Jillian Chyriwski

Emre Koyuncu

English 106

December 10, 2011

Cover Letter

Throughout the semester in English 106, I have completed multiple assignments.

In this portfolio, I have revised two assignments based on the comments and feedback I

have received from the teacher. In order to improve my work, I have listened and

adjusted what I had done to meet the assignments criteria.

The feedback I have received for assignments two and three have helped me

revise my work in order to improve them. For assignment two, I was given feedback

based on supporting claims, verbs of authorial action, a creative introduction and

transition words. From this feedback I have revised my work to meet the criteria that my

teacher expected. Also, from the other feedback I was given, I was able to positively

improve my paper and correct any mistakes or parts I was missing. This feedback was

very helpful. For assignment three, my work was not properly done. The feedback I

received from my teacher, helped pinpoint the exact parts of the assignment that I needed

to improve on. For this assignment I was missing some key aspects, such as an

introduction, a conclusion, and a title page. Also, my photos were not in harmony with

their respective paragraphs. This feedback allowed me to properly revise this assignment.

Instead of just receiving a grade for these assignments, the feedback was very helpful.

Also, the conferences helped me get further explanations on why I received the grade and

feedback I did.

Based on this feedback, I revised both assignments. I wanted to improve my

assignments so I could properly achieve every aspect of the rubric. For assignment two, I

was missing a creative introduction. To improve on this, I started off my paper with a

quote. This quote set the tone for the rest of my paper and I believe it accurately depicts

the actions of the main characters in both Grizzly Man and Into the Wild. I was also

missing transition words, which I added in my revision because it would allow my paper

to flow smoothly. For assignment three, the organization of my paper was not up to par. I

was missing an introduction and a conclusion. I took two more photos, which I used as

my introduction and conclusion in order to complete my paper. These two added photos

also, I believe, fixed the problem of my picture and paragraph harmony. I now have a

proper number of photos with their respective paragraphs. I feel my revisions for both

assignments have positively improved my work. The feedback I received helped me find

ways to work on the parts of these projects that were either missing or not properly done.