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LAS Pre-Writing Preparation Exercise #2:

Thesis and Organization

Due: 4 November 2011

Helpful Hints:

• Be sure to use your re!"riting #$er%ise &1 and instru%tor %omments to help 'ith this

e$er%ise

• (our support points should %learly in%lude information related to the arti%le) your %hosen

 EQ authors) the role of %ulture) and the data relevant to the arti%le*

• There is no +re,uired- number of support points) so use this 'or.sheet as you see fit for

your essay*

• #a%h main supporting point might involve a single paragraph or a %ouple of paragraphs)

so you should also be thin.ing about ho' you 'ill organize your thoughts and ma.e

transitions within ea%h main support point*

"or.ing Thesis /your original %laim:

espite the vast maority of %ultures and religions around the 'orld) the human relationship

 bet'een one another %an best be des%ribed by loo.ing at the relationship as an outsider be%ause

understanding the 'ay humans rea%t to one another %an bring better understanding of 'hy 'e a%tand behave the 'ay 'e do*

3upport oint One TransitionTopi% 3enten%e/s:

5s the 'orld is moving to'ard more globalized pla%e) so is the %onvergen%e and mi$ing of the

%ultures in many %ountries around the 'orld* #a%h %ulture is different from one another* 3ome%ultures are so uni,ue that no outside %ulture is 'el%omed in and no outside people %ould be

a%%epted to this %ulture* 3ome %ountries value their %ultural values more than anything else and if 

there is an outside for%e a%ting on it to a%%ept different ideals that the violen%e brea.s out*

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Thesis and Transition Sentences

7ore than a statement of the topi% of your essay) a thesis is an original claim that you) as the

author) are ma.ing about the essay topi% and 'hi%h you 'ill defend throughout the body of the

essay* The thesis serves as the uniting for%e behind the essay) the %laim that brings the different

%omponents of the essay together under one .ey idea*

Thus) all of your supporting paragraphs are essentially about your thesis) and it is your ob as the

author of the essay to help the reader understand %learly ho' ea%h supporting paragraph fits intoand advan%es your thesis* One 'ay to help .eep the reader on!tra%. 'ith ho' ea%h ne'

 paragraph fits into your thesis is to ma.e use of topi% senten%es at the start of ea%h paragraph that

serve as a transition and an e$planation of ho' the ne' idea about to be developed fits in 'iththe thesis* Topi%transition senten%es help to establish the overar%hing logi% of the essay so that

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8ey sub!points) ,uotes) or relevant data:

a. 8otta. is a great e$ample of this arti%les %on%ern) be%ause he tal.s about

the %ulture as something integrated in e%onomi% a%tivities) related so%ial

 patterns) sets of values) ideas) symbols and udgments* 9ultures train theirindividual members to share %ertain personality traits

b. Hofstede and Hofstede tal.ed about the different stereoytypes of different%ountries and individuals* The idea of individualism of %ountries separatesone %ountry from another* The individualist %ountries not only pra%ti%e

individualism but also %onsider it as superior to other forms of mental

soft'are*

 3upport oint T'o TransitionTopi% 3enten%e/s:

The idea that ea%h %ulture sees itself as dominant and 'ith right believes) it sees other %ultures as

'rong in their prea%hing-s and ideals* n this arti%le 7uslims see #uropeans and 5meri%ans as

the ones responsible bet'een their tensions) ho'ever) #uropeans and 5meri%ans see 7uslims as

the ones responsible bet'een their tensions*

8ey sub!points) ,uotes) or relevant data:

a. ;atings of 7uslims) 9hristians) and <e's

b. 7uslim vie' of "esterners and "esterners vie' of 7uslims

c. The stereotypes of different religions

 3upport oint Three TransitionTopi% 3enten%e/s:

7aor issue fa%ing the globalized 'orld is the violen%e bet'een one %ulture and another* The

 blending or merging of one group in another %an be seen as threat* One great e$ample %an beseen in the arti%le on the .illing in Nor'ay 'as seen as e$tremists atta%. to prevent 7uslims

from %oming into the %ountry* The %ontemporary %on%ern in this arti%le is the rea%tion ofnationalist to'ard immigration and immigrants that are %oming into their %ountry* The far!right

 believe that people that don-t belong to parti%ular pla%e should be .i%.ed out) ho'ever the far!

left in #urope is out of po'er and has struggled to find a %ause to reframe debate overimmigration*

8ey sub!points) ,uotes) or relevant data:

a. One sees their %ulture as po'erful and above all other %ultures

b. ;osenblum and Travis essay tal.s about %lassifi%ation of people a%%ording to

ra%e) ethni%ity) gender) se$ual orientation) and disability* These %lassifi%ations provide a rationale for the 'ays in 'hi%h members of the dominant groupsinterpret) and rea%t to those of less dominant group* 3u%h %ould be seen in this

arti%le as the 'ay Nor'ay-s population sees 7uslims

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Ho' 'ill you %on%lude your essay= Offer a %ouple of senten%es here about ho' you plan to

'rap the essay up*

Hints

 

ON-T repeat 'hat you have already said above

O offer a %ounterpoint) a ne' perspe%tive) a personal refle%tion on this issue) a hint at the

impli%ations of the issue) a hope for the future>**

?inally) %he%. your plan against the rading !u"ric for the 7aor #ssay to be sure that youhave a solid sense of ho' you are fulfilling the grading e$pe%tations*

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