Make the criminals more horrible so the cold …Psyche Female psy-ops Catacomb Enterance 1, avenue...
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Characters Plot points
Emma Kidnapee hires Emma and Chloe to kill his kidnappers from when he was a kid
Chloe They find the kidnapees and take them out
Kidnapee Discover that the leader escaped and is planning a big terror attack
Kidnappers Go after the terrorists
Big Terrorist Encounter SF team also going after terrorist
2nd in command
Spec Forc Leader
Plot Summary
Emma is hired to wipe out a kidnapping ring only to discover that they've moved on to much greater crimes.
With the United States government also chasing the criminals, Emma and Chloe race to stop the terrorists before
an entire city is destroyed.
Notable scenes
Kidnappers moved on to bigger jobs using money from original take Kidnapper 1 - US Meth lab
Catch the main kidnapper team fairly quickly but some get away Kidnapper 2 -
Kidnappee kidnapped again? Kidnapper 3 - dead in jail
One member of terrorist cell is informant Kidnapper 4 - Piatro
Bump into SF team hunting terrorists, confusion for a while
Exposed to nerve agent, have to take atropine
Drone strike wipes out next lead
Emma and Chloe are in a room searching for clues when the SF burst in, surrounded by bright lights.
Emma contacts an old flame in London for help finding the bomb. He works for Interpol
During date, flame points out the illegality of her job, wants her to work with him
Locations
Cayman - start
US / Mexico - terrorists cell
Afghanistan/Pakistan? - SF team
European City - Climax (Paris?)
Thoughts Writing notes
Short chapters Make the criminals more horrible so the cold-blooded killing is more justified?
Combat or action in at least every other chapter
Need action in beginning, or false expectation action?
How big is a Delta squad in action? As big as they need to be
Track the kidnappers by money transfers?
Chloe needs to be rescued?
Hunt kidnappers 1 by 1
Weapon is thermobaric (Fueled Air Explosive) in the catacombs under Paris
Final terrorist group is Paitro - Emad - Nicu - and four others
What are British arrest procedures?
Use Twitter for communication?
What ranks in a DF squad?
Look up catacombs in paris
Who are the French anti-terrorists? GIGN?
Thermobaric blast wave travels at 2 miles per second
New Recruits Meet in Pakistan
Hancock Dave Striker
Pudding Pat Bulldog
Psyche Female psy-ops
Catacomb Enterance
1, avenue du Colonel Henri Rol-Tanguy (place Denfert-Rochereau) 75014 Paris
Chinese Type 85 SMG uses 7.62x25mm
Make the criminals more horrible so the cold-blooded killing is more justified?
Character Sketch
Character Name: Emma Chapel
Nickname: "Frost Queen"
Birth Date/Place: London/UK
Character Role: Protagonist
Physical Descriptions
Age: 31
Race: Caucasian
Eye Color: Brown
Hair Color/Style: Brown, short
Build (Height/Weight): Athletic
Skin Tone: Pale
Style of Dress: Military, pants
Characteristics/ Cold, a little aloof
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: Calculating, determined to complete job, finds romance
distracting
Background: Grew up in London, started off as police officer, went
to special branch. Eventually became PMC. Was a
"Baghdad Babe" and escorted many high profile clients.
Single-handedly saved an oil-exec and destroyed the terrorist
cell trying to kidnap him. Recently grabbed a person of interest
in Afghanistan and nabbed larged bounty. Now off on her own
Internal Conflicts:
External Conflicts:
Occupation/Education: Business degree, trained in hostage negotiation/rescue
Notes: SAS training
Company name is Acute Completion
HQ is in a business park in Turks and Caicos
Uses Spartan Nyx combat knife
Used to work for Tactical Considerations
Shoots Glock 22 .40 S&W
Character Sketch
Character Name: Chloe Robinson
Nickname:
Birth Date/Place: Sydney Australia
Character Role: Support
Physical Descriptions
Age: 29
Race: Caucasian
Eye Color: Green
Hair Color/Style: Dark red/Short
Build (Height/Weight): Athletic, slightly tall
Skin Tone: Pale, freckled
Style of Dress: Comfortable
Characteristics/ Outgoing, cheery to an extreme
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: Likes to look on the bright side, loves puzzles, tries to
bring out the fun side of Merc. Makes bad decisions on
occasion in regards to having fun
Outgoing and makes friends easily
Background: Started in the Australian army in intelligence. Met Merc in
Afghanistan and hit up a friendship. When Merc went to PMC,
she joined her as her handler/support. Now is her partner
in their new venture
Internal Conflicts:
External Conflicts:
Occupation/Education: Hacker, tech, and communications expert.
Notes: Also good at analysis
Wrote a program called Catnip that searches the worlds
intelligence databases.
Likes to snack on M&Ms
Can speak Spanish
Shoots Astra A-75 .40 S&W
Character Sketch
Character Name: Tyler Westbury
Nickname:
Birth Date/Place: Chicago, IL
Character Role:
Physical Descriptions
Age: 21
Race: Caucasian
Eye Color: Brown
Hair Color/Style: Brown
Build (Height/Weight): Average
Skin Tone: Tan
Style of Dress: Expensive
Characteristics/ Has a nervous mannerism, hands always moving.
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: Used to getting his way. Not unintelligent, but not smart
Tormented by his ordeal but doesn't want to show it.
Background: Father wealthy man. He's kidnapped when he was 12. Ransom
was paid and he was returned, mostly unharmed.
Now that he is 21 and has some of his father's money, he
wants revenge
Internal Conflicts: Will killing those who kidnapped him, finally put the demons
to rest?
External Conflicts:
Occupation/Education: Business Degree from Yale.
Notes:
Character Sketch
Character Name: Piatro Kolas
Nickname:
Birth Date/Place: Belarus
Character Role:
Physical Descriptions
Age: 45
Race: Eastern european
Eye Color: Gray
Hair Color/Style: Black
Build (Height/Weight):
Skin Tone: White
Style of Dress: khakis and jacket
Characteristics/
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: Methodical planner. Used to always being right. He tries
to deal with any eventuality.
No one is allowed to stand in his way and everyone is
expendable for the cause.
Background: What he saw during the fall of communism made him sick. He
feels that only he can force people to see the futility of their lives.
Created his own terrorist group and financed by kidnapping. His
first big score was the kidnapee
Internal Conflicts: No one can see the true light. No one can appreciate that he
is right.
External Conflicts: Hunted just while he ready to show the true way via chem bomb
Occupation/Education:
Notes:
Character Sketch
Character Name: Emad Ansari
Nickname: Saudi Arabia
Birth Date/Place:
Character Role:
Physical Descriptions
Age: 29
Race: Arabic
Eye Color: Brown
Hair Color/Style: Black
Build (Height/Weight): Slight
Skin Tone:
Style of Dress: Western
Characteristics/
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: Doesn't believe in main guy's cause, but definitely believes
in the results. Wants to learn from him and use it
to further his religious ends
Background: Iraqi devout. Hated the double standard the leadership had
with all the western decadence behind the scenes. Wants
to turn the country to relgious rule.
Internal Conflicts: Furthering a cause he doesn't believe in.
External Conflicts: Anti-terrorist squads
Occupation/Education:
Notes:
Character Sketch
Character Name: Nicu Tarus
Nickname:
Birth Date/Place: Romania
Character Role:
Physical Descriptions
Age: 23
Race: Caucasian
Eye Color: Blue
Hair Color/Style: Brown
Build (Height/Weight): Skinny
Skin Tone: Pale
Style of Dress: jeans and old t-shirts
Characteristics/ Quiet, a little nerdy
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: Good with electronics, script-kiddy type hacker.
Background: Fell in with bad guy. Originally believed in the cause, but
now enjoys the pleasures money can bring. Is informing on
the bad guy, but cannot take the stree much longer
Internal Conflicts: Can he keep secret that he is an informant?
External Conflicts: Threatened from both inside the group and from others hunting
the group down.
Occupation/Education:
Notes:
Character Sketch
Character Name: Hershel Jordan
Nickname:
Birth Date/Place:
Character Role:
Physical Descriptions
Age: 38
Race: African American
Eye Color: Brown
Hair Color/Style: Black
Build (Height/Weight): Strong, muscley
Skin Tone:
Style of Dress: Military
Characteristics/ All business
Mannerisms
Personality Traits: The mission is paramount and whatever it takes to complete.
Kind of the "good guy" version of the bad guy
Background: Member of Delta Force. Tracking down terrorist squads around
the globe
Internal Conflicts: Trying not to become the monsters he hunts
External Conflicts: Terrorists gunning for him and his squad
Occupation/Education:
Notes:
Old Flame
London police or MI5 (or is is DI5)?
Lawrence Andrews
Kidnappers
1. Jimmy Gavette Meth dealer in Miami
2. Reggie Morris Gang leader in Chicago
3. Billie Sears Dead in prison
4. Piatro Mexico
General Setting Sketch
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Characters Living in the
Region/Time Period:
Year or Time Period:
Season:
City and State:
Notes:
General Setting Sketch
Name of Setting: Mexican city, Villa Garcia
This is where the kidnappers/terrorist cell are tracked to
It is a small rural house attached to a farm
A small airstrip can be found nearby. This is how the main
guy gets away
Characters Living in the
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Year or Time Period:
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General Setting Sketch
Name of Setting: Pakistan.
Terrorists base of operations. Protected by village.
Building among the mountains.
Characters Living in the
Region/Time Period:
Year or Time Period:
Season:
City and State:
Notes:
General Setting Sketch
Name of Setting: London
Piatro heads here to capture Emma and Chloe and learn
why they are after him.
Characters Living in the
Region/Time Period:
Year or Time Period:
Season:
City and State:
Notes:
General Setting Sketch
Name of Setting: Paris
Head terrorist and 2nd in command will detonate a chemical
bomb here. Have to run around Paris trying to find it and
deactivate it.
Characters Living in the
Region/Time Period:
Year or Time Period:
Season:
City and State:
Notes:
Plot Sketch
Story Goal: To avenge the kidnapping of Tyler. Discover larger plot against
the city of Paris.
Romance Thread: Emma had to confront an old flame for help in Paris
Subplot Threads 1: Kidnapee finds revenge doesn't help him
2 Informant tries to get out
3 Piatro trying to get others to see he can "help"
4 Emad struggles with helping Piatro, a cause he doesn't believe in
5 SF leader fears becoming what he is hunting
6 Chloe gets in the field, needs to expand company
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10
Additional:
Plot Tension:
Romantic/Sexual Tension:
Release:
Downtime:
Black Moment:
Resolution:
Aftereffects of Resolution:
82 Main Subplot A Subplot B Subplot C Subplot D Subplot E Subplot F Subplot G Subplot H Subplot I 75-80
Scenes
Find kidnappers
/ discover plot
Stop chemical
attack
Emma deals
with her
romantic past
Kidnapee finds
revenge doesn't
quiet his demons
Piatro trying to
get others to
understand his
motives
Emad struggles
with helping
Piatro
Informant tries to
leave terrorist
group
DF Leader fears
becoming what
he is hunting
Chloe gets in
the field and
realizes they
need to expand
Put terrorist
plan together
Compl X X X X X X X X X X
1Hired to find
kidnappers 1
Get out of jail
52
Contacts flame
in London for
help 38
Tyler visits grave
of kidnapper 3 4
Emad comes to
Piatro for
training 3
Emad tries to
gather Piatro's
contacts for
himself 13
Chloe contacts
him 18
Harsh
interrogation of
Emma 29
Convince Emma
to let her enter
field to find
kidnappers 6
Contact
Russians for
bomb parts 16
2Research case
file. Kidnapper 3
dead 2
Try to
determine what
the plan is 55
He wants to
rekindle
romance, she
doesn't 39
Tyler posts
message on
threatening
Piatro 11
Piatro describes
his motives,
debates Emad
9
Emad confesses
to his superior
his
respect/disgust
with Piatro 31
Befriends/flirts
with him 24
Harsh
interrogation of
Chloe 30
Chloe helps out,
saving Emma 8
collect parts,
attacked by DF,
escape 20
3track kidnapper
1 (meth head in
Miami) 5
Informant tells
Chloe plan 57
He tries to
convince her to
get out of the
business 41
Facebook post
discovered by
informant 15
Piatro shows his
plans to Emad
(impressed) 25
Emad walks
away from
Piatro 69
Gets information
from him 26
DF member
points out that
leader is
becoming bad
32
Emma helps
Chloe
escape/deal
with DF 34
Discover Emma
and Chloe are
after him 21
4track kidnapper
2 7
Discover the
target is Paris
58
Emma starts to
fall for him
again 43
Kidnapped in
Paris 66
Piatro tracks
down Emma
in London 40
Pinpoints the
target as Paris 54
Hershel decides
to trust Emma
and Chloe, even
though he
shouldn't 35
Chloe takes out
terrorists who
kidnap her,
Tyler, and Nicu
78
Use unrelated
terrorist cell to
attack them 45
5
Track Piatro to
mexico 10
Piatro lures
Tyler to Paris
59
They go on a
date 44
Flashbacks from
kidnapping.
Chloe snaps him
out of it 72
Piatro tries to
explain to Chloe
49
Chloe gets him to
meet her 60
Emma points DF
team towards
remaining
terrorists in
CDG 68
Chloe tells
Emma they
need to expand
their personnel
82
Visits Chloe in
holding cell
threatens her
50
6Piatro escapes
with help of
Emad 12
Emad attacks
them, terrorists
chase 62
Piatro sets her
up 47
Tyler realizes
that he must get
over it internally
74
Piatro tries to
explain to
Emma 51
Emad follows
them 61
DF attacks
terrorists, no
bomb 75
Move team to
Paris begins to
execute plan 56
7Research Emad
14
Car chase in
Paris 63
He arrests her
48
Captures
informant 64
Discover Emad
is missing,
corner him 76
8Get a hit in
Pakistan 17
Terrorists
captured, Emad
triggers car
bomb 65
Emma walks
away from him
53
Rescued.
Informant goes
clean (or goes to
jail)? 79
9
Travel to
Pakistan. Do
they continue?
19
Tyler,
Informant,
Chloe all
captured 67
Emma pleads
with him to
save Tyler and
Chloe 71
10Find hut/village
where Emad is
22
Piatro contacts
Emma (save
friends or city)
70
11Drone strike
wipes out
village 23
Gas pumped
into catacombs
73
12Get another
lead 27
Emma tells
Piatro she's
disabled his
bomb 77
13
Emad's gone
but DF storms
and captures
Emma 28
Enraged they
meet in
catacombs.
Knife fight 80
14Gain trust of DF
33
Emma wins
fight. Saves
Paris 81
15
Questioned by
DF, learn there
is a bigger plot.
36
16Ping on Piatro
in London 37
17Chloe tracks
Piatro in
London 42
18Attacked by
terrorist cells in
London 46
80 Scene Subplot
1 Hired to find kidnappers
2 Research case file (kidnapper 3 dead)
3 Emad comes to Piatro for training
4 Tyler visits grave of kidnapper 3
5 track kidnapper 1 (meth head in Miami)
6 Convince Emma to let her enter field to find kidnappers
7 track kidnapper 2
8 Chloe helps out, saving Emma
9 Piatro describes his motives, debates Emad
10 Track Piatro to mexico
11 Tyler posts message on facebook threatening Piatro
12 Piatro escapes with help of Emad
13 Emad tries to gather Piatro's contacts for himself
14 Research Emad
15 Facebook post discovered by informant
16 Contact Russians for bomb parts
17 Get a hit in Pakistan
18 Chloe contacts him
19 Travel to Pakistan. Do they continue?
20 collect parts, attacked by DF, escape
21 Discover Emma and Chloe are after him
22 Find hut/village where Emad is
23 Drone strike wipes out village
24 Befriends/flirts with him
25 Piatro shows his plans to Emad (impressed)
26 Gets information from him Get another lead
27 Emad's gone but DF storms and captures Emma
28 Harsh interrogation of Chloe
29 Harsh interrogation of Emma
30 Emad confesses to his superior his respect/disgust with Piatro
31 DF member points out that leader is becoming bad
32 Emma helps Chloe escape/deal with DF
33 Gain trust of DF
34 Hershel decides to trust Emma and Chloe, even though he shouldn't
35 Questioned by DF, learn there is a bigger plot.
36 Ping on Piatro in London
37 Contacts flame in London for help
38 He wants to rekindle romance, she doesn't
39 Piatro tracks down Emma in London
40 He tries to convince her to get out of the business
41 They go on a date
42 Emma starts to fall for him again
43 Chloe tracks Piatro in London
44 Use unrelated terrorist cell to attack them
45 Attacked by terrorist cells in London
46 Piatro sets her up
47 He arrests her
48 Piatro tries to explain to Chloe
49 Visits Chloe in holding cell threatens her
50 Piatro tries to explain to Emma
51 Get out of jail
52 Emma walks away from him
53 Pinpoints the target as Paris
54 Try to determine what the plan is
55 Move team to Paris begins to execute plan
56 Informant tells Chloe plan
57 Piatro lures Tyler to Paris
58 Chloe gets him to meet her
59 Emad follows them
60 Emad attacks them, terrorists chase
61 Car chase in Paris
62 Captures informant
63 Terrorists captured, Emad triggers car bomb
64 Kidnapped in Paris
65 Emma points DF team towards remaining terrorists in CDG ??
66 Tyler, Informant, Chloe all captured
67 Piatro contacts Emma (save friends or city)
68 Emma pleads with him to save Tyler and Chloe
69 Flashbacks from kidnapping. Chloe snaps him out of it
70 Gas pumped into catacombs
71 Emad walks away from Piatro
72 Tyler realizes that he must get over it internally
73 DF attacks terrorists, no bomb ??
74 Discover Emad is missing, corner him ??
75 Emma tells Piatro she's disabled his bomb
76 Chloe takes out terrorists who kidnap her, Tyler, and Nicu
77 Rescued. Informant goes clean (or goes to jail)?
78 Enraged they meet in catacombs. Knife fight
79 Emma wins fight. Saves Paris
80 Chloe tells Emma they need to expand their personnel