Please write for ten minutes about anything you would like. The point

of this task is to write continuously for ten minutes. Do not stop

writing.

Improve your ability to write a clear intro ¶ for an essay in response to a prompt.

to acquire (v.): to get something

Example: “I acquired two copies of this book.”

Example: “The library is going to acquire all of the books that were banned in 2009.”

Related Words: acquired, acquires, acquiring, acquisition, acquisitions

1. But now that I’m writing, a book came to mind.

2. I don’t have a favorite book, but I have a favorite topic, history. 

3. When the story initiates, the author captures your attention.

You Wrote ‘Em 3

In Diary 1, the writer thinks that she can “hide a bazooka” where? In her locker. In the trunk of her car. In a pair of pants. In the back of her class.

Quiz Review

In Diary 10, the writers discuss Proposition 187. What was Proposition 187? A Proposition to take away health care and

school from “illegal” immigrants. A Proposition to send “illegal” immigrants

back to the countries that they came from. A Proposition to give health care and school

to “illegal” immigrants. A Proposition to give all Californians better

access to health care services.

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In Diary 8, the writer writes about her experience with a sorority. She was upset about the questions asked because they were about… gangs. sex. Crime.her best friend.

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In Diary 2, why does the writer ask, “What the hell am I doing in here?” Because he was smarter than the other

students in the class. Because he wasn’t as smart as the other

students in the class. Because he had already taken the class

before. Because he was white.

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In Diary 9, what does Mrs. Gruwell ask the class to draw a picture of? Their school. Their houses. Their neighborhoods.Their families.

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Which of the following sentences is complete and correct? A war that had made the country become

worse. A war made the country become worse. A war made the country became worse.

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Which of the following sentences is complete and correct? In the past, my family was poor; everybody

had to work. In the past, my family was poor, everybody

had to work. In the past, my family was poor and

everybody had to work.

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Which of the following sentences is complete and correct? He was married to my grandmother. He got married with my grandmother. He was married with my grandmother.

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Which of the following is the correct definition of bulk (n.)? Fat or overweight A way to walk slowly The most of something

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Which of the following sentences uses bulk (n.) correctly? I bulk around the house until I feel tired. The bulk of books have never been banned. The book is a bulk, so I don’t carry it.

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ESL 102 Week 2

We spend approximately 70% of our time in school, but some people think we need more time in school.

However, lengthening more hours for school days has some disadvantages for students and teachers.

First, students will lack private time if the school day is made longer.

Second, students can study by themselves at home, so they don’t need a longer school day.

Last, teachers will have to work longer—something that might make their work worse.

Despite these reasons, some still want to make the school day longer; I’ll explain why that’s a bad idea.

A hook should grab a reader’s attention.Not all books are valuable.

If someone were to ban a book, it would show how pathetic they are and will initiate a big fight.

Studies show that books with inappropriate language create violence.

Is it okay to restrict part of the First Amendment?

Does anyone expect the end of the world? (If I have to agree to ban books one day, I would do it when it’s going to be the end of the world.)

Intros: Common Comments

These hooks don’t quite work:Anytime! (Not enough information for us to understand how it connects to the thesis.)

Nowadays, technologies are spread all over the world. (Not related to the thesis.)

Books which have a lot of bad language should be banned. (Not a hook so much a big part of the writer’s thesis.)

Intros: Common Comments

A hook is related to your thesis, but a hook is not your thesis.

It is okay to ban books when they have bad

contents, such as violence.

THESIS…NOT A HOOK.

Intro: Common Comments

Make sure your supporting ideas directly support your thesis:

Thesis: It’s okay to ban books for middle school and below.

SI#1: First of all, children have an open mind and what they see might not be helpful for them.

SI#2: Furthermore, young students might focus more on graphic content than on the theme.

SI#3: Last, these kids would learn bad words they shouldn’t know.

Intros: Common Comments

One of these supporting ideas doesn’t quite work:

Thesis: It’s okay to ban books when they’re violent.

SI#1: First, these books can affect readers in bad ways.

SI#2: Second, they will waste a lot of the government’s money.

SI#3: Last, these books can impact society negatively.

Intros: Common Comments

We spend approximately 70% of our time in school, but some people think we need more time in school.

However, lengthening more hours for school days has some disadvantages for students and teachers.

First, students will lack private time if the school day is made longer.

Second, students can study by themselves at home, so they don’t need a longer school day.

Last, teachers will have to work longer—something that might make their work worse.

Despite all the reasons against it such as a lack of private time, no time for home studying, and longer work hours, some still want to make the school day longer; I’ll explain why that’s a bad idea.

1)Did they follow the format? How?2)What makes this intro ¶ strong?3)How can it be improved?4)What lesson should other students

take from this intro when writing their own?

1. Interviewer (asks the Qs & keeps conversation going).

2. Time-keeper (we have 10 minutes).3. Recorder (writes the group’s

answers).4. Two presenters (present to the

class).

Presenting on HW Intro ¶s

• In groups, rewrite this introduction. Use the chart to organize your ideas.

• It’s okay to ban books when their

contents are too bad such as books about violence. First, these books can affect the readers in bad ways. Second, they will waste a lot of the buyer’s and government’s money. Last, they can cause many impacts for society. Therefore, banning books is okay when it affects the readers.

10 Minute ¶

Edit your 10-minute ¶s from Tuesday.

HOMEWORK

1) Continue to read in FWD according to our schedule—Diary Entries 11-20. Quiz Tuesday.

2) Answer this week’s question on the discussion board.

3) Write an intro responding to this question: “Do you agree that the Perry Township should ban The Freedom Writers Diary? If so, why? If not, why not?” from “Paragraph Assignment #1” from last Thursday. Submit on Blackboard.

4) Preview They Say, I Say. Come to class on Tuesday with

one interesting thing you found in the book.

Exit Slip

1) Can you do it again?