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MARVEL By Mr CR Harrison
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Mr CR Harrison 2016
120 Castle Road
Dartmouth S.Devon
TQ30 4HS
7th September 2011
The Manager Somerfield Supermarket High Street Dartmouth
S.Devon TQ30 6JH
Dear Sir/Madam,
I wish to apply for the job, advertised in the local newspaper, working part-
time in your supermarket. I am 16 years old and have done shop work before. I am reliable and can be trusted. I get on with people well and I am a quick learner.
I am stil l at school but able to work evenings and at weekends. I would also be available for work during the holidays.
I hope that you will consider my application and I hope to hear from you in due course.
Yours faithfully,
Michael Talbot
Michael Talbot
Clear, coherent,
formal, polite use of
language to explain
your purpose
Further information to
help your application
The correct way to
sign off a business
letter to someone
whose name you do
not know
Your address on the
right hand side
The date of the letter
The person you were
invited to write to
The address to which
you are sending the
letter
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First things first!
A question may require you to address the person by name. If this does happen, then by all means start the letter this way by writing…
Dear Mr / Mrs/Miss/Ms
If the question asks you to write a letter and you are unsure who you are writing to then you can use the following salutation…
Dear Sir / Madam, To whom it may concern,
Remember not to state the obvious when writing.
Instead of:
I am writing to you because of…
Why not try:
I wish to enquire / I wish to apply/ I would like to express my views
Remember!
Do not state the obvious. The person to whom you are writing (the Examiner) already knows you are writing to them as they are asking you to write them a letter. Why would you do this?
The Length:
A formal letter should 3 paragraphs minimum. No more, no less! Remember though there has to be a level of detail there, so make sure you have addressed all areas of the question.
sincerely or faithfully?
Yours sincerely = If you know the name of the person you are writing to
Yours faithfully = If you do not know the name of the person you are writing to
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CC:
Subject: Fashion Show
Hi Tony,
How are you? It’s been a while. I was wondering if you would like to come with me to a
fashion show at Waltham Forest College? It’s something we’re both interested in and it
would be a good idea to get some ideas for the assignment that I have to do.
The show starts at 6:00pm and will last around 2 hours. What do you think? I think it will be
a right laugh and we can go for drinks after.
Let me know, ok?
See you soon,
Gerad
The email address of the person
to whom you are sending the
email.
The subject – This does
not need to be too
detailed. Keep this brief!
Good example of how to start an
email informally. Always use a
comma after your salutation.
Good use of persuasive language – e.g.
rhetorical questions
Good use of informal language
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CC:
Subject: Hall Hire
To whom it may concern,
I wish to enquire about whether it is possible to hire the college hall for a fashion show that
I intend to hold on the 23rd March 2014. The hall, I believe, will be more than suitable for
the event.
The fashion show is being held in aid of a local charity with al l the proceeds going to support
the local community. This is a good cause and we hope to make a considerable donation.
The hall will be required for the entire day as we need to set up equipment and lighting rigs.
We will require these from you if possible. The show itself should last around three hours
with it beginning at 7:00pm and finishing at 10:00pm.
Could you let me know if it is possible to hire the hall for this date and send me a quote for
the overall cost of the day? Any further information you require, please do not hesitate to
contact me.
Kind regards,
Chris Harrison
The email address of the
person whom you are sending
the email.
The subject – This does
not need to be too
detailed. Keep this brief!
An excellent way to start a
formal email unless given
a name.
A good example of opening a formal email.
Straight to the point and stating purpose
immediately.
Good way of closing a
formal email. Always
leave a few spaces , then
type your name.
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Formal Start =
Dear… To whom it may concern,
Formal Finish =
Kind regards, Regards,
Informal Start =
Hey there, Hello there, Hi, Hello,
Informal Finish =
See you soon, Many thanks, Best wishes,
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Keep your Email simple and short
If you have more than one point to make then you can use numbers or
bullet points
Stay focused on the key issue
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The audience = who is the
person you are writing this review for? This can be for teenagers, families, young
children, adults etc.
The audience can change
depending on the item / topic
you have to review. MAKE SURE
YOU READ THE QUESTION!
The purpose = reviews are mainly written to inform
and persuade. So make sure you use some facts and statistics and also some
persuasive devices.
The purpose is important as
you need to state this
immediately!
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Paragraph One =
Introduction to the item / subject you are reviewing
Paragraph Two =
Explains the detail (does not reveal too much about the item or details about
the episode) –Much like a book blurb
Paragraph Three =
Give your overall impression and your recommendation. You must rate it out
of five stars.
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The Simpsons, the long running and highly successful animated comedy show, is back
to celebrate in style as it reaches the impressive milestone of 200 episodes. Debuting
in 1989, the smash hit has gathered momentum from the first episode and continues
to surprise and delight. Now over 25 series later, it still has right combination of heart
and humour to draw a crowd. ‘Trash of the Titans’ is a classic episode from series nine,
a personal favourite, that demonstrates everything that the incredible show has to
offer: from impressive celebrity cameos (Irish superstars U2) to the ever present wit
and warmth you would expect from America’s most out of control family.
The episode begins in top satirical form by poking fun at corporate greed (a room full
of executives creating a new holiday, Love Day) before letting the Simpsons loose to
create their classic brand of chaos (Homer becomes Springfield’s Sanitation
Commissioner!) The slapstick humour is hilarious as always, with Homer stealing the
show as he has a hissy-fit when he receives an unwanted teddy bear instead of ‘Lord
Huggington’. I can’t get enough of the show’s unique band of side splitting comedy.
What is most impressive is the sheer volume of jokes the writers manage to cram
into a 20 minute episode – from the Flanders’ undead rabbit to Krusty’s box of ‘adult’
magazines; the huge cast each have their moment to shine as the jokes come thick and
fast, creating a tidal wave of laughs.
Some might argue that The Simpsons has had its day, that the quality has declined
over the past 500 episodes; however I cannot get enough of Matt Groaning’s
incredible creation. How many other shows last 14 years? How many win countless
awards and even have a blockbuster movie? How many have entertained an entire
generation week in and week out? Long may the d’ohs, duffs and donuts continue.
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1) Decide what your article is about
4) First paragraph should include the following: Who? What? When? Why?
3) Write in the third person (he,she, it or
they)
2) Use formal language
5) Round off your article. Try ending
with a quote or catchy phrase
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My Article Planning page
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Yesterday… (Monday) evening … The event occurred … It is believed … According to eye-witnesses… It was said to be … Many claim … For further information …
Headline – Do not forget this! Make sure you include the date and your name. Sub-headings (these will help you structure your article better)
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‘I'm there for her': Simon Cowell reveals he
has been supporting fellow X Factor judge
Cheryl Cole during her marriage
Simon Cowell has revealed how he has been supporting Cheryl Cole during her marriage crisis.
The X Factor Svengali told how he had been there for his fellow judge as her three-and-a-half year marriage has fallen into crisis.
Speaking to the Daily Mail at Sir Elton John’s post-Oscar party in Los Angeles, Mr Cowell said: ‘She's a friend and you're always going to be there for friends.’
Cowell, 50, went on: 'She's going through a hard time, but you know, she's a strong girl. I've been in touch and I'm there for her.’
When asked if he believed the pop star and shamed Chelsea and England footballer Cole would split, he replied: 'You've got to do what feels right for you.’
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Posted: Thursday February 17, 1:07am Post subject: who needs a degree?
[Nowadays it seems like everyone has to have a degree. You can’t
get a job unless you have a degree even if you want to work in a
shop. How ridiculous! I left school at 16 and went straight out to
work. It didn’t do me any harm.]
I’ve now got my own business and made a really good life.
Most of kids that stay on to a degree are just lazy. They don’t
know what they want to do. They would be better off getting a
job! If everyone has degrees what’s the point of them anyway?
Eileen
Responded: Thursday February17, 1.55pm post subject: who needs a degree?
Well, Eileen, if kids don’t know what they want to do why not
give them the extra few years to get a degree and decide? They
can’t get a job if they don’t know what to do and don’t have a
degree. If they get a degree it will give them more choice in life
over what to do. The trouble with you, Eileen, is that you are
clearly living in the past. You might have your own business but
most people don’t.
You are forgetting the most important point about having a
degree is that education is good in itself!
Katerina
Name of the writer
Heading
Writer’s opinion
Evidence to support
writer’s opinion
Acknowledging the
writer
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A report is usually written for a specific audience.
The purpose of a report is to pass on specific information about a particular issue or investigation, so that others may take action using the findings of the report.
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Title
(What is it about?)
Terms of Reference
(Why is it being written/who is it for?)
Procedure
(How you found the information)
Findings
(What information you have found)
Conclusions
(A summary of what you have found)
Recommendations
(What you think should happen from your findings)
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You need to use of all of these in all of your writing!
1) Simple Sentences – Communicates one idea: It was raining. The cat sat on the mat. My friend gave me a lift.
A simple sentence needs 3 things : A subject, a verb, and object. The subject does something in the sentence. The actions are verbs. The object has something done to it.
Here are the reasons why you might choose to write simple sentences:
To keep things simple, especially for a young audience. To make points clear in instructions, information or explanations To create drama, tension or a fast pace in descriptive or persuasive writing.
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2) Compound Sentences- joins two simple sentences to communicate two ideas. The parts of the sentence are linked by connectives, such as and, but, whereas, because and therefore etc.
Compound sentences do not usually contain commas: It was raining and we had to stay indoors.
The boys walked down the road and the parents waved from the house. My friend gave me a lift because it was raining.
Spot the connectives
The advantage of compound sentences is that they allow you to build more detail into your writing without using loads of short simple sentences, which can sometimes sound babyish.
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3) A Complex Sentence – communicates more than one idea, and joins them in different ways. The ideas involve the use of commas to guide the reader through the sentence . The parts of the sentence – clauses – are joined by conjunctions or connectives.
Although we had to stay indoors because of the rain, there were plenty of videos to watch.
The boys walked quickly down the road , feeling a little nervous because today
was their first exam.
The cat, which had already slept all day, sat lazily on the mat.
Using complex sentences shows you are a versatile writer, and can help you to build up an argument or a sense of atmosphere or character. However, they are not always helpful if you are trying to give clear instructions or information.
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Marvellous Convincing Precious
Engaging Superb Timeless
Exceptional Prevailing Splendid
Staggering Fantastic Glorious
Sensational Tremendous Incredible
Immense Miraculous Phenomenal
Striking Stunning Astounding
Breathtaking Powerful Gracious
Positive Vocabulary = really good for when writing Reviews!
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Add more sophisticated vocabulary by replacing the italicised red words in the following sentences. The first one has been done for you. Use a dictionary to help you if you’re stuck.
The trouble with smacking is that it is easy to carry on continue smacking
after the event when the child no longer knows what the smack is for.
Globalisation means that big firms get bigger _________ and start to
take over the towns.
Promoting size zero as the norm is a bad _______ idea.
I can improve my marks by using more difficult _________ vocabulary.
Using a mix of complex, compound and simple sentences is also a very
good _________ way of increasing my marks.
Examiners get bored if all sentences start _________ with the same
type of words.
To get better results, use a mixture ___________ of sentence starters.
To increase my mark I should also use a mix _________ of punctuation.
I know that if I make some adjustments to my coursework, getting
__________ more marks is possible.
I aim high because I want to do well ________ at English.
I can write well, I just need to make sure that the examiner can see this.
This can be achieved by working smarter, not harder, which means
ensuring that I obtain loads ______ of marks from checking my
technique (e.g. including a mixture of sentences, some sophisticated
vocabulary, a variety of punctuation and paragraphing well.)
`carry on’ is replaced by continue here
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In the writing exam you may have to write persuasively. Here is an excellent way to remember all of the persuasive devices that you can use.
Alliteration
Triplets = the Power of 3
Repetition / Rhetorical questions Facts
Statistics
Exaggeration / Emotive
language
Opinions
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Language = Does the piece of writing need
to be formal or informal?
Format = the layout of the piece of
writing. For example, letter, email, report,
review etc.
Structure = use of paragraphs, variety of sentences etc. Do your sentences make
sense?
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Punctuation
Full Stops . At the end of a sentence that is not a
question or exclamation Capital Letters ABC At the beginning of sentences For the names of people, places, titles (proper nouns) Question Mark ? At the end of a sentence which asks a question
Exclamation Mark ! At the end of a sentence which is a surprise or a shock Comma , To divide items in a list and clauses after a connective Speech Marks “ “ Used for direct speech e.g. the teacher said “Read your books” Brackets ( ) Give extra information Apostrophe ‘ Shows letters are missing or ownership Quotation Marks ‘ ‘ Around words written or said by someone else Semi –colon ; Separates items in a list. Used to link two connected ideas Colon : Used to introduce a list Introduces an idea that is an explanation of the one before it
Spelling Rules
I before e except after c
When the sound is long eeeee eg achieve /
ceiling
Plurals – usually add an s if a word ends with f or fe add ves eg knife/knives
If a word ends ch or sh
or x then add es eg boxes/wishes/watches
Learn irregular plurals eg
Tooth / Teeth
Mouse / Mice
Common Errors
A lot
Its / It’s
Your / You’re
Their/there/they’re
To/too/two
We’re/were/where
Past/passed
Weather / Whether
Paragraphs
Topic / Time / Place / Talk
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It is important when you are writing longer pieces of writing to make sure that you organise your writing to make it easy for your reader to understand.
One of the ways to make your writing easy to read is to make sure you have a clear structure. This means choosing carefully where you put each part of your writing.
You can remember this by remembering that your writing should be a bit like…a burger!
Introduction
You should start your writing with an introduction
which gives the reader some information about your
topic. You may also explain what else you are going
to write about.
Main Body
This is like the filling of the burger
– it is the most important part. This
where you should include all of your
main points. You might need more
than one paragraph in this section.
Conclusion
This is really important – like the
base of your burger: if you don’t
have it, then it all falls apart! This
is your chance to draw together your
main points. It may also be where
you give your points of view.
