineman!
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WHAT REVISION IS
Raising the Stakes
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MENTOR TEXTS
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How could my main character
make his/her
situation worse?
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What actions might your
main character take to make
his/her situation
worse before he or she makes it better?
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WHAT REVISION IS
Charts, maps, timelines, & outlines
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More Ideas…
• Map the setting – note important events
• Chapter by chapter timelines• Plot charts with rising/falling
action• Outline (after writing) to
identify weak chapters
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Big-Picture Story Chart - What
characters, settings, objects, jokes,
themes, and threads are important in your
project? Are they woven consistently
throughout the text?
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What elements will be included
on your Big-Picture Story
Chart?
• Characters• Objects
• Running jokes• Themes• Threads
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WHAT REVISION IS
Returning to Research
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WHAT REVISION IS
Details and Word Choice
Be specific.
Be surprising.
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Look for delicious details
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Look for delicious details
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Google Maps – Street View
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Role Play!Replace Tired Body
Language
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Role Play!Replace Tired Body
Language
ANGRYFRUSTRATED
ANXIOUSSCARED
JOYFUL-EXCITEDDEPRESSED
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WHAT REVISION IS
Being a Word Ninja
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Young Readers are Smart
Don’t keep repeating your points to make sure they “get it.”
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very
really
just
that
“what looked like”
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JUSTANDRATHERBEGAN TOAS THOUGHTHENBUT ALWAYS
GLANCEDIN THAT MOMENTSO A BITI GUESSMAYBETHATVERY REALLY
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Watch for “Pet Stories”• Cute things your kids do/say
• Your favorite sayings, places,
devices• Personal stories
(that should stay personal)
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Brainstorm: What words,
phrases, & pet stories are on your personal
“MOST WANTED” list?
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WHAT REVISION IS
Being Social
-Critique Groups/Partners
-Crowd-Sourcing Solutions
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Hey….What would you call that little
container where you keep contact lenses
when you’re not wearing them? A jar?
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Calling on KidsPost-It Note
Critiques
ORANGE = “I LOVE THIS!”
GREEN = “I’M BORED.”YELLOW=“I’M CONFUSED”
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WHAT REVISION IS
Technology Tools
of the Trade
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Scrivener
http://www.literatureandlatte.com/scrivener.php
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WHAT REVISION IS
Finding the Right Title
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WHAT REVISION IS
Finding the Right Title Highlight great
phrases Crowd-source
Cut-it-Up & Mix-it-Up
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WHAT REVISION IS
Making Lists…
…and getting to work!
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What’s on your revision
to-do list now?
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QUESTIONS?
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NESCBWI Workshop
Kate Messner
May 2, 2013
http://www.katemessner.com