Editing parragraphs

Improve coherence

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To improve the coherence and flow of ideas in the paragraph, which of these

would be the best way to revise sentence 1

Sentence:(1) the discovery channel is a good channel. (2) I saw a program on the coasts of Australia. (3) It showed the beaches in Australia. (4) It also showed the wild sea life. (5) I liked the different resorts. (6) After the program I would like to visit Australia.

Answer choices:A. The discovery channel, is a

good channel.B. a good channel to watch is

Discovery Channel.C. I like watching the

Discovery ChannelD. Many people watch

discovery channel.

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To improve the coherence and flow of ideas in the paragraph, which of these

would be the best way to revise sentence 1Sentence:

(1) The Amazon jungle is an interesting place. (2) I saw a monkey up high on the trees. (3) I also saw some tarantulas as big as my hand. (4) There was a huge waterfall and an amazing river. (5) It rains there a lot, but it’s never cold. (6)It is a tropical place where many creatures live.

Answer choices:A. I would like to visit the

Amazon Jungle.B. Last summer I went to the

Amazon jungle.C. My mom went to the

Amazon jungle last year.D. Have you ever been in the

Amazon Jungle?

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To improve the coherence and flow of ideas in the paragraph, which of these

would be the best way to revise sentence 1Sentence:(1) Surfers are cool people. (2) At the beach they might find sharks. (3) They also could encounter strong waves. (4) Some surfers have drawn because of strong currents. (5) Surfing in the middle of the ocean can be very dangerous.

Answer choices:A. Surfing is a good sportB. Surfing is fun and also very

dangerousC. Surfers are daring peopleD. Would you like surfing?

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To improve the coherence and flow of ideas in the paragraph, which of these

would be the best way to revise sentence 1Sentence:(1) Plasma TVs are expensive. (2) They make radioactive rays. (3) The light they make is dangerous for our eyes. (4) Plasma TVs have proven to cause cancer. (5) Besides people waste their lives in front of them. (6) Plasma TVs prevent people form doing exercise. (7) People with plasma TVs usually become obese with time. (8)Plasma TVs are unhealthy.

Answer choices:A. Plasma TVs are awesome

devicesB. Plasma TVs are harmful to the

environmentC. Plasma TVs have awesome

definitionD. Plasma TVs show wonderful

things

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To improve the coherence and flow of ideas in the paragraph, which of these

would be the best way to revise sentence 1Sentence:

(1) Plasma TVs are expensive. (2) They make time pass fast. (3) The pictures they bring are almost real. (4) Because of higher resolution we can see discoveries more clear. (5) Having a plasma TV is like taking a trip around the world. (6) You could also do exercise in front of your plasma TV. (7) People with plasma TVs usually become knowledgeable with time. (8)Plasma TVs are awesome devices.

Answer choices:A. Plasma TVs are expensive

devicesB. Plasma TVs are good for

doing exercise. C. Plasma TVs have awesome

definitionD. Plasma TVs show

wonderful things

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