Raising Boy’s Achievements in

WritingJenny Clarke

Little Sutton Primary School

Year 5 class consisting of 30 pupils.

20 boys and 10 girls.

2 pupils with statements

1 with severe behaviour difficulties

The boys! Daniel George James Matthew Luke Robert

What can I write? I can’t find a

pen!

Is this enough?

I don’t feel very well!

How much do I have to

write?It’s boring!

My hand hurts!

Is it nearly dinnertime?

Can I go to the toilet?

Can I work with a

partner?

Settings and characterisation

zone of relevance

Hot-seating

Drama

Conscience alley

Zone of relevanceIt was a menacing, threatening night. Certainly unsafe. Hogarth walked into the frightening forest. As he walked he hesitated for a second as he noticed a tree, ripped out of the forest floor. He shone his torch on the sight. What monster could have done this? He swallowed hard and a with beating heart continued through the dark and creepy woods.

He dashed behind a large rock as a flashing, beaming light lit up his path. He loaded his gun and as he peered around the rock he was surprised to see a power plant.

The power of electricity lies within the deep, dark forest.

Two menacing eyes appeared through two towering trees. The giant stormed forward. Hogarth ran for his life……

Conscience alley

Iron Giant work Sequel to Iron Giant

Story maps Animation using robots

Presentation to a large audience

Shark Tale

Persuasive Writing

Non-fiction

Characterisation and suitability

Persuasive Writing

Dear Oscar

I am writing to you to try to persuade you to tell the truth about killing the shark. I think the reasons you are thinking of lying are..

Firstly, you think Lola will think you are a hero and become your girlfriend – don’t think so mate!

Secondly, you would be at the top of the reef partying all night

And thirdly you would be able to quit your job as a tongue scrubber and become a shark-slayer.

Well I think you would be wrong to lie, because everyone knows Lola would dump you when she saw something she liked better. You’d soon get tired of partying and what would your Dad think of you if you gave up your job.

Tell the truth please mate

Daniel

Lola the dragon fish

Lola is a dragon fish and she acts like one! She is both vicious and selfish using

Oscar when she thinks he has lots of clams. She wants everything and usually gets what she wants. Lola can be a lovely character when she wants something. She looks lovely from the outside, but

inside she is nasty, ambitious and arrogant

Dragon fish

Dragon fish live in deep oceans so that they can get a good

angle to catch their prey.

They eat whatever ends up in their mouths especially large prey such as other fish and

large shrimps.

They live where there is little light and attract their prey by

using a lantern like light on the top of their heads

Don Lino

Don Lino is an angry and terrifying character. He is the leader of all the Great Whites and boss of the reef. He is a very bossy

and loud character- once you hear him in the movie

you know without question he is the boss, if

he tells you to do something you do it or

you are dead meat!

Great White Shark

Great White Sharks eat almost anything, even humans! They live in dark places and like to

pick on fish by eating them. They are feared by other sea-

creatures because of their three layers of teeth, so sharks have

like five hundred teeth!

Great White Sharks never rest and spend about 24 hours a day

hunting

Posters advertising the benefits of the

Whale Wash

Non fiction writing

Labelled and added captions using information from CD Roms, internet sources and

non-fiction books.

Identification of different species of shark to compile fact files about sharks.

Did I achieve my objectives?

YES !