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structure, genre and style, conciseness and clarity etc, every criterion is covered

in my letters. I not only correct your mistakes but also rewrite better sentences

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OET exam.

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Dr Che OET writing correction (for Doctors and Nurses and others)

VIP package

( £ 4 / letter)

Premium package

( £ 2.5 / letter)

Time after receiving your letter Within hours (usually less than 24 hours, even earlier)

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Proofreading Yes Yes

Grammar mistakes Yes Yes

Feedback on conciseness, clarity, content, Genre and style, Organization and layout

Yes Yes

Paragraph structure yes Yes

Estimated grade Yes Yes

Estimated score in each of 6 OET writing criteria

Yes Yes

Recommendations ( individual, not copy paste)

Yes Yes

Mention of your strong and weak points

Yes Yes

Feedback according to new 6 OET writing criteria

Yes Yes

Send letter in Word /text file (for pic form contact me if available)

Word /text file

Reason of your mistakes Yes (explained in detail) Yes/No (if explained , it is less detailed)

Feedback quality High and advanced level standard

Detailed feedback Yes (too much detailed) Yes ( but less than VIP)

Clarifications or questions after feedback

Unlimited (as many as you wish)

Limited (just a few and important only)

If your letter is too weak, after feedback you may need to rewrite and I will check rewritten letter again

Yes NO

Case notes selection Posted by me in my group(may be yours, if available)

Only Posted by me in my group

Individual focus on your weaknesses and individual coaching

Yes No

If your sentences or paragraphs or parts of letter is not good or advanced, you need real improvement, I will rewrite advanced model sentences or paragraphs for you

Yes No (may be a few only)

Apart from your letter correction, other tips to improve your OET writing

Yes NO





Greeting:

Original Rewrite

Dr Helen Wu

South Melbourne Rehabilitation Services

123 Emerald St

South Melbourne 3205

20 January 2007

Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, 43 year old

Dear Dr Wu,

Dr Helen Wu


123 Emerald St


20 January 2007

Dear Dr Wu,

Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, age: 43 years

Goop points:

Almost ok

Weak points:





Dear Dr Wu,

(Remember we can write “Re: ……..” before and “Dear Dr …” after it,,,, but common style for

OET is to write “Dear Dr …, first and then write “Re:…..”

43 year old (it is ok to write in this way, but better would be age: 43 years

20 January 2007

(leave one blank line before and after this date, may be you have done this on your hand-

written letter)

Remember: there are different ways to writing greeting part, but if we stick to only one style, it

would save our time in our real exam. Our purpose is only to pass the exam.

Purpose:

Original Rewrite

I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, who has

got severe back injury not sufficiently

responding to treatment. Your assistance and

rehabilitation services will be greatly

appreciated.





appreciated.

Goop points:

You have selected relevant information for purpose, it is concise and to the point. Try to write

in a bit more formal and professional way.

Weak points:



who has got severe back injury not sufficiently responding to treatment. (yours is not wrong, but

it can be improved to be more professional:

, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury unresponsive to the treatment.

or

whose features are consistent with work-related back injury. (end your first sentence here, and

add “unresponsive/not responding to the treat in second sentence. Or you can skip from

introduction as it is becoming long.

Your further assistance for his rehabilitation would be highly appreciated.

Look at this intro, it is smooth, formal , concise and professional:

I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury.


2nd Body Paragraph:

Original Rewrite

Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty

days ago with a lower back strain as a result

of lifting weights at work. He had no

neurological symptoms. However there was

tenderness in the paralumbar region of the

L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of

movement was limited and straight leg

raising test was 45` bilaterally.

Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days

ago with a lower back strain as a result of

lifting a heavy object at work. He had no

neurological symptoms. However, there was


L4-L5 segment of the spine. His range of

movement was limited and Straight Leg

Raising test was at 45` bilaterally.

Goop points:



Weak points:

Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days ago with a lower back strain as a result of lifting a

heavy object at work. (this sentence is correct and ok, but we can improve it, if we put

“Initially” at the start it would look better, as the reader would immediately know that you are

writing about 1st visit. 2

nd thing here is that you calculated that first visit was 20 days ago, it is

not wrong, but in real exam we don’t have time to do so, and it does not look much better, better

put the date here”

Initially, Mr Wojovski presented on 28/12/06 with a complaint of a lower back strain after lifting

a heavy object at work.

Or

Initially, on 28/12/06, Mr …….

He had no neurological symptoms. However, there was tenderness in the paralumbar region of

the L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of movement was limited and straight leg raising test was

45` bilaterally. (all of these sentence are related to the physical examination, try to organize

things, if we start with “On examination,” the reader would know now we are talking about

physical examination. + join related things.

On examination, tenderness in his paralumbar region was noted and his range of movement was

limited. Also, his Straight Leg Raising test was at 45`.

Bilaterally (as there is no mention of “bilateral”, avoid using it),

You should have mentioned here what was done at that visit, you wrote it at the start of next

paragraph, that is not good, write it at the end of this sentence, then in next paragraph talk about

next visit/visits.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:

Original Rewrite



He was advised to rest and was prescribed

analgesics. This however was not sufficient,

therefore Naprosyn and physiotherapy was

commenced after subsequent visit)

12/1/2007). He improved and returned to

work, but soon had exacerbation of pain and

return of previous clinical signs.

He was advised an X-ray of lumbar spine,

review consultation with a physiotherapist.

Three days later he still has persistent pain,

with reportedly little temporary relief from

physiotherapy.

He was advised to rest and to take analgesics.

This however was not sufficient, therefore

Naprosyn and physiotherapy were


12/1/2007). His condition was improved, and

he returned to his work, but soon had

exacerbation of pain and return of previous

clinical signs.

He was advised an X-ray of his lumbar spine

and a review consultation with a

physiotherapist. Three days later, he still has

persistent pain with a temporary relief

with/after physiotherapy.

Goop points:

Weak points:

He was advised to rest and to take analgesics. (yours is not wrong, but this one is better, ,, this

sentence should be at the end of the above paragraph)

This however was not sufficient, therefore Naprosyn (using “however”, and “therefore” in the

same sentence, does not look good, avoid it)

We would start with paragraph like this:

On 02/01/07 or On his next visit, Mr. Wojovski’s condition had deteriorated , and

physiotherapy and Naprosyn 500mg twice a day were advised. On his next visit, he was advised

to return to his work and continue on physiotherapy. However, his pain was exacerbated by his

return to work. There was reduced front flexion and extension, and his ROM was at 45

bilaterally.

Your next paragraph’s organization is also faulty, you are putting last visit’s things in next para.

You can start your next paragraph with Today’s visit or you can put this at the end of your last

paragraph:

Today, his symptoms still persist and he is unable to perform light duties. + (talk about

temporary physio relief)



Closing:

Original Rewrite

Mr Wojovski is married, working as a

factory worker for the last 18 years, which

involves lifting heavy objects. Both his

marriage and performance at work are

getting seriously affected by his clinical

condition.

In view of the above, your expert advise and

management as a rehabilitation specialist are

very much required. I would be grateful for

your assistance regarding the same.

Yours sincerely

Doctor

Mr Wojovski is married and has been

working in a factory for the last 18 years,

which involves lifting heavy objects. Both

his marriage and performance at work are


condition.

In view of the above, your expert advice and




Yours sincerely

Doctor

Goop points:

Weak points:

working as a factory worker ( does not look good,

Both his marriage and performance at work are getting seriously affected by his clinical

condition.

(no need to mention this here again, we have already told in the letter that his working is being

affected)



Just add one sentence here. He drinks 1 to 2 glasses of beer per night.

Advice is noun , and advise is a verb.

In view of the above, your expert advice and management as a rehabilitation specialist are very

much required. I would be grateful for your assistance regarding the same.

(make it only one sentence,

In view of the above, I would be grateful for your further advice and management of his

condition regarding his rehabilitation. ( or something like that you can think about )

Don’t forget to write this line at the end:

Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 212

Overall Grade: C+ or hardly B-

Your English is good, but you should understand and write according to OET’s criteria. You can easily achieve grade B with a bit more supervised practice and keeping in mind all the points I mentioned.

Individual scores:

Purpose

Description Grade Your Score

Purpose of document is immediately apparent and sufficiently expanded as required

3



Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently highlighted or expanded

2 2

Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and may show very limited expansion

1

Description Grade 2. Content


Content is appropriate to intended reader and addresses what is needed to continue care (key information is included; no important details missing); content from case notes is accurately represented

7

Performance shares features of bands 5 and 7 6

Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly addresses what is needed to continue care; content from case notes is generally accurately represented

5 5


Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; some key information (about case or to continue care) may be missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content

3


Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate

1

Performance below Band 1 0

3. Conciseness & Clarity




Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly

7


Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly

5 4 or 5


Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful

3


Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful

1


4. Genre & Style Description Grade Your

Score Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient

7


Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies; technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies

5 4 or 5


Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and

3



abbreviations may distract reader


The writing shows inadequate understanding of the genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader

1

Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient

0

5. Organisation & Layout Description Grade Your

Score Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical and clear key information is highlighted and sub-sections are well organized document is well laid out

7


Organisation and paragraphing are generally appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key information; layout is generally good language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies

5 4 or 5


Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, creating strain for the reader; key information may not be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some lapses

3


Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; or heavy reliance on case note structure; key information is not well highlighted and the layout may not be appropriate

1




6. Language

Description Grade Your

Score Language features (spelling/punctuation/vocabulary/ grammar/sentence structure) are accurate and do not interfere with meaning

7


Minor slips in language generally do not interfere with meaning

5 4 or 5


Inaccuracies in language, in particular in complex structures, cause minor strain for the reader but do not interfere with meaning

3


Inaccuracies in language cause considerable strain for the reader and may interfere with meaning

1




abbreviations may distract reader


The writing shows inadequate understanding of the genre and target reader; mis- or over-use of technical language and abbreviations cause strain for the reader

1

Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient

0

5. Organisation & Layout Description Grade Your

Score Organisation and paragraphing are appropriate, logical and clear key information is highlighted and sub-sections are well organized document is well laid out

7


Organisation and paragraphing are generally appropriate, logical and clear; occasional lapses of organisation in sub-sections and/or highlighting of key information; layout is generally good language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies

5 4 or 5


Organisation and paragraphing are not always logical, creating strain for the reader; key information may not be highlighted layout is mostly appropriate with some lapses

3


Organisation not logical, putting strain on the reader; or heavy reliance on case note structure; key information is not well highlighted and the layout may not be appropriate

1




Length of document is appropriate to case and reader (no irrelevant information included); information is summarised effectively and presented clearly

7


Length of document is mostly appropriate to case and reader; information is mostly summarised effectively and presented clearly

5 4 or 5


Inclusion of some irrelevant information distracts from overall clarity of document; attempt to summarise only partially successful

3


Clarity of document is obscured by the inclusion of many unnecessary details; attempt to summarise not successful

1


4. Genre & Style Description Grade Your

Score Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader (discipline and knowledge); technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately for document and recipient

7


Writing is clinical/factual and appropriate to genre and reader with occasional, minor inappropriacies; technical language, abbreviations and polite language are used appropriately with minor inconsistencies

5 4 or 5


Writing is at times inappropriate to the document or target reader; over-reliance on technical language and

3


Purpose of document is apparent but not sufficiently highlighted or expanded

2 2

Purpose of document is not immediately apparent and may show very limited expansion

1

Description Grade 2. Content


Content is appropriate to intended reader and addresses what is needed to continue care (key information is included; no important details missing); content from case notes is accurately represented

7


Content is appropriate to intended reader and mostly addresses what is needed to continue care; content from case notes is generally accurately represented

5 5


Content is mostly appropriate to intended reader; some key information (about case or to continue care) may be missing; there may be some inaccuracies in content

3


Content does not provide intended reader sufficient information about the case and what is needed to continue care; key information is missing or inaccurate

1


3. Conciseness & Clarity


Just add one sentence here. He drinks 1 to 2 glasses of beer per night.

Advice is noun , and advise is a verb.

In view of the above, your expert advice and management as a rehabilitation specialist are very

much required. I would be grateful for your assistance regarding the same.

(make it only one sentence,

In view of the above, I would be grateful for your further advice and management of his

condition regarding his rehabilitation. ( or something like that you can think about )

Don’t forget to write this line at the end:

Should there be any queries, please do not hesitate to contact me.

Overall Score + Advice

Word count: 212

Overall Grade: C+ or hardly B-

Your English is good, but you should understand and write according to OET’s criteria. You can easily achieve grade B with a bit more supervised practice and keeping in mind all the points I mentioned.

Individual scores:

Purpose


Purpose of document is immediately apparent and sufficiently expanded as required

3


Closing:

Original Rewrite

Mr Wojovski is married, working as a

factory worker for the last 18 years, which

involves lifting heavy objects. Both his

marriage and performance at work are


condition.

In view of the above, your expert advise and




Yours sincerely

Doctor

Mr Wojovski is married and has been

working in a factory for the last 18 years,

which involves lifting heavy objects. Both

his marriage and performance at work are


condition.

In view of the above, your expert advice and




Yours sincerely

Doctor

Goop points:

Weak points:

working as a factory worker ( does not look good,

Both his marriage and performance at work are getting seriously affected by his clinical

condition.

(no need to mention this here again, we have already told in the letter that his working is being

affected)


He was advised to rest and was prescribed

analgesics. This however was not sufficient,

therefore Naprosyn and physiotherapy was


12/1/2007). He improved and returned to

work, but soon had exacerbation of pain and

return of previous clinical signs.

He was advised an X-ray of lumbar spine,

review consultation with a physiotherapist.

Three days later he still has persistent pain,

with reportedly little temporary relief from

physiotherapy.

He was advised to rest and to take analgesics.

This however was not sufficient, therefore

Naprosyn and physiotherapy were


12/1/2007). His condition was improved, and

he returned to his work, but soon had

exacerbation of pain and return of previous

clinical signs.

He was advised an X-ray of his lumbar spine

and a review consultation with a

physiotherapist. Three days later, he still has

persistent pain with a temporary relief

with/after physiotherapy.

Goop points:

Weak points:

He was advised to rest and to take analgesics. (yours is not wrong, but this one is better, ,, this

sentence should be at the end of the above paragraph)

This however was not sufficient, therefore Naprosyn (using “however”, and “therefore” in the

same sentence, does not look good, avoid it)

We would start with paragraph like this:

On 02/01/07 or On his next visit, Mr. Wojovski’s condition had deteriorated , and

physiotherapy and Naprosyn 500mg twice a day were advised. On his next visit, he was advised

to return to his work and continue on physiotherapy. However, his pain was exacerbated by his

return to work. There was reduced front flexion and extension, and his ROM was at 45

bilaterally.

Your next paragraph’s organization is also faulty, you are putting last visit’s things in next para.

You can start your next paragraph with Today’s visit or you can put this at the end of your last

paragraph:

Today, his symptoms still persist and he is unable to perform light duties. + (talk about

temporary physio relief)


Weak points:

Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days ago with a lower back strain as a result of lifting a

heavy object at work. (this sentence is correct and ok, but we can improve it, if we put

“Initially” at the start it would look better, as the reader would immediately know that you are

writing about 1st visit. 2

nd thing here is that you calculated that first visit was 20 days ago, it is

not wrong, but in real exam we don’t have time to do so, and it does not look much better, better

put the date here”

Initially, Mr Wojovski presented on 28/12/06 with a complaint of a lower back strain after lifting

a heavy object at work.

Or

Initially, on 28/12/06, Mr …….

He had no neurological symptoms. However, there was tenderness in the paralumbar region of

the L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of movement was limited and straight leg raising test was

45` bilaterally. (all of these sentence are related to the physical examination, try to organize

things, if we start with “On examination,” the reader would know now we are talking about

physical examination. + join related things.

On examination, tenderness in his paralumbar region was noted and his range of movement was

limited. Also, his Straight Leg Raising test was at 45`.

Bilaterally (as there is no mention of “bilateral”, avoid using it),

You should have mentioned here what was done at that visit, you wrote it at the start of next

paragraph, that is not good, write it at the end of this sentence, then in next paragraph talk about

next visit/visits.

3rd +- 4th Body Paragraph:

Original Rewrite


who has got severe back injury not sufficiently responding to treatment. (yours is not wrong, but

it can be improved to be more professional:

, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury unresponsive to the treatment.

or

whose features are consistent with work-related back injury. (end your first sentence here, and

add “unresponsive/not responding to the treat in second sentence. Or you can skip from

introduction as it is becoming long.


Look at this intro, it is smooth, formal , concise and professional:

I am writing to refer Mr. Wojovski, whose features are consistent with work-related back injury.


2nd Body Paragraph:

Original Rewrite

Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty

days ago with a lower back strain as a result

of lifting weights at work. He had no

neurological symptoms. However there was


L4-L5 segment of the spine. Range of

movement was limited and straight leg

raising test was 45` bilaterally.

Mr. Wojovski initially presented twenty days

ago with a lower back strain as a result of

lifting a heavy object at work. He had no

neurological symptoms. However, there was


L4-L5 segment of the spine. His range of

movement was limited and Straight Leg

Raising test was at 45` bilaterally.

Goop points:



Dear Dr Wu,

(Remember we can write “Re: ……..” before and “Dear Dr …” after it,,,, but common style for

OET is to write “Dear Dr …, first and then write “Re:…..”

43 year old (it is ok to write in this way, but better would be age: 43 years

20 January 2007

(leave one blank line before and after this date, may be you have done this on your hand-

written letter)

Remember: there are different ways to writing greeting part, but if we stick to only one style, it

would save our time in our real exam. Our purpose is only to pass the exam.

Purpose:

Original Rewrite





appreciated.





appreciated.

Goop points:

You have selected relevant information for purpose, it is concise and to the point. Try to write

in a bit more formal and professional way.

Weak points:




Greeting:

Original Rewrite

Dr Helen Wu


123 Emerald St


20 January 2007


Dear Dr Wu,

Dr Helen Wu


123 Emerald St


20 January 2007

Dear Dr Wu,

Re : Mr Jack Wojovski, age: 43 years

Goop points:

Almost ok

Weak points:


Dr Che OET writing correction (for Doctors and Nurses and others)

VIP package

( £ 4 / letter)

Premium package

( £ 2.5 / letter)

Time after receiving your letter Within hours (usually less than 24 hours, even earlier)

Takes more time than VIP (usually within 48 hours)

Proofreading Yes Yes

Grammar mistakes Yes Yes

Feedback on conciseness, clarity, content, Genre and style, Organization and layout

Yes Yes

Paragraph structure yes Yes

Estimated grade Yes Yes

Estimated score in each of 6 OET writing criteria

Yes Yes

Recommendations ( individual, not copy paste)

Yes Yes

Mention of your strong and weak points

Yes Yes

Feedback according to new 6 OET writing criteria

Yes Yes

Send letter in Word /text file (for pic form contact me if available)

Word /text file

Reason of your mistakes Yes (explained in detail) Yes/No (if explained , it is less detailed)

Feedback quality High and advanced level standard

Detailed feedback Yes (too much detailed) Yes ( but less than VIP)

Clarifications or questions after feedback

Unlimited (as many as you wish)

Limited (just a few and important only)

If your letter is too weak, after feedback you may need to rewrite and I will check rewritten letter again

Yes NO

Case notes selection Posted by me in my group(may be yours, if available)

Only Posted by me in my group

Individual focus on your weaknesses and individual coaching

Yes No

If your sentences or paragraphs or parts of letter is not good or advanced, you need real improvement, I will rewrite advanced model sentences or paragraphs for you

Yes No (may be a few only)

Apart from your letter correction, other tips to improve your OET writing

Yes NO




I am Dr Che (MD). Apart from my own job as a doctor, I also teach OET. Unlike

many other OET writing correction services my service is quick, detailed, and

comprehensive. I not only correct grammar mistakes, but also, organization,

structure, genre and style, conciseness and clarity etc, every criterion is covered

in my letters. I not only correct your mistakes but also rewrite better sentences

for you to learn (you can see my sample corrections below). Moreover, unlike

many other OET teachers, I have a real experience of OET as I myself passed my

OET exam.

My correction service is very cheap in these days (VIP package only 4 pounds per

letter, Premium package only 2.5 pounds per letter). It may change in future.

Look at my sample corrections to see how my correction is the best in the market

at the moment and also to learn.

If you are interested in my correction service please inbox me.

Join my facebook group to contact and for more free guidance and materials and

for case notes of sample letters

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