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Benig,Renwald Anime and Manga Anime and Mangas are everywhere these days. They're the hottest things with pages sweeping through the school and the nation and yet what are they, a few of us may wonder? What is Anime and Manga exactly? In this essay, you will be enlightened with some aspects of anime and manga: their similiraties by their origin, their accessibility, their audience, their purpose and their differences by their details, their fillers, their censorship, and their characteristics. As you probably know there is a manga and an anime. The anime is based on the manga. Although the anime stays very true to manga, there are some small differences between them. First is their details; in manga, only the important informations are highlighted, whereas in anime, they add extra scenes before directing to the main point of the story. Second is the fillers, the story is a lot more ahead in the manga compared to the anime’s. And if the manga is still running, no one knows how long the series will continue. Third is the censorship, for example in Naruto, Neji’s mark on his forehead looks a little different from the one shown in manga. In the manga, the mark looks more like a swastika. Most likely it was changed to make the series in anime more accessible, you never know how the younger viewers’ parents will react. Fourth is their characteristics, manga is a series but in form of a comics. However the anime is based on manga series but it is animated, and can be watched through your tv screens or computer screens. Even though they have contrast to each other, there are also similarities between the two. One thing is their origin, they are both produced by Japan, that’s why Japan was named as Home of Anime and Manga. For their accessibility, many sites were scattered on the internet so you can easily watch the series without having any difficulties. And the most important similarity is the flow of story in manga doesn’t contradict what’s the flow of story in the anime. They can sustain the role and the significance of each character in the series.

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Benig,RenwaldAnime and Manga

Anime and Mangas are everywhere these days. They're the hottest things with pages sweeping through the school and the nation and yet what are they, a few of us may wonder? What is Anime and Manga exactly? In this essay, you will be enlightened with some aspects of anime and manga: their similiraties by their origin, their accessibility, their audience, their purpose and their differences by their details, their fillers, their censorship, and their characteristics. As you probably know there is a manga and an anime. The anime is based on the manga. Although the anime stays very true to manga, there are some small differences between them. First is their details; in manga, only the important informations are highlighted, whereas in anime, they add extra scenes before directing to the main point of the story. Second is the fillers, the story is a lot more ahead in the manga compared to the anime’s. And if the manga is still running, no one knows how long the series will continue. Third is the censorship, for example in Naruto, Neji’s mark on his forehead looks a little different from the one shown in manga. In the manga, the mark looks more like a swastika. Most likely it was changed to make the series in anime more accessible, you never know how the younger viewers’ parents will react. Fourth is their characteristics, manga is a series but in form of a comics. However the anime is based on manga series but it is animated, and can be watched through your tv screens or computer screens. Even though they have contrast to each other, there are also similarities between the two. One thing is their origin, they are both produced by Japan, that’s why Japan was named as Home of Anime and Manga. For their accessibility, many sites were scattered on the internet so you can easily watch the series without having any difficulties. And the most important similarity is the flow of story in manga doesn’t contradict what’s the flow of story in the anime. They can sustain the role and the significance of each character in the series. Anime and Manga may have their comparison and contrast but their purpose and goal is to entertain and to satisfy the audience and fanatics by their creative works.

When it is his interest, one can really write a lot of things. The thesis is clearly stated, Renwald and I commend you for that. On the other hand, I would appreciate more if you used your own words. It is alright to have read something so you can write something, but you should remember that it is plagiarism if you copy your source word for word. Furthermore, elaborating or adding more details would better serve your essay. I would like you to improve more on your concluding paragraph. It should restate the thesis, summarize all the ideas presented in the essay and your final words about the topic. I know you can improve on this essay Renwald!

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Bautista, Katrina Mae A. My inner goddess says I’m a hopeless romantic one. I just love watching romantic comedy & chick flick movies! I have discovered that side of me since my eyes laid upon this movie ‘A Walk to Remember.’ I love how both pain and joy were mixed up to spice up the love story and those were the things I felt while watching. Since my love for the movie has grown, I also bought the book where the movie was adapted from. It was a novel by Nicholas Sparks. Reading the book made me laugh and cry at the same time. After reading the book, I came to realize that there were some beautiful scenes in the book which were not included in the movie adaptation and other way around. The movie adaptation and book have so many differences but I say that both are equally beautiful. The main characters of the story were still the same however some of the personas of both the main characters were changed. Jamie Sullivan, a god-fearing selfless daughter to a reverent, plays the lead role. Both in the movie and in the book, she looks like an out fashioned High schooler which makes everyone secretly laugh at her. Though people look at her that way, she still stays sweet and undaunted. There were some things about her in the book that was different from the movie. In the book, Jamie doesn’t know how to sing well unlike in the movie, she sang beautifully during the play. Jamie wears a bun in the book but in the movie, she wears ponytails. Landon Carter, the rebellious ever-popular student in school, plays the other lead role in the story. He is an outgoing stunningly handsome student in their high school. There were some things about him too that was changed. In the book, he is a son of politician, the rival of Jamie’s father, but in the movie, he is a son of a cardiologist. He was the student body president in the movie but was not in the book instead, he was just a popular guy in school. Some of the parts of the book were not seen in the movie. I liked the promenade part in the book but it was not shown in the movie. (you could describe briefly the promenade.) I know that the movie would be little better if they showed that. Both the stories of the play were different. The story of the play in the book was about Christmas while in the movie, it was all about the mysterious club singer. There is also a part of the book that is worth-seeing but is not shown and that is the part where Landon walks Jamie home after classes. In the movie, he has never walked home Jamie instead he rode her home. They never dated in the book but it was shown in the movie. Landon even asked Jamie’s father to take her out for a date. Both the movie and book have same story ending and that was Jamie ended up dying because of Leukemia. She suffered so hard in battling her sickness, but still, she remained optimistic and selfless which made me shed tears. Despite her sickness, Landon still loved him unconditionally and faithfully. There are still so many more things that I have not included here which I find very interesting to share with you. Telling you all those would take me forever. However, all the things I have mentioned above were all just some of the differences of the movie and the book. They may have so many differences but both the stories have comprised to be equally beautiful.This is already a good one Katrina! I commend you essay for having all the parts and each paragraph stated the main idea in the topic sentence. Very Good!! However, I do not want you to hold back with the ideas that you would like to share. Keep on writing!

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We all know that Christianity and Islam are both major religions across the globe, but there has always been some conflict between the two. But if you compare them there are actually some similarities between the two.This two religions go way back. Christianity was founded by Jesus Christ, where else Islam was founded by Muhammad. Christianity originate at Jerusalem, while Islam at Mecca, Saudi Arabia. Both of these religions believes in one creator. Both has their own scriptures, The bible and the Koran. Even will all these similarities these two religions has fought against each other. They waged war, there were crusades and many more. But that is all in the past, we should look into the future. Today the world we live in is very peaceful, we should always thank God for it. No matter what religion you are, as long you believe in God, you are a believer.We are all created for a reason , no matter what race we are or where ever we come from, we are all bounded by religion

-Benjamin Laurete

It is an interesting topic Benjamin; on the other hand, it may not be enough to be a good essay. You could develop more the attention getter that it would entice the audience to read your work. The body of the essay also could be developed by providing more details that will support your thesis. Finally, the concluding paragraph should restate your thesis, summarize all the ideas that you have presented and expresses your final thoughts about the topic. I know you can do it Benjamin. Do not get tired of trying.

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Bathan, Rose Marie M.

Physical Beauty vs. Inner Beauty

When we look in the dictionary and define what is beauty. It simply says that it is a combination of qualities that pleases the intellect or moral sense. Indeed, there are many definitions for “beauty” but it changes basically because we based everything on what we perceive. There are two kinds of beauty, physical or the outer and inner beauty.

What is the first thing that catches your eye, from the opposite sex? The first thing we see or notice about someone is their appearance or what we called physical beauty.

Physical beauty is defined as someone’s elegance, figure, features, and complexion. If most people were to define true beauty it would naturally be that of the outward appearance. Perfect toned body. No flab. Good tan. Great clothing. Professional makeup. Silky, long hair and gorgeous color.

The physical beauty may be attracted at a certain time in one’s life but in later years in life it will change. When that time comes, that person will lose confident(confidence), and self-esteem. The stress in life can affect the physical appearance too. The age of physical beauty changes, unlike inside beauty, it is a choice to change.

On the other hand, the inner beauty would be yourself that is being you. It is something that is experienced through a person’s character rather than by appearances. It’s the real beauty of a person that goes far beyond just physical appearances.

However, to most people, inner beauty is a joke. People say that inner beauty is something ugly people say to themselves to feel better. That makes perfect sense too. If you can’t see it, who can really tell whether it even exists in the first place.

It is inner beauty that helps you appreciate outer beauty. If you love, appreciate and feel good about yourself, you would feel more confident about facing and interacting with other beautiful people in the world.

But of course, at the end of the day, call it what you want, inner beauty or outer, there’s just one kind. And it’s the kind of beauty you see when you look into the mirror. “Remember, outer beauty can give you a glance, it’s inner beauty that makes someone stay.”

That is an interesting topic Rosemarie. Many people are indeed blinded of the physical beauty. You could improve your essay by clearly stating your thesis, so the intended reader can anticipate the information that he will read or can understand the meat of your composition. I noticed that you used the block format of comparison and contrast essay. You could elaborate more on the body of the essay by providing more details. Also, in the conclusion restate the thesis, summarize all the information that you presented and state your final words about the topic. I believe you can do it Rose Marie!

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The story of Percy Jackson and the Olympians: The Lightning Thief is about a kid named Percy the main character accused to be the one who stolen the lightning bolt. The Lightning Both was the weapon of Zeus, one of the Olympians the God of sky and ruler of Olympus. Percy is a half-blood; half-human, and half-god. His father was the God of the seas; Poseidon, and his mother was Sally Jackson; a human. The story is originally from a book, and now it has a movie itself. Both have the same story, but what are the differences?

First thing is how they deliver the story, and some of the details along the way to the end. For the book, Percy does not find out which God is his father until he is at Camp Half-Blood, while in the movie, Percy already knows and that was Poseidon the God of the sea. After being at the Camp, in the book, the quest was given to Percy by a mummy looking named Oracle to retrieve the lightning bolt that they believes that it was stolen by Hades; God of the Under word, while in the movie, Percy just decided to go and to the underworld because of Hades have his mother, and Hades thought that Percy have the lightning bold. Along the way, When Percy and company are there in the Underworld, in the book, while Percy talking with Hades the lightning bolt was magically appeared in Percy’s backpack, but in the book, the lightning bolt was appeared in Percy’s shield that given by Luke other friend of Percy. The last thing is, in the book, there a show of Ares the God of War, while in the movie, there is no appearance of Ares.

Second thing is for the person who watches and reads. For the book, person’s imagination works a lot because of the book that has no visual aids. The person may imagine differently with his desired vision of what his reading, while is the movie, imagination not much work, it is just how the cast deliver the character of what they are acting for.

Both books and movie are outstanding kind or art. Comparing these arts is not easy.

Although there are a lot of differences, they are both still entertaining, the way of the book use the imagination of the readers, while the movie, the visual effects and the cast acting of their own characters.

Kurt Escano w02

Percy Jackson is indeed one of the creative piece of literature since it used greek mythology as its backbone. I commend your essay for it has the basic parts, but I think there are still some things that you should improve on to make the essay better. First is to clearly state you thesis. One can actually infer your thesis, but it would be better if it were clearly stated so the reader can understand and anticipate immediately your idea about the topic. Furthermore, I would like you to develop more the body of your essay. How about the similarities? On a positive note, this is a good start already and I have seen that you improved. Let’s get it on!

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The Dictator and the Housewife

A person who has intelligence, integrity, charisma, diplomatic skills, and strong work ethic; these are just some of the qualities a good president should have. Representing and running a country is never an easy job. A president possesses great power, which comes with great responsibility. For a country like the Philippines, a president who could lift up the country out of its quagmire state is badly needed. Out of the country's astounding Presidents, none were ever as influential and powerful as the late former Presidents Ferdinand Marcos and Corazon Aquino. They ruled during a time of deep political strife, made undeniably accomplishment and have set a remarkable legacy in their own ways. One of the questions you may ask is, who was better, the dictator or the housewife?

President Ferdinand Marcos served the Philippines for 20 years, making him the longest reigning president so far. The greatest accomplishments and legacies of Marcos Administration are the infrastructure and economic development. He constructed infrastructures more than any president combined. Examples of these are: Cultural Center of the Philippines, Folk Arts Theatre, Philippine International Convention Center and Nayong Pilipino. These projects provided venue for the Filipinos to highlight cultural heritage,propagate arts and culture, and generate tourism. Also, during his time, public health was a great concern, that is why he also built specialty hospitals like the Philippine Heart Center, Lung Center, Kidney Institute, and Philippine Children Hospital. More road networks and bridges were constructed during his time, like the first modern Toll-way, the Manila North Diversion Road, North Luzon Expressway (NLEX), and the San Juanico Bridge. The Philippines is at its golden era as it became self-sufficient in rice, the exchange rate of dollar is 2 Peso = 1 Dollar, and energy plants were build that provided cheaper electric bills for Filipinos. Perhaps Marcos will forever be synonymous with the words “Martial Law”, dictator, corrupt, human rights violator, and a number of good or bad adjectives; but the impacts of his interventions will remained and are undeniably germane part of the country for a lifetime.

The Philippines was praised worldwide in 1986, when the so-called bloodless evolution erupted, called EDSA People Power’s Revolution. Ninoy Aquino’s wife, Cory Aquino, led the revolution and became the first female president of the Philippines. She was known as the surprisingly tough “housewife” who forced a dictator, Ferdinand Marcos, to leave office after his attempt to steal an election. Filipinos were relieved from all the pains, the toils, suppression and oppression, as she managed her country's eventful transition from dictatorship to democracy. In order to achieve a full constitutional government immediately, she appointed 48 members of the 1986 Constitution Commission to write a new Constitution of the Philippines. The 1987 Constitution projects strong emphasis and concern for civil liberties and human rights,

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peace talks with communist insurgents and Muslim secessionists. Aside from that, Cory also focused on bringing back economic health and confidence. Cory was indeed an amazing woman who had a huge impact on independence and welfare of Juan dela Cruz. No wonder why she was loved by many people and a symbol of Filipino’s hopes.

Ferdinand Marcos and Cory Aquino made unquestionably triumphs and have set a remarkable legacy in their own ways. The dictators’ legacy was infrastructure and economic developments, while the housewife’s greatest legacy was democracy. Cory Aquino was the complete oppositeof Ferdinand Marcos. He was the consummate political icon- charming and cunning; she was an anti-politician. Despite of all the differences and bad historical connections, we should thank and salute them for serving the country. After all it’s not a competition on who was better; it is the contribution that counts.

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Well written Veronica!! You always meet the expectations and exceed it. Keep it up! I would just like to clearly state your thesis. Also, be conscious of the minor grammatical slips. Other than that, it would have been a very good essay. Write on!

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FEU-East Asia College's Specialized I.T CourseKirsten Einna S. Lister, w02

Are you planning to take a course of Information Technology? Searching for the right place and right university wherein you could receive a good quality of education? As you go on through the list on the internet, we are one of the most noted in this said field, and we are the FEU-East Asia College! Commision on Higher Education had granted us as the Center of Development in Information Technology. Unlike in other universities and colleges, our I.T course has three specializiations namely BS IT with Specialization in Animation and Game Development (BSIT-AGD), BS IT with Specialization in Web and Mobile Application (BSIT-WMA) and BS IT with Specialization in Digital Arts (BSIT-DA). To help you decide in choosing, we will take you to the world of Information Technology in FEU-East Asia College wherein you could be informed with the similiraties and differences of each distinctive features.

Written in our curriculum, BSIT-AGD, BSIT-WMA and BSIT-DA all aims to provide students with a methodological approach in advanced understanding on the deployment, acquirement and management of information resources and applications. But they differ in the field that you'll be majoring or focusing. For your interests in animation, computer games and its implications, we offer you BSIT-AGD. If you are an artistic person, and prefers to combine visual or performing arts with technology, we have BSIT-DA. And if your concern is about designing and implementing an application or program then BSIT-WMA would best suit you!

All our specializations will acquire the students the skills in developing their abilities in their fortes. In BSIT-AGD, you'll be focusing on the understanding of abilities of game in dynamic systems, designing, building and creating game environment, applying game design essentials, and computer graphics of 3D and 2D modeling in developing the game. While in BSIT-DA, you'll develop skills on maintaining competency-edge web media, refining skills in design and accomplishng core tasks on different types and multimedia workflow. On the other hand, BSIT-WMA maintains a competitive edge in the industry through designing and developing web, implementing solutions and deploying them in a mobile web platform, works with database management systems software, determines ways to effectively implement data and file organization, storage and retrieval and design, implements and maintains network infrastructure of an organization. All in all, these specializations has their own field of concentrations.

Although we have different fortes in Information Technology in FEU-East Asia College, there's also some similaraties on the lessons you'll be taking up like in AGD and DA, they're parallel in having the knowledge to create visually rich content for virtual, web, and interactive medias and gaining the skills in graphics and 2D, 3D animation. Also, for the three specializations, before advancing to your chosen field, you would first be familiarized to the basic things related to your course, so you'll be open in implementing solutions in object-oriented programming languages and database systems.

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Lastly, to compare the population of students in FEU-East Asia College's Specialized I.T Course, Digital Arts has the most number of enrolled person actively learning followed by Web and Mobile Application and Animation and Game Development. How about you? After reading this, which among the three specializations do you most prefer; to become an animator or a game developer, to become a Digital Artist/Designer or to become a Web and Mobile Application Programmer/Specialist? Think twice to make your choice right. Remember, your future depends on this.

Well written Kirsten! You have always met the expectations in our essays. You may have the talent in writing. Keep harnessing it. There is one thing that I think will make your essay more interesting and more understandable and that is to consider your audience. You target audience are mainly the fourth year high school students planning to take up BS IT. The essay would be better if you can use more familiar term and give more examples that almost all high school students know. In this way, the target audience and interact immediately if the environment is not threatened. I commend your work Kirsten! Write on!! Vm

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Which one is good (better) DA or WMA?

I choose the Digital arts and the web and mobile application in the field of information technology. So you can know what course is much better or not in the field of information technology.

In web and mobile application in our major subject we learn many things, like in codings its hard to understand but we learned to self study in ourself. Because our first prof in programming in third term is quite do not know what is c++ and she always saying “do you understand” in many times. We also use photoshop in web and mobile application. In digital arts they are using c++ also but it is several not like us. There prof is really amazing because even though they are not web and mobile , they know some topics in web applications. The digital arts students are always using photoshop , which everday they will use it. The web and mobile application is not all about creating codes but we also use photoshop. We design and create websites that we usually use in our facebook, twitter, tumbler and other social networking sites. We also create applications using codes. We do not have drawing class not like the digital arts students. Digital arts they always creating vector in photoshop. They do not know how to create websites in photoshop. I like there drawing class because I like to draw. Photography is also my favourite in their subject.-Alegre w02

I see your effort there Marie Frans. Generally speaking, your professor needs to be informed if there are some points that you do not understand in the discussion. I admire your intention of enlightening your target audience about the different specializations in the field of Information Technology. With regard to your essay, the introduction may need a stronger attention getter to capture the interest of the target audience. Also, the thesis should be clearly stated in the introduction. If you have these written effectively, then you can be sure that people will read your essay. On a lighter note, I commend the information you presented in the body of your essay. However, there may be some ideas that were not clear. Check them out. It would be better also if you can elaborate more on the body of the essay by adding more details. As for the concluding paragraph, this may be lacking in your essay. You may restate the thesis, summarize all the ideas presented in the essay and your final words about the topic. Finally, customize your essay according to your target audience. The forth year high school students would read more your essay if you can cater to their background information. I know you can improve on this essay Marie. Just keep on trying, and do not get tired of trying; if you do, you may start losing.

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Infatuation versus Love "No one can understand love who has not experienced infatuation. And no one can understand infatuation, no matter how many times he has experienced it", a quote from Mignon McLaughlin that had really captivates my attention. Infatuation and love, two words that anyone can relate to and are something that would spice up our lives. Though we are familiar with these words, it is really difficult to tell the difference between falling in love with someone, and being just infatuated with them. This two feelings most often are confusing for us. There is vast difference between infatuation and love that we should know. Let’s define infatuation and love first. When we say infatuation, it is a foolish and extravagant passion or admiration. Love on the other hand, is a tender, passionate affection for another person. It takes root and grows, one day at a time. These definitions of the love and infatuation show a stark contrast in meaning, discerning the difference in a real life scenario is truly no easy task. Infatuation tends to be based on an illusion. Infatuation causes us to have unrealistic beliefs regarding relationships. You would believe that your life would be perfect if only he/ she were in love with you. You believed your life would not be complete without him/her. Infatuation causes us to think this way. These illusions are what make infatuation temporary. We eventually see that he/she isn’t everything we imagined. Or we simply “burn out” emotionally—we don’t have the energy to sustain our foolish passions indefinitely. This passion was based more on the illusion of who he/she was instead of who he/she really was. We often get infatuated with people we barely know. We are simply drawn to another’s physical beauty or perceived qualities. On the other hand, love is based on truth and reality. We love someone based on a genuine understanding of who he/she really is. We see the good and the bad, and we love anyway. Our affection grows as the friendship grows. We have the quiet understanding and mature acceptance of one’s imperfection. Physical appearance is not so important in love, as long as your feelings for each other are true and sincere. Nevertheless, infatuation is selfish. You are afraid of the risk of losing someone. You always want something in return. It’s like you would want a “love” to work in your favor, in your own benefit. A person infatuating wants the same feeling in return. For them, their happiness will be complete if the person they like will also like them Love is an upper. It makes you feel whole. It completes the circle. It gives you strength and grows beyond you - to bolster your beloved. You are warmed by their presence, even when they are away. Miles do not separate you. It fills the empty space in your heart. Love is elevating. It lifts you up. It makes you look up. It makes you think up. It makes you a better person than you were before. If you have love in your life, it can make up for a great many things you don't have. If there is no love in your life, whatever else there is has a lot less meaning. Infatuation is a feeling or a state of being totally carried away by unreasoning desire. Fascination, crush, desire or obsession of another person is infatuations. It has an element of sexual excitement. Whenever you are together, you hope it will end in intimacy.

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True love cannot be explained by scientific means. True love is the result of God’s grace on us. It’s devotional and committed, the same way God loves us for who we are, the same way He loves us for our imperfections. It’s a sacred bond that withstands the test of time, which conquers every obstacle. It’s like gravity. You can’t explain that it’s really there, it just is. There is really an enormous difference between infatuation and love that we should know. This two play an important role in our lives. Along the journey of our life, as we grow mature, we will be able to know and experience what’s the difference of love from infatuation. They coexist to make up love that can occur between a man and a woman. Let’s just remember, the secret of our being is not only to live but to have something to live for.

-Renz Ladroma w02

You always right good essays Renz. Keep it up! I would just like you to clearly state you thesis, and organize your ideas in a way that they will be easy to follow by the target audience. How about their similarities? Are they in one way similar to one another? Other than that, it would have been a good essay!

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Sylvia Bremer said, "The finest kind of friendship is between people who expect a great deal of each other but never ask it”. Friendship usually starts by simple “Hi” and “Hello”, or through getting their names and starting to know each other. Friendship connects each other and creates a strong bond where you can state your emotions, secrets and feelings to them. Falling in love to your best friend or being committed to them is the biggest SACRIFICE you made into your life, it is normal to fall in love to your best friend because you’ve already started to gain each other’s trust and started to know each other, being in a relationship is being together as a couple, sharing the love and each moments of your life, but if you broke his/her trust, the friendship and the bond that was created before will end up that easily. Choosing between friendship and in a relationship is really hard, you need to decide whether you’ll save the friendship and bond that you’ve created or you will be in a relationship where you will entrust the love and feelings to your partner, and will hold on in to the future. Someone said “Whether it's a friendship or relationship, all bonds are built on trust. Without it, you have nothing”. Trust is a BIG word, it takes time to gain it and you’ll need to protect their trust once you’ve gained it. On the other hand Decision is a part of trust where you will decide if you’ll choose friendship or relationship. Being in a relationship or having a couple needs a lot of effort, understanding, love, patience, and respect. Just like Relationship, friendship also needs love, patience, respect, understanding and the bond that will develop each day. Effort is much needed in Relationship than friendship because in relationship, you need to show your full effort to show to your partner how much you love her, it is also needed in proving their parents that you deserve to be hired as a lover and the protector of their daughter. While in friendship, effort is also needed but not as important as relationship. In relationship, we need understanding in case of quarrel, busy at work, jealousy and if she’s pride is as high as the sky. Compared to friendship, we need to understand what would be our role in every people we will encounter, we also need to understand the situation and their mood so that the friendship will grow and develop as well. Lastly, in relationship you need to make her feel how much you love her and how much you care for her, how much you respect her personality and dignity, and how long your patience to her is. In the same light, friendship also needs to feel the love and care to so that we can gain their trust and earn their respect and to develop the bond as well. (The ideas that you presented here are interesting actually. However, you may need to organize them and elaborate or give at least an example. or you may wNt to separate your ideas into paragraph so the readers will not be confused and can easily follow your ideas.) “Importance can be prospective; the expectation that a friend or a relationship can lead to the above also make it important to us”, this is how we decide which friend is more important than which other friends. We value our friends who we can trust with our secrets, who have the ability to gave us courage and strength, who are kind and generous, friends who are fun to be with, and responsible. Also, we value friends who we just like more. “What’s more important, friendship or relationship?” both friendship and relationship are important. A friend who can help you every time you’re down or even sacrifice their time for the happiness and joy just for the friendship is more important than a girl you just met in malls or in schools. On the other hand, a girl whom you’ve fallen in love with is likely more important than your best friends.

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Have you already watched the movie friends with benefits? How well do you understand the story? Is it true that we can benefit from friends than relationship? Or we benefit more in a relationship better than friendship? I think that we can benefit more in friendship than relationship. Because friendship can give us happiness and joy whenever we create bond and doing things together, while in relationship they let the couple feel the “kilig-factor” whenever they are with each other. Relationship can end up easier because once the trust was lost and the heart was broken it is the end, the forgiveness and second chance is there, but the trust that you earned, the feelings that grew and developed will never be the same again. Unlike in friendship, we can still recover the trust but the bond is still there and the happiness will rose again. Friendship benefits more as we can trust them more than our love ones. Once the relationship is over, we can use it to blackmail them or to use it against them. While in friends, they will keep it as a secret and protect your privacy. Some of the issues today is about Premarital sex were it was being practiced by some couples, that’s what they call “friends with benefits”. I don’t know why they are doing something like that. Being in a “friend-zone” is also one of the issues today, you love your friend but he only treats you as a friend or ignores your feelings to him. With that, we can say that we can benefit more in friendship than in a relationship.Kevin McCarty once said “I don't need a perfect relationship, I just need someone who won't give up on me”. In conclusion, it will depend on us how we handle the relationship or the friendship we have; how we protect them, love them, and understand them, and how we respect each other. For me, friendship is more important than relationship because they add colors to our life and it brings more happiness than relationship. It depends on your decision whether you’ll choose friendship or relationship, just protect them, respect them and share the happiness that you have.

-Camposano w02

I see you have improved there Alfredo! You are now starting to discover the write in your. I would just you to clearly state your thesis about your topic. This would help your target audience to follow your trail of thought and understand the whole point in your essay. Also, make sure that each paragraph would only have one main idea. Other than that, I would consider it a good essay. Write on!! \n/

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Both form of organization has its own leader. The difference is that in dictatorial form of government, the leader has the power of controlling over the country, and in republican, the citizen has the power. Though the citizen might have the power, they are bound by laws. A republic is essentially a government that rules by set laws. A republic usually has a set constitution that guides what other laws they can institute. A republic is the best form of government, as the laws that have been set previously keep the people or the ruling party from making changes that happen too quickly and rashly. Though, Marcos, for example, greatly contributed a lot in uplifting and enhancing the economy. More laws has been approved and there are faster transaction in government works the time that Marcos lead as dictator.

-Cipriano, w02

I see your effort there Rodney. I can infer what are you trying to point out in your essay. However, the basic parts may not be complete in your composition. Make sure you have an introduction that will get the attention of the target audience and that states your thesis or you claim about the topic (republic is the best form of government). Now, this is the idea that you will be proving or supporting in the body of your essay. At least, have three major supporting details in your essay, and these major supporting details would have minor or sub supporting details. Finally, your essay should have a concluding paragraph that restates your thesis, summarizes all the ideas that you have presented in your essay and expresses your final words about the topic. I know you can improve on this essay Rodney! You just have to believe in yourself as I believe in you.

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Back when I was in highschool we have a fieldtrip and a family outing.First our fieldtrip held in Vigan Ilocos sur where you can find there the old houses in spanish times,old furnitures,churches,fresh air.You can see there the "kalesa"which symbolize their transportation and their touring vehicles.While our family outing is in Subic Zambales is beautiful place in the Philippines it is also the home of aetas and has a beach resorts where there is a blue ocean,fresh air,many resorts,and animals it is a place for relaxing this summer,from the resort we've stay, they had a relaxing body massage.On the other hand vigan is not a beach resorts that you can relax there you will use your sight seeing to look the amazing sculptures,pictures and etc. But you can amaze with the features of the place compare to subic. Vigan is a vintage place in the Philippines because its structure like you where been travel in the early era of the Spanish regime also a place where you can remember the past,where you can learned and explore new things,you will see the old materials use by our ancestors. Subic must not like vigan but you will enjoy the whole day there swimming,relaxing,picnics,so much more.You can amaze with the falls where you can eat there while the water is flowing is just like villa escudero.While Vigan has a fresh air because there are many trees to feel the escent of the province and also the principal exports are rice,corn,sugar,and tobacco. The peolpe in vigan is resourceful they use there creativity to make baskets,bags made in coconut leaves,wallets,bracelets,and some kitchenwares and they make people more interesting that’s why some american's visit the city.Vigan have a resorts but there are few unlike subic has many resorts of course the word "subic" means waters in subic you will be with animals like dolphin's one of intellegnt mammals in the world,eagles with a long beak,and others.Aside from the animals that you can see there subic has slopes are forested with tall hardwood trees and, at higher elevations, pines the same as Vigan.Vigan and Subic for me is different I wont choose what is best and the only I think is that you can enjoy this places.But for me this places I have visited are so memorable because it will enjoy you.-Senesan, w02

I see your effort there Mary Ariane. I can infer what are you trying to point out in your essay. However, the basic parts may not be complete in your composition. Make sure you have an introduction that will get the attention of the target audience and that states your thesis or you claim about the topic (it is better to visit Vigan for _____ and Subic for _____ or your own thesis). Now, this is the idea that you will be proving or supporting in the body of your essay. At least, have three major supporting details in your essay, and these major supporting details would have minor or sub supporting details. Make sure that each paragraph would only have one main idea. Finally, your essay should have a concluding paragraph that restates your thesis, summarizes all the ideas that you have presented in your essay and expresses your final words about the topic. I know you can improve on this essay Arriane! You just have to believe in yourself as I believe in you.

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Dalton Jay T. Romasanta BSITWMA-W02

Holiday Staycations vs. Travelling Vacations

Summer vacation, the best days of being free, and where every people in the world look forward of having. The days where we can have our staycations, and the sought after travelling from other places to get some vacation. But which is better staycations or travel vacations? Travelling vacation, I think is travelling is better that of staycation since it is more challenging to face. It takes a lot of eagerness to try.

Staycations, that we have now become the trendiest option to vacation travelling. There’s no doubt staying at home for the holidays is cheaper than vacation travelling, it is also secure and easier to plan of what are going to do in the holidays or in summer. So, it only stands to reason that visiting parks, zoos, and visit the malls are becoming the new trend for Filipinos. It is also cheaper, since we don’t have to worry about our budget because we just stated at home. However, there are some very particular reasons why travelling will always remain a better alternative, even though the cost issues and any possible problems of vacation travelling.

To begin with, vacation travelling involves familiarity with your own senses such as

seeing variety of places you’ve never been before, touching new things, hearing the sound of a new environment, and smelling the scent of excitement, unusual and unique environment of places you visit while on vacation. If someone done this and described the taste of a new flavour of a food which is like a hundred words when you describe it, but instead you could just simply taste it yourself. What would you prefer? The descriptions the person told you or the experience trying it yourself? It’s almost the same that explained earlier. Unlike staycations you just watch some of the shows of National Geographic Chanel which features some of the world’s famous places and you’re just there sitting and watching why not try vacation travelling? It’s an experience you could always remember, despite the price of the vacation but it’s totally worth the experience.

Secondly, I myself believe that travelling vacation is certainly the best source of

inspiration that one could think of having in our lives. Even though you’ve been to the same place a few times already, the next time you visit it again the important thing is the thought can be yet very different, because you’re seeing new things, the new atmosphere of the weather, your mood changes and the people of course you encounter will be different, and your impression of the place can change completely or by just become complete and be a new you. For me, travelling vacation will always bring new discoveries unlike staycations you just focus on the old place and do the same routine every day, whether they discoveries of the outer world or discoveries within yourself, the time to reflect, travelling vacation is the perfect way to do such wonderful things, and in this view, travelling can also be the best cure for depression although staycations can also be a depressant but what more if you try having it out of town? It’s more keen if try a new environment.

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Lastly, travelling vacation means meeting new people from the places, earning new

friends, or even an inspiration. Unlike staycations, that normally transform around the same group of people you already on good relationship, travelling brings together at times different faces, from various cultures and backgrounds. Travelling is always a chance to get to know others better and to learn to adjust to new traditions, and maybe sometime while on the road travelling you can meet someone you never get a chance to meet if you stayed on your comfort zone which is your home, unlike staycations you’re just seeing the same faces every day, there’s no new experience to cherish.

Those are my points why travelling vacations is better than staycation and there is

always a place for discussion of whether travelling is worth the cost you will spend or just simply better to save up and try staycation. You can always stay at home and be on your comfort zone but travelling for sure may seem to be a big challenge, though travelling needs a lot of preparation, planning, budget, and a certain eagerness and toughness to challenge yourself. Lastly

-Romasanta w02

Good essay Dalton! You have all the parts of the essay. I would just like you to make the attention getter more interesting and use words that would best cater to your audience. This is a very good one! Write on!!

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In 1986 People Power Revolution was held at the EDSA Road; shouting for FREEDOM and change under the leader Ferdinand E. Marcos who was the President of the country for 20 years.After that a great novelist , Lhualhati Bautista wrote a book inspired from thr said historical event entitled "Dekada 70" .Years after the novel released and awarded a movie adaptation of it was produced. Well of course, there is always a difference and similarities between the two.

In the first place, the movie was well delivered by the Director of well as the author to the novel. There is no point of the puzzling around the story. Both trill the viewers and the readers of what will happen next. Also, character in both Genre were strong and delivered the lines enough to carry the viewers and readers emotion. Furthermore, scenes in the story catches attention from the people.

But the difference between the two genre of the story "Dekada 70" , the novel written is much detailed than the movie. Thats the reason why it catches the readers emotion. On the side of the movie, well it is the sound effect, loud conversation and the tears from the characters that carries the viewers emotion. But when the two were compared based in how strong it affects the people, the novel is still better than the movie. Again, that is because the book is much detailed than the movie.

Well if the person read the book first then watch the movie adaptation of it later, the latter may unsatisfied him, why? Most exciting scenes in the original story were changed. On the top of it was the way Jayson, Jules and his bestfriend Willy were killed.

In the novel, Jules was not tortured, just imprisoned for a longtime.His bestfriend Willy was just shot not tortured and his younger brother Jayson was brutally tortured and dies not because of a bullet. Though they're not the main character, the scenes happened to them especially on Jason's part is important because the way He was killed in the novel is true to life.

So, in conclusion of it, the book is better than the movie. For it was detailed enough for the readers to imagined it and tattoed on thier mind than the movie. The emotion and thougths on the movie was not that loud or strong unlike on the novel. Though the story on both genre ended well, if it will be criticized by whole, it will only moved that nothing can capture and satisfy a person the way the book does.

Jarlynn Del Rosario

Nice one there jarlyn! It is indeed an interesting story and to compare the two versions can enlighten the people which one is better. You just have to make the introduction more interesting that it would capture the attention of the audience and clearly state your thesis. Also, organize the ideas that you will be presenting in the body of the essay. Make sure that there is only one main idea in each paragraph. You should also have enough supporting details that support the main idea in each paragraph. Finally, in the concluding sentence restate your thesis, summarize all the ideas that you have presented and state your final words about the topic. I believe in your ability to make a better one. Keep on writing.

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Mac OS X Lion vs. Windows 7: Which OS is Best?

Do you have computer at home or in office? Are you satisfied with your computer system? We have an idea on what OS ( Operating System ) you should choose and fit on your daily use of computer. The two major OS are the Mac OS and Windows. They are both good OS.Mac OS X is a BSD Unix based operating system with a GUI which is more user friendly than Windows for many users. The OS allows for permissions based accounts, and has better access controls to limit the spread of malicious software.Yes, there are viruses and proof of concepts which target Apple software and protects the system folder from write actions unless a user has administrative privileges. Windows is prevalent in business environments, and has differing architectures based upon which flavor is installed (there are vast differences between 3.11, 95, 2000, XP, Vista, and 7) and the variations would best be researched on a product information site. Because of the popularity of Windows, malware and viruses are numerous, and an antivirus program is often the bare minimum that a user must use to protect their computing resources and data. No matter the operating system, a best practice to follow is to always work from a user account with limited privileges and only do upgrades and installs from within the administrative account's work space. But it also depends on the specs of your computers it depends on your RAM (Random Access Memory) how it process the data in your computer. Although there are many different brands,classes, kinds and quality of computers you should base it on your budget and to your daily lifestyle if it's useful. I hope I helped you on choosing your OS for your computer.

-Alexander Sumawang

Nice try there Alexander! The thesis may not have been clearly stated or the highlighted group of words is really your thesis? Aside from that, I would like you to separate your ideas into paragraphs. Each paragraph should state one main idea and there should details that would support it. The concluding paragraph should restate your thesis, summarize all the ideas that you have presented and your final words about the topic. I am confident that you can do the necessary revisions in your essay Alexander.

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We are living in a world that is modernized by the advanced modern technologies. More and more people are using these technologies in making their lives easier than ever. With that, I chose Information Technology as my undergraduate course because it is in demand right now and will always be in demand unlike other undergraduate programs. Also, IT is a challenging course because technologies nowadays are fast changing. In a matter of minutes, new technologies are being invented and released in the market with new specifications and features. We, the future IT experts should know all these because that should be our forte and that will be my job soon. Another reason why I chose IT as my course is that, it is one of the highest paying jobs in our country today with an average of 46,651 PHP while jobs doesn’t offer salaries at that high due to many people are already on that job. For example the nurses, many students are enrolling on that course making nurse, a job that is really hard to apply for. Also, you can never stop learning. Things change dramatically in many fields over the course of a few years. This is certainly true if you will take IT. Computers are advancing rapidly. Networks, computer systems and ant-virus programs are quickly evolving as well. Unlike other courses, there is only a specific topics or there are only certain things you need to learn and it’s already fix. What others learned before on that course, you will also learn if you take that course. So, if you want to have a job with high salary or you are into technology, Information technology suits you best. It is one of the popular courses nowadays because of the fast technology that our modern world has.

-Potente

Maui, I see your effort in writing this essay. Although, this may not be a comparison and contrast essay since there is no clear program being compared with BS IT. You may want to revisit your essay and choose another program that you can compare IT with. I am confident that you can do the necessary revisions Maui.

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Simon, John Philip S. BSITWMA-W02

Me, Myself in the Past and in the Present

Let me borrow the words of Joan Rivers “Yesterday is history, tomorrow is a mystery, today is God's gift, that's why we call it the present.” Before I begin I would like to say that I am an extraordinarily fortunate young man and couldn’t possibly express how deeply I appreciate my family, friends, mentors, colleagues, and all of the incredible experiences I’ve been a part of thus far. If it weren’t for the unconditional love, generosity, and sacrifices of countless individuals, I most certainly would not be the happy, optimistic, and confident person I am today.

I was born on November 26, 1995 in a small town called Maria Aurora, Aurora province. It was the happiest day that happens in my life. Let me tell you honestly I view my pictures to remember my past life. To recall, I was very naughty when I was a child. I always play and play. I remember my brother show a magic trick to me, he eat a bug “ salagubang in our province” but he don`t actually eat it, he is just fooling me, and I impersonated him. I eat also the bug and they were very worried about me. Then I enter elementary, I remember I always cry every Thursday when entering the school. I don`t know why? Elementary is quiet hard and challenging. I don’t know if I can make it or I can pass because it`s really hard. Guest what my mother was my teacher in grade 3. I don`t call her mama, because she said that we were in the school we are not in the house. I graduate with honor. I`m really proud about myself not because I finish but because I believe that I can do it and my effort was paid off. In elementary I learned to be nice with other people, it really helps me to have friendship with others. Have courage, because that will lead you to success. Enjoy being a child because it is once in lifetime that you will be a child.

Here it comes high school. They said it that it is the happiest part of being a student. High school can almost be compared to a civilized jungle full of different species of human beings. To survive this jungle, an individual must avoid any conflict with another. There are countless categories in which a student can be classified. I only narrow my observation to four listed groups: jocks, preps, Goths, and nerds. Each group has a different appearance, different attitude, and a different taste in music. It was not that hard for me to enter high school because my classmates were my elementary friends. I learned so much in high school. I learned that childhood friends are forever. I’m sure you and me will meet many great people in our adult years. And I’m sure we’ll make friends. One thing I’ve learned from high school though, is your childhood friends will always be your true friends. Judging people is stupid. Students in high school love to judge. We judge in our minds, we talk about our judgments with friends, and we even tell the people we are judging our judgments. Everyone is different. I am lucky enough to live in a school with a wide variety of people. There are rich people and poor people. Incredibly smart kids and kids with special needs. I am very grateful for this. You need to get involved. My hardest and most fun moments in high school have been from playing sports. Playing sports or doing other activities with your school like joining clubs, etc. is amazing. High school is what you make of it. You decide how much you learn from and enjoy high school. If you’re involved, show compassion, look at things with a positive attitude, and keep an open mind – high school will be a good, even great experience.

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Now the present. I am college student right now and few weeks more I will finish being a freshman. What I learned here being a 1st year student is that be open-minded. When I first began my college days I was not very open minded. I had no idea what I wanted to do with my life, I just did what my family thought was best for me. Stay in touch with old friends. From personal experience, it is extremely easy to get caught up in your busy college lives with demanding schedules and various social surroundings. While you may be making an abundance of new college friends, you have to maintain and put effort into the relationships from home and with your high school friends. Find a good group of friends. These are your people. These are the friends that you will have for the rest of your life. These are the people who grew with you, who took a journey with you, who learned how to be away from home with you, who comforted you with different obstacles and life situations. What I intend to say is that, in my experience, college life is invaluable. The friends you make, the successes you achieve, the failures you learn from, and the lessons you acquire through the passage of time will stay with you always as you move on and grow up. With that said, it is my ambition to impart some of the fortunate wisdom I have adopted over the years as a product of college life. These are the lessons I’ve learned for being a 1st year student and I am looking forward that I will also experience like these on the next school years. Lastly I just want to say “Getting over a painful experience is much like crossing monkey bars. You have to let go at some point in order to move forward.” by C.S. Lewis. Remember that for every experience no matter what it is good or bad we learn from it that is life.

-Simon

Knowing oneself is indeed one of the hardest task of man, and it is an interesting topic for your essay. You have written this essay from the hear Philip, I can see that. However, you should clearly state your thesis. Make it clear also that you are comparing yourself when you were in elementary, high school and college. Use transitional devices that would show this relationship. I know you can do it Philip.

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Echague, Dona Mae B. BSITWMA – W02

Father’s love and Mother’s love

People around the world all have different personalities, but some are similar in nature. We have different characteristics or attitudes which make us who we are. We have all different ways on living, on getting touch to other people and even showing our love and care to someone.

My mom and dad are married for almost 17 years and until now, their love and care for

each other is still the same as the time before. I'm the only child in the family and because of that; I get all the love and care of them. The attention is all mine, consequently I’m the apple of my parent’s eyes. Like what I've said earlier, we all have differences, and now, I will compare and contrast mother’s love and my father’s love.

Mothers I think are more understanding than fathers are. It is because mother has more

knowledge in raising child than fathers do. They are the one who gave birth to the child so they have closer connection to the child. I think that’s why when people say they are a momma’s boy or momma’s girl is because the mother understands. Mother also gives more advice on the emotional stuffs. They are more concern about the feeling of their child than the fathers do.

A Fathers love towards a child is kind of hidden thing and it’s not easy for a child to

realize it. Fathers are the one who usually do something or buy us something even without us asking for it, and it is their way of showing their love. Fathers are always push limits to something for example, they are the one who often give curfew and that is their one way in protecting their child. Fathers are also not affectionate as mothers are. For example, mothers like to cares their babies and hug and kiss on them if they get a cut or burn or something, but fathers where just tells you to “let it go and move on.”

I also think that fathers in disciplining their child are based on rules, while mothers are

based on feelings. Fathers usually make rules, which also teach children the right and wrong and mother usually disciplining their child by teaching good attitude or characteristics, and more.

In the end we need both to help you through everything, through what you want, what

you need and what you want to achieve. By what they are showing to you, you are also learned from these and it can also help you. We all need love and it’s not about where and who it came from. We need the love from the father and the love from the mother. Their love for us is equal and really important. -Echague

You have written well this essay Donna! You are discovering the writer in you. I commend that you have all the parts of the essay and you have supported well your thesis in this essay. Keep it up! Just be conscious of minor grammatical slips. Aside from that, I consider this a good work.

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Will you choose your career/work over your family?

Everybody has their own family and chosen career in life. Our families are the one's who are giving us such happiness in life and we are with them all the time. They are the one's whom we can rely on everytime that we need them. On the otherhand, our career is our chosen decision in life, it is where we can see how well did we perform in our life, this is the fruit of our success in the field of education. But when you were asked to choose whether your family or your career, what would you choose? Today I will tell you about what is my opinion about the matter of choosing between your family or your career.

First, in choosing between two things we must first see them in different perspectives. Ask yourself on two questions, what will I do with my family without my career? Or What will I do with my career without my family? See how these questions differ? We have our own opinions on different matters and with regard to our family we also have different opinions about this. Its really difficult to choose whether career or family. You will be very happy if you choose your family but on the other way around you would also be thinking on how will you raise your family without your career or job? And if we choose our career, there's a tendency that the family members would be affected since choosing your career over them would be a little bit upsetting because you will need to leave your family for your own choice that is why I pointed out on the first paragraph that career is our chosen decision in life.

Second, in choosing you may also want to ask yourself what is really important to you, or what really matters to you? Is it your career or your family? There are different cases in which we could base our answer to these questions, for example an OFW worker, these people are the one's who really is affected on this decision since they are choosing their work/career in order for them to earn money for their family, but on the other hand we can't really say that they are choosing their work over their family because they are just doing it for them. These OFW's are the one's who sacrifices a lot in order for their family to have a better life and a better future, but in turn these children who are left behind may have different understandings on why their parents (mother/father) leave them, some may understand, some may not. As a result this will lessen their bond and love for their parents which is not good because if these parents would return to them, these children would maybe hate or miss them that they would change the way they treat their parents when they get back from work/from abroad.

Third and last, in choosing we must consider this question, "Would you be happy if you choose your family? Or your career? This is a hard question, of course you are happy whenever you see your family but you are also happy when you know that you can provide them everything that they need. Does it matter when your happy but your stomach aches? No, your not. But would you be happy also if you can't stay beside the your family and you wont see them grow? It's a big NO, NO either. We just need to really follow what our heart desires, because our heart will lead us to the right path. And the wisest thing that you could ask for help is God's guidance.

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I have presented my opinions on how I look at this family over career thing first is try to see things on different perspectives and ask yourself what are the things that each can contribute to you in order to come up with a wise decision, second, which is more important, weigh your answer base on your hearts desire and lastly, consider on where would you be more happy, these are some things to bear in mind in order to create a wise decision.

Indeed, it is hard to choose on whether career or work but in the end you will end up choosing what's really in your heart. We cannot say or predict what is to happen but we can choose wisely in order to predict these bad happenings. Learn to love your family and at the same time learn to love your work as well because these things come in partner, without work you can't feed your family, without family, there's work doesn't matter at all because you don't have someone to offer your life for. So now you choose, Work/Career or Family? The answer lies in you. -Serrano

Nice one there Mere! You have all the parts of an essay and you have clearly stated the purpose of your essay. Capitalize on it and we will just refine some skills in writing. The essay should present your stand about the topic. It is alright to ask questions to your intended audience, but do not forget to share your own side. Aside from that, it would have been a good essay.

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Books that made into "Silver Screen" are very trendy nowadays, and one of the top books to movie adaptations is Da Vinci Code by Dan Brown. Both Da Vinci code novel and movie, from its opening to its stunning conclusion, have attained its goal to hand over the controversial information to all of its spectators. So as an avid fan of Dan Brown's works, I have read Da Vinci code novel and watched its movie adaption as well, and can say that both the movie and book have their significance only present to itself. As a part of the final requirement to my ESNP 703 This phrase may not be necessary anymore), the primary purpose of this essay is to compare and contrast Da Vinci code novel and movie adaptation. (I think there is something lacking in the thesis. you may want to revisit your thesis.)

As I mentioned on this essay, both Da Vinci code novel and its screenplay, have an "Ace" only remarkable to one another. I judged them as two separate entities with their own good and perhaps bad points. People complain that the film isn't like the book all the time without understanding as you point out, that there are time constraints among other things, that make a director go in a slightly different direction. Often, the focus is lost in the effort to create something fresh take a particularly long novel, there are usually many characters who, though well written and interesting, are dropped from the screenplay because it slows the film down.

Both book and film follow the ultimately successful efforts of a Harvard professor of ‘symbology’ and a French code-breaker, on the run from the police, to uncover secrets that might undermine orthodox Christianity—all in the course of a busy 24 hours or so. Professor Robert Langdon (in the film played by Tom Hanks) and Sophie Neveu (Audrey Tautou) of the French Judicial Police, after the murder of her grandfather—a curator at the Louvre museum in Paris—in which Langdon becomes a suspect, go in search of clues as to the location of the Holy Grail (and, at the same time, attempt to avoid capture by the authorities). An ancient secret society, of which Neveu’s grandfather was a leading figure, is somehow involved. The clues to their quest lie in a series of puzzles.

In the novel, bank manager and friend of Jacques Saunière (murdered curator ), André Vernet, turns against Langdon and Sophie because he has been waiting 20 years for somebody to return for the contents of the safe and believes they may have killed Saunière to access his valuables. In the film, Vernet's selfish interests in the contents are insinuated while, in the novel, a fuller explanation is given of his dedication to protect Saunière's interests as his client and friend. You can see here that movie adaptations are not always close to the novel’s pacing because the essence of the book will be lost if everything will reenacted on the movie.

To end this essay, I can say that both Novel and Movie are good because it delivered a crackling, intricate mystery, complete with breathtaking escapes and several stunning surprises. Da Vinci Code movie, changes for the most part make cinematic sense and it did hold itself close to the novel without losing any of the pacing so necessary for a successful film but the

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book will always be better as our imagination is limitless compare to what an actor or director can do.

Legaspi

Your final thoughts about the topic Benedict is interesting. I also commend your essay for having all the parts. You just have to clearly state your thesis. Which presented the story better? The book or the movie? This may help you in recasting your thesis. You may also want to make your attention getter stronger and more intriguing to tickle the curiosity of the target audience. In the perspective of the target audience, I may be left craving for details that would show the differences between the two pieces of art. You may want to elaborate further or add more details in your essay. Other than that, I still consider this a good one and I have seen that you have improved in your writing. Write on!

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Technology today like phones, computers are fast changing. If you would compare an old unit ofSamsung phone to a new and latest Samsung unit phone today. It is obvious that the old unit of Samsung phone is really far compare to the new unit of Samsung phone. Let us also compare Apple’s first version of Iphone to todays Iphone 5. As what I’ve said. The first version is really far from the new one.Samsung and Apple have been battling each other for years now. The two companies stand onmuch equal footing and we’re cant be sure yet to as which one will be victorious. Both Samsung and Apple phone produce wonderful products. Each of their product has their own strength and weaknesses.So today, let us compare the two latest phone of Samsung and Apple. For Samsung let us consider Samsung Galaxy s4. And for Apple, let us consider Iphone 5. First the design. The design of Iphone 5 is very unique and it is made up of metal, and it has an aura of something that is expensive. On the other hand, Samsung mobile phones are just made up of thin plastic. But still it has an awesome design.If you will see the side of both Samsung galaxy s4 and iphone 5. It has the same size of side but the bigger is the Samsung galaxy s4 which has a 5.0 inches compare to iphone’s 4.0 inches. Lets us compare now the display of both phones. If you play a lot on your phone and watch a lot of movies then you should go for Samsung galaxy s4. Both screens are simply gorgeous. But Iphone 5 is really something special. Its display is very vibrant and natural looking. Let us also compare the processor of these phones. Samsung uses exynos 5 octa system chip and it has 1.6 gHz quad core processor. While Iphone 5 uses its own Apple A6 chip and has a 1300 Mhz Dual core processor.Both phones are really good in terms of quality and style. Both have their own strength and weakness. It’s up on the owner, or buyer depending on his/her wants, needs, or what fits his lifestyle.--Rigos

I see your effort there Kyle! These two phones are indeed useful and they made an impact in the lives of people. On the other hand, I would like you to clearly state your thesis. What is your stand towards the topic? Clearly state it so that the target audience can understand your point about the topic. Furthermore, with regard to the body of the essay, you may want to separate the ideas into paragraphs and elaborate further on your idea or add more details. This will help your target audience to realize the point that you are claiming about the topic. The concluding paragraph should restate your thesis about the topic, summarize all the ideas you have presented and state your final words about the topic. I am confident that you can do the necessary revisions needed in your essay. Trust in your capabilities, Kyle.

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The Philippines has over 93 million people and has 52 million registered as a voter according to Social Weather Stations. We elect politicians that we know they will make a good impact in our industry, history and ofcourse in their people. In the past decade we experience different presidency in our country and they have different goals and mission that they must accomplish in their terms. Every Filipinos has the power to know, what they have been succeded in their terms every year. As a typical Filipino individual , I expect more good news rather than in bad news on how they rule the country. We should know everything about them.

I conduct my own survey and with the help of research, I found out the difference between former President Gloria Macapagal Arroyo and present President Benigno Simeon Cojuangco Aquino III with regards to the public perception. I think, I and we should know the comparison about them. Based on my research about the popularity of the two, both presidents are Economists, the present President was even a student of Dr. Arroyo in the Ateneo de Manila University, Pnoy Aquino is seen as a popular or so called as a Majority President, however Arroyo was seen as unpopular, election cheater, corrupt and an usurper one in the Presidency, Pnoy was elected in a landslide victory of a margin of more than 3 million votes versus his nearest rival in 2010 as compared to PGMA. He was an extremely popular candidate during the election. In the survey, Aquino had 71% satisfied and 11% of dissatisfied about his performancefor a very good net satisfaction rating of +60%, according to the 3rd Quarter 2010 Social Weather Stations (SWS), conducted from Sept 24 – 27, 2010. This means that 7 out of 10 Filipinos are satisfied with the performance of Pnoy, on the contrary PGMA rated for the first time as Pres. Gloria Macapagal Arroyo had 42% satisfied and 18% dissatisfied with her performance, for a moderate net satisfaction rating of +24%, according to the SWS, conducted from Sept 15 – 18, 2001. This also implies that 4 out of 10 Filipinos are satisfied with the performance of GMA. In terms of delivering their speeches in the Filipinos, Pnoy delivered his speech in Tagalog so that it will be more understandable to the people, unlike to PGMA who shared her speech in English language that some Filipinos people are confuse about her deliverance. In the way they talk and delivering a speech they are similarly smart and genius. They are similar in the tune of voice (Powerful Voice). I think this information is enough to know about them. I couldn’t find enough information about them because Pnoy is currently in president and I can’t tell everything from his administration.

I hope that this comparison will reminds us in incoming election 2013. Every politicians is currently campaigning in every part of the country. So what I’m trying to say is that, posting and delivering their flatforms to the public must seriously hear and read. Our generations is in our own hand. We should think wisely before we vote the right one, because we expect more accomplishment that they should do to the country.

-Figuerroa

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“Whether or not you believe in God, you must believe this: when we as a species abandon our trust in a power greater than us, we abandon our sense of accountability. Faiths… all faiths… are admonitions that there is something we cannot understand, something to which we are accountable. With faith we are accountable to each other, to ourselves, and to a higher truth. Religion is flawed, but only because man is flawed. The church consists of a brotherhood of imperfect, simple souls wanting only to be a voice of compassion in a world spinning out of control.” ― Dan Brown, Angels & Demons

A book and movie that was described as an anti-Christ; people would often judge the book, the movie, the writer, even the readers of it as associated to the people who do not believe in Christ. Angels and Demons was written by Dan Brown and first published on the year of 2000. Meanwhile, the movie was released on the year of 2009, and was directed by Ron Howard. The story focuses on Langdon and Vittoria’s quest around Vatican to get back the anti-matter that was stolen from the laboratories of CERN. It was described as a thriller movie and mystery-thriller book. In this essay, I will compare the book to its adaptation movie, its huge changes from one another.

The book, Angels and Demons, shares many stylistic literary elements, such as conspiracies of secret societies, a single-day time frame, and the Catholic Church. Ancient history, architecture and symbolism are heavily referenced throughout the book. What is written in the book is more detailed and more vivid. It concentrates on the perspective of Langdon, The Hassasin and the author. In the book, the Camerlengo Carlo Ventresca, an Italian priest, helps the protagonists of the story. Langdon was brought to CERN by a Mach 15 by the order of Maximilian Kohler, the director of CERN. This Mach 15 was the one that transported Langdon and Vittoria, the adoptive daughter of Leonardo Vetra, to the Vatican City. Captain Rocher, the second in command of the Swiss Guard, was the one that greeted both Langdon and Vittoria when they arrived. He was the one that escorted them to Commander Olivetti. The Hassassin, which has a Middle Eastern origin, was a culprit of camerlengo and the one who is killing the four cardinals or the so called “Preferiti”. The Hassasin contacts members of the media, specifically BBC, to reveal the killings of the cardinals. Langdon tries to solve the ancient symbols in time so that he can save both the Vatican and the Preferiti, but failed to the part of the Preferiti. Kohler died because of a shot from a Swiss Guard because he was seen to be branding the camerlengo, but the truth is he already figured out the camerlengo’s motives. When Vittoria and Langdon found the anti-matter, it was already too late to be transported back to CERN, so the camerlengo get it, ride and pilot a helicopter and dispatch it. Unknown to him is that Langdon was also on board the helicopter. When the truth about what he did to the late pope, the Illuminati, anti-matter and that his real father was the late pope, he escaped the guards and burned himself to death in front of the crowd at the roof of the St. Peter’s Square.

The movie of Angels and Demons was based on the novel of the same name but the setting happened after the first movie, The Da Vinci Code. In the movie, the Camerlengo is Patrick McKenna from Northern Ireland, was the one helping the protagonists of the film. Also, the Vatican was the one who summoned Langdon to solve the symbols. Vittoria followed because her colleague, Silvano Bentivoglia, was the one who was killed in the CERN labs. They

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were assisted by the Swiss Guards headed by Commander Richter. The Assassin, which has a European descent, was the one hired by the camerlengo to take part in his plans. Landon tries to solve the ancient symbols in time, but the only one he was able to save was Cardinal Baggia. The Assassin was killed because of the bomb implanted to his car. The one that the Swiss Guards killed was Richter because they thought it was him who branded the camerlengo. When Vittoria found the anti-matter, there was no time to recharge its batteries and take it back to CERN, so the camerlengo pilot a helicopter and dispatched it by himself. The truth was revealed when Langdon and Vittoria showed the security video from Commander Richter’s office to the other cardinals. When the camerlengo found out about this, he burn himself to death on the remote recess of the building. The Vatican announced that the camerlengo died due to internal injuriesfrom his parachute fall. Cardinal Baggia was the one who became the pope and Cardinal Strauss is the new camerlengo. Cardinal Strauss also gave Langdon Galileo’s “Diagramma Veritatis”.

Stated above are some things that should be noted about the book and the movie. The facts, some characters, like Langdon, the main plot and some settings are still the same. The symbols used in the book was still the same as the movie. Many have been retained but there are more differences compared to the similarities. Like what I stated earlier, characters like Commander Olivetti and Captain Rocher have different roles. Also, one of the differences is the one who was killed; in the book, it was Leonardo Vetra while in the film it was Silvano Bentivoglia. The chang of the movie adaptation to the novel made a great impact toward the story and its ending.

From the things I have written in this essay, I stated the most obvious similarities and differences of the novel to the film. The differences made a huge impact towards its viewers who already read the book. The main plot of the novel and the film is still the same. For me, read the novel first before watching the film. Also, the book is more vivid than the film. One can feel stronger feelings on reading the novel than watching the movie.

-Barraca

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Playstation 3 or X-Box 360

First I will show some information about Ps3 and X-Box.Playstation 3 comes with an in-built Blu-Ray player which provides HD output with great sound quality. Xbox 360is known for its incredible community experience and offers a more Windows friendly environment that is tightly integrated with other Microsoft windows applications. Both are 7th generation game consoles and offer amazing online gaming services, Play Station Network(PSN) and Xbox Live. While PSN Network has no monthly fee for playing games online, Xbox Live has a subscription with flexible pricing options.And now I will begin to compare the major differences they have with each other.In Graphics The PS3 uses an NVIDIA RSX “Reality Synthesizer,” which outputs resolutions from 480i SD up to 1080i HD,for the X-box 360uses ATI Xenos for its graphics processing, which has 10 MG of eDRAM.In Online The PS3 connects to the Internet for free through the Playstation Network using the homeowner’s high speed internet account. Its features include PlayStation Plus, a subscription service that gives early access to game betas, demos and premium downloadable content, the PlayStation Store, where players can buy downloadable content, and online gaming with other players. PlayStation Plus costs $49.99 a year, or $17.99 for three months. The Network has over 90 million registered users.The Xbox 360 uses Xbox Live, an online gaming service that is available both free and for a subscription. It allows users to join message boards and access the Marketplace to download purchased or promotional content. The subscription service also allows multiplayer gaming and costs $60 per year for an individual or $99.99 for a family of four (The family pack was discontinued on 3/6/2013). Users can also download classic games from the Xbox Live Arcade. Xbox Live has over 40 million users, and players can connect using their high speed cable or DSL internet connection.In buying games I choose X-box 360 beacuse in X-box 360 you can buy pirated games not like in Playstation 3 pirated games cant be play because of its Blu-Ray Player.For me Playstation 3 is better than X-box 360 because look I shared some comparison of those two gadgets as you can see in playing online,if you are a Playstation user you can easily play online everytime you want you dont need to pay because its free not like in X-box 360 before you can play online you need to pay or to buy a card to connect online.Another thing is the controller again Playstation 3's controller is better than the X-box 360 controller.Ps3 controller is so simple easy to use not like X-box 360's controller its like an alien thing their are so many to click.In gameplayI think they are tied because they have the same gameplay there is no difference in gameplay.In games there are some games in x-box 360 that you can only play in x-boxlike halo because of the owner microsoft is the owner of the x-box 360 and they develop the game halo and i think its not compatible with the sony ps3 thats why ps3 dont have that game I think..Both gadgets are so brilliant!!!! These gadgets will give you Happiness!!You will will enjoy playing both ps3 and x-xbox so try playing it!!!It only depends on the person for what he/she wants.

-Gamboa

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Technology has indeed contributed a lot in the world today. Many do expect a lot from our modern society. Information towards these modern technologies would be essential especially to those who would like to contribute on that field. That’s why; FEU- East Asia College is one of

the prestigious colleges which offer computer studies particularly Information Technology course.

The school subcategorized the course Information Technology with three specializations such as Digital Arts, Web and Mobile Application Development and Advance Game Development. These

were derived to let I.T students have their own specialty in the field of I.T.

Information Technology with specialization in Digital Arts is a course focused in graphic designs, photography and other multimedia related matters. Digital Arts students were trained to have their designs, plates, artworks and they must establish wide and wild imaginations, creativity

and art towards their profession.

Unlike Digital Arts, Information Technology with specialization in Web and Mobile Application Development is the course focused in web development, softwares and other entities related

to applications or “apps” that were used in many gadgets nowadays. WMA students were trained to develop or create unique applications for the modern and future gadgets. They have

the means of critical programming that will help them to establish a good program.

And on the other hand, Information Technology with specialization in Advance Game Development is focused in gaming animations, character designs and other game development

quantities that will enable them to manifest new looks towards the world of games and entertainment in technology. AGD students were bound to create fresh and new characters,

graphics and 3D designs within their profession.

Each of the specialization of Information Technology in FEU-East Asia College has its own focused and specialty. They may have common teachings and knowledge with the basics of

technology but every specialization was categorized to focus on their field and That’s how we find technology.

-Relleta

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Which is more convenient to use? Laptop or Desktop?

If you find yourself wanting to buy a new computer, you might have a hard time on choosing between a desktop and a laptop. Both of them have many choices to choose from, and each comes with a variety of competitive features and price ranges. They both have advantages and disadvantages in which will help you to decide between the two. Here are some information in helping you find the "one": When it comes to portability, laptops tend to be more portable than desktops. Why? If you don’t plan to put some space in your home for your new computer, or if you don't know where to put it, a laptop is an "ideal option". On the other hand, If you do have a space dedicated for your new computer, a desktop is a better buy. Laptops are easy to carry and can brought anywhere, for they are lighter, smaller, and thinner than desktops. Laptops are for those people who need to be with their computers twenty-four hours a day while being in one place to another. While desktops are most often used in offices for work and business purposes. Desktops will have lesser risk of overheating than laptops, and you won't need to take it with you all the time.

However, if you're talking about features, you might consider choosing a desktop. When buying a new computer, it is important to know its features. When you compare a laptop and a desktop, try considering the features of each of them and their capacity to perform. For example, laptops have built-in webcams and a media software pre-installed. Some are designed specifically for certain games for people to play. But if you're a gamer - and a serious one, you might want to check the features of a desktop. If you require the latest features to upgrade your memory, sound card and other pieces of your computer, then desktop is fitted for you.

Both of them can be upgraded and repaired, but the question is, which is more convenient? Although we upgrade or replace things in a laptop, it is not easy to update and to repair like in a desktop.For example, if your laptop screen cracks or someone spills juice on the keyboard, it’s much more a serious damage than in a desktop. You will pay a good amount of money for that. However, desktop computers were the one having problems , it becomes really inconvenient to carry it to the service center unlike in a laptop. .The reasons of it are the big and heavy C.P.U and the monitor.

Choosing what computer to buy might give you a hard time, but considering your specific needs in a computer will you to find one that will fit the requirements the you offer. There is no one right answer. The right answer is for you to decide. Laptop or Desktop?

-Parreno

The Judicial systems Philippines VS. USA

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There are many similarities between the Philippines and the United States in terms of judicial systems, both countries have the same Government Structure, both have Supreme Courts and the Philippines has implemented a legal framework very similar to the United States. Despite the similarities of the Philippine legal system with American laws, however, there are still portions of Philippine law that are endemic to the Philippines. For example, the barangay conciliation panels - through which most controversies involving residents of the same city or municipality must pass through before they are litigated in court - are uniquely Filipino. Also, unlike in the United States, there is no jury system in the Philippines.

FEU-EAC BSITWMA BSITDA BSITAGD

The Animation and Game Development, Digital Arts, and Web and Mobile Application are the three specializations offered by Far Eastern University - East Asia College in the field of Bachelor of Science in Information Technology. BSIT specialization with Animation and Game Development program aims for students who have been interested into animation and games providing them with a methodological and systematic knowledge of the concepts with computer-oriented resources and services. Students of this program will gain knowledge in conceptualization, mechanics, creativeness, designing and 3D animation and able to unleash their hidden skills and potential as future computer designers and programmers. BSIT specialization with Digital Arts program aims for students who have been interested into arts, designing and photography providing them with a methodological and systematic knowledge on the acquisition deployment and management with computer-oriented resources and services. Students of this program will be introduced to rich and powerful creative environment experiences across various media for them to maximize their creativeness capacity and to unleash their potentials to be designers and photographers with foundation of various media platforms in designing, editing, animation and other digital experiences. BSIT specialization with Web and Mobile Application program aims to provide students with a methodological approach in advance understanding on the deployment, acquirement and management of information resources and applications. BSITWMA students will gain knowledge in designing, managing, creating and modifying the web and mobile services, applications and software with a broad foundation in user interaction and global communication with computer-oriented environment focused on the development of mobile web.

- Nolasco, Jerome Raymond C.BSITWMA W02 ENSP703

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The TWILIGHT movie series is totally the opposite of the novel series. The scenes in novel series was complete and was detailed discussed by the author, while the movie series has its own version and scenes that was created by the director’s imagination. In our country the movie was strictly prohibited to under ages, while the novel series can is open for anyone who wants to read it. Some scenes in the film series was cut, because those scenes didn’t pass the standards of the movie critics. However, we can see those cut scenes in the novel series.

-Ramirez