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COPY READING AND HEADLINE WRITING Copyreading is much like the work of a communication arts teacher correcting compositions, except that he uses different symbols. A copy may be a news item, an editorial, a feature story or any literary article. Duties of a copyreader: 1. Straighten out ungrammatical construction. 2. Shorten sentences and tighten paragraphs. 3. See that the paper’s style requirements are strictly followed. Check names, addresses, title, designations, identifications, figures, etc. 4. Rewrite the story completely if it is poorly written. 5. Rewrite the lead or the first few paragraphs whenever necessary, but must never tamper with the facts unless he is sure of his corrections. 6. Delete all opinion, speculations and statements on news which are without attribution or sources. 7. Watch out for slanting or any attempt to present the story in a subtly biased way. 8. Watch for libelous statements. 9. Recheck figures and totals. 10. Cross-out adjectives in news which tend to make a story sound over-written. 11. Cut a story to size or to the required length if necessary. 12. Check attributions and see to it that they are properly identified. 13. Challenge facts, claims, or reports when they sound anomalous, illogical and incredible. 14. Check sluglines and paging sequences 15. Write headlines What to copyread? 1. Errors in fact 2. Errors in grammar 3. Errors in structure 4. Errors in style 5. Libelous and derogatory statements 6. Seditious and rebellious matter 7. Expressions contrary to law and good taste 8. Opinion and editorializing statements 9. Verbal deadwood, redundancy 10. Technical terms, slang, jargons Copy-reading symbols Punctuation Marks

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COPY READING AND HEADLINE WRITINGCopyreading is much like the work of a communication arts teacher correcting compositions, except that he uses different symbols.

A copy may be a news item, an editorial, a feature story or any literary article.

Duties of a copyreader:

1. Straighten out ungrammatical construction.

2. Shorten sentences and tighten paragraphs.

3. See that the paper’s style requirements are strictly followed. Check names, addresses, title, designations, identifications, figures, etc.

4. Rewrite the story completely if it is poorly written.

5. Rewrite the lead or the first few paragraphs whenever necessary, but must never tamper with the facts unless he is sure of his corrections.

6. Delete all opinion, speculations and statements on news which are without attribution or sources.

7. Watch out for slanting or any attempt to present the story in a subtly biased way.

8. Watch for libelous statements.

9. Recheck figures and totals.

10. Cross-out adjectives in news which tend to make a story sound over-written.

11. Cut a story to size or to the required length if necessary.

12. Check attributions and see to it that they are properly identified.

13. Challenge facts, claims, or reports when they sound anomalous, illogical and incredible.

14. Check sluglines and paging sequences

15. Write headlines

What to copyread?

1. Errors in fact

2. Errors in grammar

3. Errors in structure

4. Errors in style

5. Libelous and derogatory statements

6. Seditious and rebellious matter

7. Expressions contrary to law and good taste

8. Opinion and editorializing statements

9. Verbal deadwood, redundancy

10. Technical terms, slang, jargons

Copy-reading symbols

Punctuation Marks

Symbols Meaning Outcome

The Bionic Woman Emphasize quotes “The Bionic Woman”

Dr Arthur Cruz Jr Emphasize periods Dr. Arthur Cruz Jr.

said “I must go.” Emphasize comma said, “I must go.”

Numbers and Abbreviations

in Nov. Spell out in November

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Doctor Arthur Cruz Abbreviate Dr. Arthur Cruz

twenty boys Use numeral 20 boys

2 girls were… Spell out Two girls were…

Special form of type

Manila, philippines Capitalize MANILA, Philippines

Letter and word changes

meet on Saturday Bridge over meet Saturday

those b oys Close up space those boys

Fe Cruz Principal Transpose Principal Fe Cruz

recieve Transpose receive

pamplet Insert letter pamphlet

went market Insert word went to market

Manila pAper Lower case Manila paper

received free gifts Delete word received gifts

judgement Delete letter within judgment

develope iskill Delete before/after develop skill

the most talented and Kill the principal

enthusiastic principal

Allright wehave time Insert space All right we have time

We were indeed very Run in copy We were indeed very

happy because happy because…

Others

Paco, Manila… Indent for paragraph Paco, Manila…

Today he will… Today he will…

Welfrido Cruz Spell as written Welfrido Kruz

One boy came Restore text; disregard On boy came

correction

Elected prexy Center subhead Elected prexy

the un - Syllabicate the un-

finished task finished task

The gong Set in boldface the gong

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She read Les Miserables Set in italics She read Les Miserables

30 or # Story is finished

more or ) Story is unfinished

Seminar Text continued on the

(…2) Next page

# - folio copy See copy as writtenNote: To arrange paragraphs just place the number (e.g. #1, #3) of the corresponding paragraphs in the left portion of the copy.SAMPLE COPY TEST

Slug line: ________________________

Headline: _____________________________ No. of units: ____________

The PNU elementary school launch the anual cleanliness & beatification contest September 16 at the

school social hole.

In a mating with Presidents and vice-presidents of each class from Grade III to Gr. Six, Mrs. Alegria Flora

Principal explain the prosedures to folow.

According to the principal, its class class will be given an areas to cleaned. Ones a week, school officials

will vissit the area and chose the cleanest amongst them.

Prices will be awarded to the class who’s area will be pick the cleanest for 3 times. Th

This will give insentives to the students explained Mrs. Flores.

The handsome and intelligent Mr. Garcia Ramon, vocation al teacher who facilitated the meeting told the

studes that thru the contest cooperation will be developed

while order and cleanliness be maintained.

Congrattulations Mrs. Garcia

HeadliningIt is easy to write the news headline. Just look at the first paragraph called the lead which contains the gist, Just write the gist of that lead.

Do’s and don’t’s in writing traditional headlines

1. Make your headline answer as many W’s as possible.

2. The headline should summarize the news story, but must avoid using all the words used in the lead. It should contain nothing that is not found in the story.

3. Positive heads are preferable to negative ones. School physician allays flu fear is better than Flu epidemic not rampant in city.

4. Out a verb expressed or implied in every deck.

5. Omit articles like a, an, and the, and all forms of the verb to be (is, are, be, etc.), unless needed to make the meaning clear.

6. Use the strongest word in the first line as much as possible.

7. The active verb is better than the passive verb in headlines (Food production drive intensified; RP’s lost image abroad regained)

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8. Use the present tense for past stories and the infinitive form for future stories (Archbishop Sin bats for national reconciliation; Lantern parade to cap Xmas affairs).

9. Write numbers in figures or spell them out depending upon your needs for your unit counts.

10. Avoid heads that carry double meaning.

11. Use only common abbreviations.

Punctuating a headline1. Use a comma in place of the conjuction and

2. Two related thoughts should be separated with a semicolon.

3. The dash may be used in smaller decks but not for headlines in large types.

4. The single quotation marks are used in headlines.

5. Follow the other rules of punctuations.

Unit counting in headline½ unit - jiltf and all punctuations except the em dash (--), and the question mark (?)

1 unit - the question mark, space, all figures, capital JILTF, all lower case letters except jiltf

1 ½ units - the em dash, lower case m and w, and all capital letters except capital M and W and JILTF

2 units - capital M, W

Headline vocabulary (Formula: subject-verb-object ala text message)

1. Faculty club strengthened (beefed up)

2. Enrolment decreases (dips)

3. Science examinations announced (quiz bared)

4. Contests highlight Animal Week (cap)

5. Santos urges cooperation (bats for, calls for)

6. DepEd disapproves tuition fee increase (bucks, nixes, axes)

7. Ateneo wins 12 medals in press contest (bags, romp away with; tilt, parley)

8. Principal praises editors humility (lauds, extols)

9. Local staff dominates press tilt (rules, lords over)

10. Local basketball players retain championship (sluggers; crown)

11. US attacks Russ nuclear test (hits)

12. Laurel ends diplomatic tour (winds up)

13. Cops ended syndicate (busted)

14. Slay suspect questioned (grilled, probed)

15. RP sees import hike (eyes)

16. 456 pass bar exams (hurdle)

17. Lim dismisses 5 cops (fires)

18. RP-Malaysia dispute solved (row)

19. Fiscal dismiss rape charge (dismiss; rap)

20. Import talk delayed (snagged)

Mga halimbawa

Huwag gumamit ng pangalan maliban kung kilala ito

Mali—Jaime Diaz, nahalal na pangulo

Tama—Mag-aaral ng Mapa, nahalal na pangulo ng samahan

Maging tiyak (specific)

Mali—Mag-aaral, nagwagi sa paligsahan

Tama—Mag-aaral ng Mapa, nagwagi sa pagsulat ng balita

Iwasan ang opinyon sa balita

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Mali—Paaralang Datu Puti, lumaro ng kahanga-hanga

Tama—Paaralang Datu Puti, nanalo ng 3 sa 4 na laban

Lagyan ng pandiwa ang bawat ulo

Mali—Limang guro sa seminar

Tama—Limang guro, dadalo sa seminar

Iwasan ang paggamit ng negatibong pandiwa

Mali—Paligsahan sa talumpatian, hindi matutuloy

Tama—Paligsahan sat al;umpatian, pinagpaliban

Gumamit ng makakatawag-pansing pandiwa

Mahina—Tinato ng Ateneo ang St. Joseph, 50-36

Malakas—Pinataob ng Ateneo ang St. Joseph, 50-36

Gamitin ang maikli at kilalang salitaMasalita—Bayang Pilipinas, sasali sa pandaigdig na palaro

Maikli—RP, sasali sa olimpiyada

Iwasan ang paggamit ng pantukoy at ng pandiwang pantulong nahango saverb to be

Mali—Si Japhet Burgos ay ang napiling punong patnugot ng Ripples

Tama—Japhet Burgos, napiling punong patnugot ng Ripples

Lead (pamatnubay)– Most important facts

A FOUR-YEAR-OLD dog saved the life of his blind master, Thursday night, but the canine’s loyalty cost the trusty animal his life.

Bridge—Elaboration of lead

In serious condition today in Doctor’s Hospital is Erland Escobanez, 71, a street sweeper. Escobanez of SSS Building, Rizal St., Iloilo City was found early this morning unconscious on a sidewalk near the Aglipayan Church in the Iloilo Terminal Market.

Less important facts

Police theorized that Escobanez was knocked unconscious when he fell, his head hitting a stone. Potpot, his dog, apparently tried to shield its master from the cold and the rain by draping itself over the fallen man.

When discovered this morning by the Police Patrol, Escobanez was still out cold. The dog lay near, dead.

Relatives of Escobanez who is still a bachelor, told authorities that he always took nightly strolls at about 11 p.m. with his dog.

Minor facts

According to doctors, only the warmth from the dog’s body saved Escobanez from certain death.

Escobanez told police that he remembers nothing of the incident. A wallet containing PhP 500.00 was still in his pocket leading the authorities to rule out robbery.

How to write a lead?Lead

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It is a single word, a phrase, a clause, a brief sentence, an entire paragraph or a series of paragraphs. The main function of the lead, aside from introducing the news story, are to tell the story in capsule form and to answer right away the questions the reader would naturally ask.

A good lead answers all the important questions of the reader, indicates thefacts if they are all important, and arouses the readers’ interest to continue reading the story. In Filipino news, a good lead starts with a verb like “Nilamon ng…”

Conventional or summary lead

This kind of lead used in straight news, answers right away all or any of the 5 W’s (Who, What, When, Where, Why) and/or the H (How). It may be one of the following:

1. WHO lead

PRESIDENT Gloria Macapagal-Arroyo addressed, April 20, the PMA graduates in Baguio City.

2. WHAT lead

AN ENTRANCE examination will be given Nov. 24 to all graduating high school students desiring to enroll in the four-year college course.

3. WHERE lead

TRAPICHE, Oton, Iloilo will be the site of the next International Film Festival.

4. WHEN lead

TODAY, almost to the hour, the Revolutionary Government was proclaimed by former President Corazon Aquino.

5. WHY lead

BECAUSE of poverty, around a hundred students dropped from school last year. This was learned from Ateneo de Iloilo principal Aurora dela Cruz.

6. HOW lead

BY APPEALING to the school board, the University of Iloilo was able to construct a 30-storey, concrete building.

Do’s and Don’ts in writing a news story

1. Write the story immediately.

2. Play up the dominant points.

3. Be accurate and truthful.

4. Avoid opinions called editorializing.

5. Use adjectives sparingly.

6. Avoid libelous, seditious and rebellious matters, prejudice and bad taste.

7. Give source (attribution) of the news. Use quotes!

8. Write names in full when these are mentioned for the first time.

9. Identify the names mentioned.

10. Avoid redundancy.

11. Watch out for errors in fact, grammar, structure, and style.

12. Observe the guidelines for clear effective writing (unity, coherence, emphasis, brevity, clarity, etc.)

13. Adopt a paper stylesheet or stylebook for consistency and professionalism (in Ripples, we officially adopt the Daily Inquirer Stylebook)

Guidelines in writing a news story1. Give your lead sentence a “punch” to catch the interest of the readers.

2. Starts with the most important event or idea.

3. Use the rule or proximity and explain how the news affects the people in the locality or the students in school.

4. If your story has something unusual or novel to tell, bank on that for the lead. It’s hot copy.

5. Make your sentences concise and clear so that they could be easily understood. Long tedious sentences will likely “kill” the readers’ interest. Besides, they usually “lose” the readers along the way. News stories are not “luxury” or ”pleasure” reading. They have the basic function to inform.

6. Use simple words. Using highfalutin words does not prove anything but pedantry and literary pretentions. Even literary writers try as much as possible to use simple words.

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7. Never be afraid of breaking the rules if it will prove helpful in making a good copy.

The matrix below compares and contrasts news, feature and editorial articles.

SUGGESTIONS FOR HOME OR CLASS-ROOM STUDY

I. Concisely told story of a fire. From the Chicago Evening Post:

Lives of firemen were imperiled and a loss estimated at $35,000 was caused early to-day by

fire which swept through the three top floors of a five-story brick building at 2427-31 West

Fourteenth street. These upper floors were occupied by the Platt-Maschek Company,

novelties, of which C. C. Maschek is president.

The two lower floors are occupied by C. A. Hiles & Co., Inc., tool manufacturers. This concern

escaped with a slight loss.

COMPARISON NEWS EDITORIAL FEATURE

1. Definition Report an event Interpretation of an event/issue

An essay based on facts

2. Main Purpose To inform To interpret To entertain using present human interest stories

3. Timeliness Timely Timely Timely

4. Length Short Around 300 words (2000 computer characters)

Depends upon the needs

5. Use of words Simple precise, concrete Simple, forceful, direct May be descriptive, flowery, colorful

6. Use of sentences Short, simple, 15-25 words average

May be longer May be longer

7. Paragraph No topic sentence, one idea, one paragraph

With topic sentence, longer

With topic sentence, longer

8. Use of literary devices Journalistic, direct to the point, no idioms, figures of speech

Journalistic, direct to the point, may use idioms, figures of speech if properly handled

Literary, can be journalistic; idioms, figures of speech used freely

9. Use of adjectives/opinion

Uses adjectives sparingly; opinion, never

Adjectives used freely; primarily opinion

As much as desired

10. Parts Lead, (Bridge), Body Introduction (newspeg, reaction), body, conclusion (clincher)

Introduction, body, ending

11. Style Follows style-sheet newspaper style

Follows style-sheet, newspaper style

Composition style or newspaper style

12. Structure Inverted pyramid Hypothesis, arguments/stand on issue, conclusion

Suspended interest or pyramid structure

13. Title/Headline Short (subject-verb; telegraphic sentence form)

Shorter (at most three words

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Starting supposedly from crossed electric wires on the fifth floor, the fire broke through the

roof and had spread to the fourth and third floors when it was discovered by Policeman

Thomas Feeney, who was passing. Flames and smoke rolled out of the fifth floor windows.

Feeney pounded on the front doors of the building and attracted the attention of Edward

Claus, a watchman, who was on the first floor and unaware that the building was burning.

The two attempted to ascend a stairway to the third floor, believing that there was another

watchman in the novelty concern, but flames and smoke burst through a door and they were

compelled to retire. Glass in the door was broken by the heat and Feeney was cut about the

face and hands.

A general alarm was sounded and Marshal Horan arrived in his automobile. He sent in five

special calls and took charge of the many companies of firemen. The heat was intense and

firemen who had mounted the roofs of adjoining structures frequently were compelled to

climb down.

While firemen were still at work on the flames about twenty-five girls reported for work. It

was said they would be thrown out of work by the fire.

(Notice how the two leading facts in the story are combined in the opening sentence, the

fact that firemen were in peril coming first, then the property loss. The writer manifestly has

taken pains to get the firm names correct.)

II. Brief news dispatch telling of a death by fire:

NEW YORK, Dec. 12.- Mrs. F. A. Hilliard, 76 years old, a wealthy widow of Milwaukee, was

burned to death early today in her room in the Hotel Bristol. She set fire to her clothing in

attempting to light a candle. Mrs. Hilliard registered at the hotel Nov. 6. She attracted

attention by her eccentricities. She refused to use either electric light or gas, and insisted on

burning candles in her room.

(All the salient facts are told here in less than seventy-five words—the who, when, what,

where and why of the story. This is the compressed form in which the story was carried in

the news dispatches. As a local story — that is, published in the city in which it originated —

its human-interest element would justify the giving of more details — but nothing of a

horrible nature. News, unless it is national in interest, shrinks in importance in pro-portion to

the distance from the scene of the happening. This rule, of course, would not apply in this

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case to Milwaukee, where the story would be local in significance because of the residence

of the woman in that city.)

III. Fire story summarizing the main facts in a few lines, as carried in the report of a press

association :

JOPLIN, MO., Nov. 16.- Fire of unknown origin this morning destroyed the entire business

section of Duenweg, a mining town six miles east of here. Seventeen buildings were burned,

the damage being estimated at $75,000.

(It is significant, in studying relative news values, that this story, dealing with property loss,

gets only half as much space as-that telling of a woman's death. Both appeared in the same

newspaper.)

IV. Death story which covers all the important points. From the Baltimore Sun:

ATLANTA, Nov. 13.- United States Senator Alexander Stephens Clay, of Georgia, died of

heart disease at the Robertson Sanatorium today after an extended illness.

His death was as peaceful as it was sudden. He was talking to his son Herbert when he

suddenly ceased speaking and fell back dead.

During the morning and early afternoon the Senator appeared in better spirits than usual.

The attending physicians said that he was apparently recovering from the slight relapse of

Saturday.

Mrs. Clay came to Atlanta from Marietta in the morning, but when she found the Senator so

much improved she returned home. The only member of the family present at the deathbed

was the Senator's son Herbert, who is mayor of Marietta.

According to the physicians Senator Clay's death resulted from dilatation of the heart,

superinduced by arterial sclerosis. The Senator had been ill for nearly a year and went to the

sanatorium on November I to take the rest cure. He appeared to be improving until

Saturday, when he suffered a relapse which his weakened condition was unable to

withstand.

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The body was removed to the Clay home at Marietta, where the funeral services will be held

Tuesday. Senator Clay was 57 years old, and is survived by a widow, five sons and a

daughter, besides his parents, Mr. and Mrs. W. J. Clay, of Cobb county.

(An account of Senator Clay's political life, in 350 words, follows.)

V. Death story in which the cause is of special interest:

CHICAGO, Dec. 5.- Prof. Charles Otis Whitman, head of the Department of Zoology and

director of the Zoological Museum at the University of Chicago, died of pneumonia today. His

death was due to exposure a week ago, when, late at night, he left his room to look after a

flock of pigeons which he had been studying. Friends say that Prof. Whitman feared the

pigeons would be frozen.

Prof. Whitman, who was 68 years old, was widely known as a zoologist. He was born at

Woodstock, Me., and was educated at Bowdoin College, Leipzig University, in Germany, and

Johns Hopkins University.

Surviving Prof. Whitman are his widow and two sons, Frank and Carroll. Arrangements for

the funeral have not been completed.

VI. Graphically told story of the death of a famous " man-bird " :

LOS ANGELES, CAL., Dec. 31.- The winds, whose treacheries Arch Hoxsey so often defied

and conquered, killed the noted aviator today. As if jealous of his intrepidity, they seized him

and his fragile flying machine, flung them down out of the sky and crushed out his life.

He fell dead in the field from which he had risen but a short time before with a laughing

promise to thousands of cheering spectators to pierce the zenith of the heavens, surpass his

own phenomenal altitude record and soar higher than any other man dared go.

Cross currents, whirled off from a vagrant storm that floated in from the sea, caught his

biplane and shot him downward 563 feet to earth.

His body lay broken and twisted almost out of all semblance to a human form. All of the

spectators in the grand stand witnessed the tragedy, as it occurred directly in front of them

on the opposite side of the course.

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They sat in awe-stricken silence until the announcer gave out the words through the

megaphone :

"Hoxsey has been killed."

Then from every part of the great stand came sobbing of women, who but a short time

before had clapped their hands to the daring aviator as he arose from the field for his fatal

flight.

" Of course the success of this attempt is contingent upon the kind of weather I find up

there," said Hoxsey just before he left the ground. " Some of the temperatures one

encounters in the higher altitudes are simply beyond human endurance. But, if I can stand it

and my motor works as well as it has been working, I'll come down with a record of 12,000

feet or more."

Even at that moment the wind attained a velocity that kept more cautious aviators on the

ground. After he had ascended it gained rapidly in violence. Moreover, it created a "Swiss

cheese " atmosphere, the most treacherous meteorological condition that man-birds have to

con-tend with.

There is nothing by which it may be known why Hoxsey did not go higher than 7,742 feet,

which his barograph showed he had attained, but he had apparently encountered at that

altitude the same conflicting air currents that finally overcame him. Notwithstanding this,

and with the same reckless daring he had displayed during the last week, he descended by

a series of spiral glides, and was performing one of his thrilling rolling dips, when his biplane

suddenly capsized and shot to earth.

Over and over the aeroplane turned as it fell, with a speed so swift that of all the thousands

who saw the tragedy not one could tell what effort the aviator made to save himself. When

the wreckage had been cleared sufficiently so that his body could be reached, he was found

planted firmly in his seat, his arms around the levers. The fall telescoped the biplane.

The steel sprocket which drove the propellers lay across Hoxsey's face, the motor resting

upon the right side of his body. Every one of the ribs on that side was shattered into

fragments. An iron upright, broken by the force of the crash, held the aviator's body impaled

upon its jagged point.

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The stop watches of the judges in the stand registered the exact second of 2:12 o'clock

when Hoxsey's machine turned over and plunged in its fatal fall. The news of the tragedy

was telegraphed over wires leading out of the press stand before the machine struck the

ground.

(Enough of the published story, which filled more than three columns, is given here to

indicate the detailed method of treatment. The death of Arch Hoxsey in itself was a big news

story, of nation-wide interest. Its importance as news was enhanced by the fact that another

noted aviator, only a few hours before, had met death in a similar tragic manner on another

aviation field.)

VII. Story of a suicide printed because of the unusual means employed. (Names and

addresses given here are fictitious.) From the New York World:

James Wilson, aged seventy, a photographer, committed suicide by drowning himself

yesterday afternoon in a tank in his studio at No. 17 Blank street.

Wilson lived at No. 616 R street and was in the photograph business with his son. The studio

is on the third floor and consists of three rooms.

Water leaking through his ceiling about 5 o'clock yesterday afternoon attracted the attention

of Henry Smith, who has a printing shop on the floor underneath the studio. He sent a

workman to investigate and when the man re-turned and said that Wilson's door was locked

Smith notified the police.

Patrolmen Stephens and Jones of the Blank Street Station broke open the Wilson studio door

and in the rear room found water running over the sides of a tank used in developing

pictures. This tank is zinc lined, is 2% feet wide, 2 feet deep and 4 feet long, and stands 5

feet up from the floor, the upper edge being only 2 feet from the ceiling. Inside this tank was

Wilson's body.

Wilson was 5 feet 2 inches tall and weighed 200 pounds. To reach the top of the tank he

evidently stood on a sink beside it, but how he managed to crawl inside has puzzled the

police. First, thinking that Wilson might have been trying to repair the tank, the police made

a search for repairing tools, but found nothing of the kind. Wilson was dressed in his

underclothing, and his outer garments were found hanging on hooks.

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The tank had to be chopped down before the body could be removed and taken to the

Morgue.

Mrs. Wilson said last night that her husband had acted queerly yesterday and seemed to be

brooding because a man whom he had had in his employ for a number of years was to leave

him at the end of the week. She said one of their sons committed suicide about seven years

ago.

(Observe that the writer gives concrete details. Instead of saying, 'vaguely, that Wilson, a

large man, drowned himself in a small tank, he gives Wilson's height and weight and the

exact dimensions of the tank.)

VIII. The following leads show how stories have been brought up to date :

1. ST. LOUIS, Dec. 9.— Colonel Abe Slupsky wears modestly today the metaphorical wreath

of hops that goes with the championship in beer drinking.

When he drank a bottle of beer in the café at Hotel Jefferson last night it marked the

completion of a task begun thirty days ago. Every day since then, Sundays included,

nineteen bottles of beer preceded the good-night one. Etc.

2. Search in a snowstorm failed today to find the three robbers who held up three men and

stole nearly $20,000 in cash and checks on the Egremont trolley extension yesterday. The

amount taken was given out as $10,000, but the Woronoco Construction Company stated

today that yesterday's full pay roll was $20,000, and only a few men had been paid off when

the hold-up occurred. Of this amount nearly half was in checks. Etc.

3. BELFAST, Dec. 10.— Political excitement is at fever heat today, following last night's riots

that resulted from several Orangemen voting for the Irish Nationalist candidates. Those so

voting are being called traitors and their houses are under guard today to prevent violence

being done them. Etc.

4. Several hundred college boys from the University of Blank crawled from the sheets this

morning with dry throats, big heads and a universal tendency toward " never again." For last

night was " football night " and the college boys " did things up brown." Etc.

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5. John K. Smith, millionaire broker, following his fourth arrest in a month because of his

strange antics with automobiles, is in the observation ward of the City Hospital pending an

expert investigation as to his mental condition. Smith was arrested yesterday, etc.

6. PROVIDENCE, KY., Nov. 26.- It is believed today that the ten men entombed in Mine No. 3

of the Providence Coal Company by an explosion are dead. . . . A windy shot in the mine

yesterday caused a terrific ex-plosion, etc.

IX. Write a local fire story from the following notes, assuming it is to be printed in an evening

pa-per in a town of about 20,000:

Home of A. B. Smith, 600 Converse avenue. Fire discovered at 1 A. M. by neighbors

returning from theater. One of them broke in front door with a stick of cord wood and

aroused the family, who were asleep on the second floor. Fire had started in the attic from

crossed electric wires, and had burned down into the closet in the room occupied by Mr. and

Mrs. Smith. Opening the closet to get some clothing, Smith was driven back by flames. His

wife fainted and he carried her out. His hands and face were slightly burned. Two children,

girls, 8 and 5, were carried out by neighbors. The house, two-story frame, burned rapidly.

Only a part of the furniture on first floor was saved. Loss about $10,000, covered by

insurance. Whole building was ablaze when the firemen arrived. Smith is cashier of the

Second National Bank. Man who broke in door, A. L. Jones, a grocer, 604 Converse avenue.

X. Assuming that the death of Senator Clay (see No. IV) was first published in the morning

papers, rewrite the story in I50 words for an evening pa-per.

XI. Condense the story of Wilson's suicide (see No. VII) into a telegraph dispatch of 150

words. 

Copy Reading 2hernan - Presentation Transcript

1. Mr. Hernane B. Buella

2. Copyreading

o is much is like the work of a communication arts teacher correcting compositions,

except that he uses different symbols.

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o symbols are universally known to printers.

o the symbols used in copyreading are the same symbols used in pagwawasto ng sipi

to eliminate or correct errors to improve the copy.

o a copy may be a news item, editorial, a feature story or any literary article.

3.o Errors could be of any kind – errors in fact, in grammar in structure or in style.

o Like a teacher of English you correct errors in spelling, punctuation, capitalization

abbreviation, the use of the different parts of speech, in subject-verb agreement, tenses, mood,

number, case and the like.

o In copy editing a news report, you should see to it that the proper lead is used and

that this lead contains the most important element.

o See to it that the paragraphs are arranged according to decreasing importance

following the inverted pyramid structure.

o In editing an editorial see to it that it begins with an introduction composed of a

newspeg and reaction. This is followed by the body (the arguments and stand of the editor on the

issue), then by the conclusion. In short, correct errors in structure.

4.o There is also a thing called newspaper or editorial style.

o Every paper should have a stylesheet or stylebook as a guideline for the sake of

consistency .

o A stylesheet is a set of rules mainly in punctuation, abbreviation, syllabication, uses

figures, capitalization and spelling. You may use the Manila Times Style Book by Jose Luna Castro.

Most metropolitan dailies use it. You may find one in Campus Journalism by Ceciliano-Jose Cruz,

pp.213-220

5.o There is no question of right or wrong, just a matter of style. After you have adopted

one, be consistent.

o Also, eliminate opinion in news stories; this is called editorializing. Delete libelous

words and expressions, vulgar and indecent words. Cross out redundant words and verbal

deadwood. Use adjectives sparingly. News is supposed to be objective and factual. Delete also

seditious and rebellious matter and those violative of our laws.

6. COPYREADING Defined for corrections for improvement For style sheet accordance EDITING

article News Features Sports Editorials Cutlines

7. Mga Pananda sa Pagwawasto ng sipi pangulo ng pilipinas - limbagin sa malaking titik Pag-asa

ng Bayan - limbagin sa maliit na titik Manila Times - limbagin na maitim(boldface) Dahil sa Isang

Bulaklak - limbagin ng palihis(italics)

8. Dahil sa iyo, ang sabi niya - lagyan ng panipi Paco Manila - lagyan ng kuwit 2000-01 - lagyan

ng kudlit barangay - singitan ng titik inang baayn - pagpalitin ang lugar ng titik

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9. Jose Lina Jr., Gobernador - pagpalitin ang lugar ng salita pinunong ng bayan - alisin at

pagkabitin Pang. Gloria M. Arroyo - isulat nang buo 8 katao - isulat nang pasalita labing dalawang

katao - isulat sa numero o tambilang Doktor Warren Cruz - daglatin

10. Simula bukas - wastong pasok ng talataan kahapon. Simula bukas - panibagong talataan

natapos ang panayam Subalit wala pang tiyak - pagdugtungin o pasunurin Ngunit di pa yari - walang

bagong talataan pin untahan - pagkabitin

11. Malaking Panayam - igitna ang subhead Panggulo ng Pilipinas - alisin at paglapitin Maynilas -

kaltasin/pungusin Wilfredo Krus - hayaang manatili ang pagkabaybay Mabait na bata - panatilihin,

huwag baguhin more pa - may karugtong 30 # - wakes ng artikulo

12. Headline Writing

o News stories, are important, but the headlines that introduce these stories to the

readers are also important. Good headlines will make a newspaper page attractive; poor

headlines will make a page seem dull. Poor headlines might discourage them from reading the

stories.

o A headline is the title of a news story. It summarizes the whole news story.

Oftentimes, it is the gist of the lead.

o What kind of headline style does your newspaper use? In the traditional newspaper

headline, every word is capitalized except for short prepositions like at, by, for, from, in, on, to,

etc. and the . They are capitalized only when they appear at the beginning of a line.

13.o A newer style of headline writing; however, capitalizes only the first word and proper

nouns that would be capitalized in a normal sentence. The two styles of headlines are shown

below:

o Traditional Style Newer Style

o Clc (cap & lower case) Ds (Down Style)

o Food Production Food production

o Drive Intensified drive intensified

14.o If a newspaper wishes to call special attention to a news story, it will capitalize every

letter in every word.

o (All Caps)

o DOPE UPSURGE IN SCHOOL

o COMMUNITY NOTED

o Ordinarily, most newspapers call attention to their most important news stories by

giving them multiple-column headlines. A multiple-column headline is one which extends over

two, three, four or more column width. Such wide headlines; however, are set in much larger type

than single column headlines.

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15.o Example:

o Nation celebrates Centennial Year,

o Chief Executive delivers message

o The examples of headlines we have seen so far have been written in two lines. This

is called a running head . But sometimes newspapers print three-line headline:

o 3 rd seminar

o on family

o planning held

16.o In longer stories, a newspaper may even add a second headline called a deck , also

called bank or readout .

o Torch 2 nd in nat ’ l. press tilts

o Chief editor

o bags seven

o NSPC medals

17. Unit Counting in Headlines

o Writing headlines is not so simple as it seems to be. A headline should fit the

allotted space by a system of unit counts given to each letter, figure or space. This is done to

avoid a thin head , a fat head or a bleeding head .

18.o An example of a thin head where the spaces between the letters of words, or the

space after the words in a line are so wide that the effect is ugly.

o S c h o o l j o i n s p r e s s t i l t s

o An example of a fat head where the letters or the words are so crowded that there

are no spaces between them or the spaces are so small that several words read as one.

o Schooljoinspresstilts

19.o An example of bleeding headline in which some letter or words extend inside the

column

o S c h o o l j o i n s

o p r e s s t i l t s

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o However, in computerized headline writing, there is no need to count units. The

computer does the fitting of the words in the allotted space. In many provinces, printing is still

done through the obsolete letter press.

20.o The corresponding unit counts are given as follows:

½ unit – jilt and all punctuations except the em dash (-) and the questions

mark (?)

1 unit – the questions mark, space, all figures, capital, JILTF, all lower case

letters except jiltf

1 ½ units – the em dash, lower case m and w, all capital letters except M

and W and JILTF

2 units – capital M, W