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Pickelsimer !1
Wilson Pickelsimer
Professor Malcolm Campbell
English 1103
February 16, 2015
Topic Proposal: The Pros and Cons of Coffee
Introduction/Overview
I will be examining the potential risks and benefits one intakes when consuming a caf-
feinated beverage such as coffee. I am using information from around the world but focusing
mainly on today’s American coffee drinkers. I would really like to know how the beverage I
drink a minimum of four cups a day affects me. Some argue that coffee is one of the most bene-
ficial and healthy things you can drink. Others say that it is harmful to your body, stunts growth,
and upsets a stomach. There is a multitude of evidence for both cases. I have read every website
suggested on the first page of Google and have read many articles stating that it decreases the
risk of stroke, cancer, and Parkinson’s disease. Coffee is filled with various antioxidants that pro-
tect the body from many illnesses and keeps it out of harm’s way. But, I have also read that it
increases insomnia and anxiety. Also, I have read that coffee can lead to increased cholesterol
levels. This is true for unfiltered coffee such as a French press. They claim it can raise your cho-
lesterol levels by two percent. Coffee that uses a paper filter can actually trap the cholesterol be-
fore it reaches your cup.
I like how you point out both sides of the argument, that is definitely important to have a
strong argumentative essay- the only issue is having more information against your argument
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than for it.. definitely the last sentence is very interesting and probably something people do not
know much about. Elaborating on that could make an interesting paper
Most of the sites I have used have been “.edu” and highly suggested by Google. I have
not made it to the library databases yet. My research started too specific with focusing on the caf-
feine in coffee, but I have now broadened my research to caffeine in general. Somehow, this
search lead me to more articles about coffee. So far, my research on this topic has been pretty
basic but still in depth.
The debate whether coffee is good or bad for you is split between many individuals.
Heavy coffee drinkers and most everyday drinkers are obviously for it. Some may not worry
about the health factor, but just rely on it to give them energy. The opposing side is obviously
most everyone else. Of course there are the non-coffee drinkers that don’t have an opinion either.
AARP.org provided the majority of my information so far.
add more sources for more information- this is a topic that not a lot of people are educat-
ed on so answering more questions would help the reader better understand the topic
!Initial Inquiry Question(s)
Do everyday coffee drinkers benefit more from consuming coffee than those who don’t?
How does coffee culture affect the health of the population?
add more questions maybe that relate to all the interests you stated in your introduction
paragraph
!My Interest in this Topic
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I am interested in the affects coffee has on the body because I am a very heavy coffee
drinker. I enjoy the art of making it and the complex flavors it offers. Caffeine does not affect me
in a major way, but it does to the majority of people and I want to know if it is healthy for them
or not. I someday would like to start a café and would like to know what the affects are of the
product I would be making. Coffee is one of my top passions and I love exploring different cul-
ture’s coffee preparations. I honestly find almost everything about the subject fascinating.
I think it is important that this subject is fascinating to you. That could help strengthen
your paper- just remember not to be too biased since coffee doesn't effect you the way it effects
most people
1.What do you already know? I already know many different preparations of coffee, how
many cultures use coffee, and some of the obvious affects. I know more about the culture of cof-
fee than the affects.
2.What do you hope to learn? I hope to learn more about coffee cultures and the affects
coffee has on the body. I hope to learn more about what I am making and if I should cut back my
daily consumption by a few cups or if I am fine with the amount I consume currently.
!Next Steps
I will start to use the library databases, and more health insurance websites. I will search
for “.edu” and “.org” sites and try many different search engines. I will also seek help from the
librarians to help find another database or maybe even a book.
I definitely think you're off to a good start to this paper! I can tell you are interested in
and I love that it is a topic that I have never read about. I think that it would be more interesting
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if you could add more questions. Also, adding more sources could also be beneficial to learning
more about the topic. Since this is a topic that is not well known, going into further detail would
definitely add to your paper. I think it is very interesting and I think this could make a really
great paper overall!