Do Now #22 (See Handout):Do Now #22 (See Handout):• The following sentences, which make up The following sentences, which make up

the first paragraph of E.B. White’s essay the first paragraph of E.B. White’s essay “Once More to the Lake,” have been “Once More to the Lake,” have been rearranged. rearranged. Place the sentences in what Place the sentences in what seems like to you a coherent sequence by seems like to you a coherent sequence by relying on language signals relying on language signals such as such as transitions. Be prepared to explain your transitions. Be prepared to explain your reasons for the placement of each reasons for the placement of each sentence. sentence.

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent??

• Five Keys to an Five Keys to an Effective ParagraphEffective Paragraph1.1. Focus on a main pointFocus on a main point2.2. Develop the main pointDevelop the main point3.3. Choose a suitable pattern of Choose a suitable pattern of

organizationorganization4.4. Make paragraphs coherentMake paragraphs coherent5.5. If necessary, adjust paragraph length If necessary, adjust paragraph length

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent??

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent??

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent??

• ……Bodies grow faster than brains. Large animals Bodies grow faster than brains. Large animals have low ratios of brain weight to body weight. have low ratios of brain weight to body weight. Brains grow only about two-thirds as fast as Brains grow only about two-thirds as fast as bodies. We have no reason to believe that large bodies. We have no reason to believe that large animals are consistently stupider than their animals are consistently stupider than their smaller relatives, we must conclude that large smaller relatives, we must conclude that large animals require relatively less brain to do as animals require relatively less brain to do as well as smaller animals.well as smaller animals.

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent??

• AdditionAddition: You must complete this essay by 5 p.m. : You must complete this essay by 5 p.m. _______you must do the exercises on page 47._______you must do the exercises on page 47.

• ExamplesExamples: He often eats strange foods. _______, : He often eats strange foods. _______, he once ate cow brains. he once ate cow brains.

• ContrastContrast: Bill earned an A on his essay, : Bill earned an A on his essay, _______Susan got a B. _______Susan got a B.

• SimilaritySimilarity: Rock climbing takes much practice and : Rock climbing takes much practice and skill. _______, learning to write well requires a skill. _______, learning to write well requires a great deal of practice.great deal of practice.

Aim: How do you make your paragraphs Aim: How do you make your paragraphs coherentcoherent? ?

• Pair-Share: Pair-Share: Working with a partner, choose Working with a partner, choose the transition that makes the most sense in the transition that makes the most sense in the context.the context.–What is What is the purpose the purpose of this transition? How of this transition? How

would you classify its function according to would you classify its function according to the given list?the given list?– Could you give another example of a Could you give another example of a

transition that would serve the same transition that would serve the same purpose but purpose but change the tone change the tone to make it to make it more formal/informal? more formal/informal?

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent??

• Imagine this paragraph is a part of a larger Imagine this paragraph is a part of a larger essay on Wendy’s. essay on Wendy’s. Insert transitional words Insert transitional words & phrases within this paragraph to make it & phrases within this paragraph to make it more cohesive & less choppy. To do so, more cohesive & less choppy. To do so, you’ll need to determine what kind of you’ll need to determine what kind of relationships exist between sentences and relationships exist between sentences and phrases & choose transitions that are phrases & choose transitions that are appropriate. You may change punctuation as appropriate. You may change punctuation as needed.needed.

Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more coherentcoherent?? • In spite of such negative statistics, I will continue In spite of such negative statistics, I will continue

to frequent Wendy’s in the Student Union to frequent Wendy’s in the Student Union building. The fries are excellent. They are rarely building. The fries are excellent. They are rarely too greasy. They are usually fresh and crispy. too greasy. They are usually fresh and crispy. They aren’t too crispy. The burgers are sizzling They aren’t too crispy. The burgers are sizzling hot. The warmth of the burger is accentuated hot. The warmth of the burger is accentuated by the coolness of the mayonnaise & other by the coolness of the mayonnaise & other condiments. A Frosty makes a good dessert. condiments. A Frosty makes a good dessert. Dinner at Wendy’s is not healthy. The food Dinner at Wendy’s is not healthy. The food tastes great.tastes great.

Aim: How do simple transitions make your Aim: How do simple transitions make your paragraphs more paragraphs more coherentcoherent? ?