More detailed cover lines, different fonts/sizes and colours (mixture of white, yellow and black)

Sense of Genre with use of acts that will be well known by people who listen to electronic music

Better fonts – I have used fonts that are not commonly seen in normal texts, magazines have more authentic styles and use fonts to match the genre

Better editing of the photo – has been made into focus and is bright/more eye-catching than the student magazine

Better colour scheme – colours are contant (in the image as well as text)

More authentic, realistic selling line

More acts at the bottom to make the page look fuller and busier

Knowledge of conventions e.g. large masthead at the top of the page, the cover artist is giving eye contact

Barcode

Only two coverlines a professional magazine would conventionally have quite a few to make the page look busier, therefore making this page look empty

Struggle to read the text under the headline, would be better to have added a white stroke to make it more visible

Selling line – is small and doesn’t really have a purpose on this magazine as it does not sell it and it doesn’t stand out for the audience

Usually on magazines, when they are promoting something ‘free’ it it put on a sticker like so…: instead ofwritten likethe othercover lines

Blank space – more professional magazines are a lot busier and do not include much blank space, this space is either filled with the cover photo or more cover lines

Common fonts – professional magazines use more authentic fonts

Not as aware of conventions e.g. Cover image – he is not giving eye contact

Cover image – is not high quality and looks as if it has not been focused

No obvious colour scheme – I have followed it slightly highlighting the word ‘FREE’ in red, but it has not been committed to

Better alignment – has been put into columns (overall looks more professional than student magazine)

Images – not only of the cover artist, but of acts/articles that are included inside the magazine (with page references)

Features column

Page numbers can be clearly identified

‘Blurb’ underneath headings – a bit more information to give the reader more of an idea of what the page is about before they turn to it

Date of the issue box, logo (name of the magazine) and the title of the page – contentsIn a yellow box – fitting to colour scheme

Added colour to colour scheme – red, but it fits this page as the sign post in the picture is red and Lucy T’s guitar in the bottom centre image is also red

Margins

Sense of genre

Link to website where you can find out more information

Basic fonts have been used

Only one image on the page and it has been faded, better contents pages are busier and include images of what’s inside

Columns – there is no columns and it is centre aligned

There is no mini ‘blurb’ under the headings for the features

Usually there is a bit more information underneath the heading to give the reader an idea of what the page/pages are about

No obvious colour scheme, except for black text and a light blue background to match the cover page

Page numbers are clear

Blank space – usually magazines would look a lot busier