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Learning Objective: Practice-Learning Objective: Practice-(Unseen Commentary)(Unseen Commentary)

Gr 12 Prep for CA1 Oct 2010Gr 12 Prep for CA1 Oct 2010

Writing Style ChecklistWriting Style Checklist

Does each paragraph open with a Does each paragraph open with a sentence sentence which shows which shows

what the paragraph is about-topic sentence? what the paragraph is about-topic sentence?

Are there clear explicit Are there clear explicit signpostssignposts for each section of the for each section of the essay- for example: themes, diction, imagery, structure?essay- for example: themes, diction, imagery, structure?

Does each paragraph indicate clear Does each paragraph indicate clear intentionsintentions of the of the author-what effect is the author is attempting to create-author-what effect is the author is attempting to create-tension, melancholy, suspense, nostalgia?tension, melancholy, suspense, nostalgia?

Are the quotes well embedded within the text to create a Are the quotes well embedded within the text to create a fluid overall style.fluid overall style.

Ensure the essay utilises formal language and ambitious Ensure the essay utilises formal language and ambitious choices-sentence construction/choices-sentence construction/

IntroductionIntroduction

Mention:Mention:

The author The author A brief synopsis of the extract/poem A brief synopsis of the extract/poem

(2 sentences)(2 sentences) The prevailing themes evident in the The prevailing themes evident in the

workwork

Prose

ThemesAtmospher

e

Setting

Imagery

Diction

Contrast/Juxtaposition

Characterisation: actions, thoughts/feelings, description,

relationships & contrast

Punctuation/Sentence Type

and Variety

Narrative Voice/Omniscient narrator

Tone/Register

Dialogue

Symbolism

Pathos

Bathos

Hyperbole

Poetry

Themes

Atmosphere

Setting Imagery

Diction

Contrast/Juxtaposition

Persona: actions, thoughts/feelings, description,

relationships & contrast

Alliteration

Narrative

Voice

Tone/Register

Sibilance

Caesura

Rhyme Schem

e

Rhythm/Metre

Enjambement

Repetition

Personification

Onomatopoeia

ConclusionConclusion

Sum up.Sum up. Explain how the text has ‘touched’ Explain how the text has ‘touched’

you the reader.you the reader. Has it provoked you in any way-Has it provoked you in any way-

made you think?made you think?

Sample ConclusionSample Conclusion The simplicity of this extract adds to its beauty. The simplicity of this extract adds to its beauty.

The detailed images leave the reader with a The detailed images leave the reader with a sense of the fullness and vitality of Zimbabwe. sense of the fullness and vitality of Zimbabwe. Tsistsi Dangaremba’s clever changes in tone Tsistsi Dangaremba’s clever changes in tone and poetic writing style show a complete and poetic writing style show a complete perception of the surroundings and the changes perception of the surroundings and the changes in life through the eyes on the main character, in life through the eyes on the main character, Tambudzi. There is a certain truth in this Tambudzi. There is a certain truth in this passage; the themes of change and growing up passage; the themes of change and growing up are honestly and clearly woven into the are honestly and clearly woven into the narrator’s experience, making them all the more narrator’s experience, making them all the more potent.potent.

Commentary Essay PlanCommentary Essay Plan

IntroductionIntroduction ThemesThemes ImageryImagery DictionDiction StructureStructure Persona/CharacterisationPersona/Characterisation

How to Embed QuotesHow to Embed Quotes An embedded quote is simply a quote that flows naturally An embedded quote is simply a quote that flows naturally

within your own writing and is not just "dropped in". When within your own writing and is not just "dropped in". When you read an embedded quote it will almost sound like part you read an embedded quote it will almost sound like part of your own sentence. of your own sentence.

This is an example of an INCORRECT, dropped in quote:This is an example of an INCORRECT, dropped in quote:

Beneatha is a character who believes in freedom of Beneatha is a character who believes in freedom of expression. She said this quote: "People have to express expression. She said this quote: "People have to express themselves one way or another" .themselves one way or another" .

This is an example of an embedded quote:This is an example of an embedded quote:Beneatha is a character who believes thatBeneatha is a character who believes that,, "People need to "People need to express themselves one way or another”.express themselves one way or another”.

Just think of embedding as weaving a quote into your own Just think of embedding as weaving a quote into your own writing to create a more appealing final product.writing to create a more appealing final product.

Words to describe Words to describe soundssounds

Useful words for describing sounds (add more of your own):Useful words for describing sounds (add more of your own): cacophony, cacophonous        cacophony, cacophonous        discordance, discordantdiscordance, discordant dissonance, dissonantdissonance, dissonant monotonousmonotonous melodiousmelodious mellifluousmellifluous mellowmellow harmoniousharmonious mournfulmournful gutteralgutteral jarringjarring raucousraucous jubilantjubilant rousingrousing