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Level 3 exemplars and comments Paper 1 Sample 1: Part I, Section C, Question 11

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Sample 1: Part I, Section C, Question 11

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Sample 1: Part I, Section C, Question 11

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Sample 1: Part I, Section C, Question 11

Comments This answer shows understanding of how camera shots are employed to generate suspense in Vertigo. It also makes valid points about how an ‘eerie misty’ green colour is used to add effect to the scene where Judy ‘transforms’ herself back into Madeleine for Scottie. However, instead of concentrating on just one scene, a more thorough treatment could have been provided, given the prominence this colour receives throughout the film and its symbolic significance. Further, the candidate’s comments on how music is used to evoke mystery and tension are too broad and vague, and need further clarification or explanation.

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Sample 2: Part II, Question 20

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Sample 2: Part II, Question 20

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Sample 2: Part II, Question 20

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Sample 2: Part II, Question 20

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This response shows some understanding of the term “illusion” and manages to identify the illusions that characters have about life. It also attempts to critically compare the boy in ‘Araby’ and Gatsby in The Great Gatsby in terms of how they develop – the former experiences an epiphany, while the latter remains imprisoned in his illusion that he will win Daisy back, which leads to his tragic end. Nonetheless, the essay could have been made more convincing and used better examples (e.g. the evidence cited to demonstrate Gatsby is dissatisfied with reality is insubstantial). The overall argument could have been more clearly elaborated, notably why and in what ways Mangan’s sister and Daisy are impossible dreams for the boy and Gatsby respectively.

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Paper 2 Sample 1: Section C, Question 8

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Sample 1: Section C, Question 8

Comments (i) A basic answer which is mostly factually correct. It is weakened by misleading comments,

however, for example that the persona wanted to drink “to cool down” and that the wine persuaded him to drink.

(ii) Only two voices are identified, with minimal support (what are the “deeper thoughts” and his “true feelings”?)

(iii) Literal explanation only.

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Sample 2: Section B, Question 5

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Sample 2: Section B, Question 5

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Sample 2: Section B, Question 5

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Sample 2: Section B, Question 5

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(i) Demonstrates a simplistic understanding of the question. Incorrectly states that there is

only stillness in poem (A) and comments on hopelessness to support this. With (B), does not explain how or why “the flower and sea are taking each other’s form”.

(ii) This answer does indicate a connection between negative diction and the theme of death. However, there is only a tenuous explanation of the mythical allusions followed by a confusing commentary (“an omniscient atmosphere” / “starts to admire hell”).

(iii) A fair attempt to address the question, weakened by problems with expression. Points out the free verse form and links this to the restlessness depicted.