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Academic Writing IV
Spring 2013 Meet twice a week M, W (Sec.201)
Monday 2:00-3:50 (3-505) Wednesday 8:00-9:50 (3-516)
E-mail: Austin Casey [email protected]
Phone: 134 3922 0499
Website: http://austincasey.yolasite.com/
Office Hours: (ICB 319) Wednesday 6-8, Thursday 10-12
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Today:
Homework Due: Task 1
Vocabulary
Homework: Essay 2: Rough Draft (Wednesday)
Journal 7: Movie Review (May 29th)
Important Dates
Essay 2: Rough Draft = Wednesday (May 22)
Journal 7: Review = May 29th
Last Day of Class: June 12th
Essay 2: Final Draft = June 12th
Final Exams Week: June 17-21
Vocabulary: Chapter 9 p.79, 85
administrative (administration, administrative, administratively)
cycle (cycle, cyclic, cyclically)
eliminate (eliminated)
enhance (enhancement)
exclusion (exclusive, exclusively)
facilitate (facilitator, facility)
maximize (maximum, maximum, maximally)
restrict (restriction, restricted, restrictively)
FOV: Chapter 9 p.85-86
p.85-86 1-10
p.86-87 1-8 collocation
p.88 1-8
Vocab Worksheet: Chap 9
Complete the WS
Quiz 5: Answers1.administer the club activities (n.)
2.administrative style (adj.)
3.She became a great facilitator (n. person)
4.cycling through his contacts list (v.+ing)
5.enhancement of sth (n.).
6.exclusive club (adj.)
7.She was eliminated from Survivor (v.+ed)
8.to maximize profits (v.)
9.movement restricted / restricted movement (adj.)
10. restricting their breathing (v.+ing)
Quiz 5: Answers11. medical code = medical rule
12. in the last decade = in the last 10 years
13. flexibility in his arm = movement in his arm
14. the current status = the current situation
15. initiating phase two = starting part two of operation
16. considerable damage = significant damage
17. phase = phased
18 Approach = Approaching
19 tradition = traditions
20 widespreading = widespread
Essay 2
Social Issue = Controversial Topic
Acronyms:
Business Acronyms:
TBD = to be decided (at a later date)
ASAP = as soon as possible
ETA = estimated time of arrival (EX: What is your ETA? = Where are you / When will you arrive?
ATM = at the moment
Useful Idioms and Phrases
1. To strike while it's hot = to cash in on something at the appropriate time
2. When opportunity knocks = when the chance comes
Combine: When opportunity knocks we must strike while its hot.
Useful Idioms and Phrases
1. To be ahead of the curve = to be on the right path/track = to be on the path to enlightenment
If you are keeping up with the exercises then you are already on the right track.
If you are listening to your parents then you are already on the path to enlightenment
If you are practicing everyday then you are already ahead of the curve.
Useful Idioms and Phrases
1. A rare event = once in a lifetime (almost never), once in a blue moon (occasionally), when lightning strikes (sometimes)
Advanced Vocabulary
When it comes to advanced vocabulary don't use the word unless you have found some examples online.
Phone dictionaries quality cannot be trusted, use an electronic dictionary or online dictionary which contains example sentences
Argument: Avoid General Overview
Too general:
I think drinking should be illegal because it causes health problems, it causes crime, and it hurts families.
Better:
Drinking on trains should be banned because it disturbs travelers who are trying to sleep.
Argument: Avoid General Overview
Too general:
I think motorcycles should be banned from streets because they are noisy, they can be dangerous, and they can make a mess.
Better:
Motorcycles should have a sound decibel limit for the peace of society not only because they are loud and disruptive, but also to promote hybrid earth friendly vehicles.
Argument: Avoid General Overview
Need facts + personal examples and experience
If you just have facts, it is boring and we don't want to care about your topic.
According to netizen Mark Blunderbus there is an unemployment rate of 7% in Beijing right now.
High unemployment knocked on our door, as my uncle was nearly laid off last summer.
Argument: Avoid General Overview
Reader needs to know why you care about your argument.
Must be some personal reason why you choose to support your argument. If there is no reason, then you should choose another topic. Tell us why you care and why we should care!
References
Works Cited + In-Text Citations
Remember, inside the essay that you need
Authors Last name and page number
Ex: Benjamin Franklin said “............” (Franklin p.27) By this he means that …............
ReferencesReferences
Priority:
1. Author's Last name and page number
2. (No Author = Cannot Use it) This is not a reliable reference.
Never put the website inside the essay
ReferencesReferences
Style:
p.10 (page) if you use pages and paragraphs, page=pp.
p. 10 (paragraph)
l. 10 (line)
c. 10 (chapter)
10:00 (ten minutes, for films, tv, and video)
ReferencesReasoning
References are logical. The reader has to know where you got your information. So you will provide details about how to find it. That is why you need a page number or a paragraph, line, chapter, or time number.
These will link the essay to your Works Cited page
Essay 2: 3 academic references
References
Essay 2: reference mistake -5%
Lack of reference -25%
Essay 2
Essay 2 = social issue (persuasive)
Journal 7: Review Have you ever discouraged a friend from going to a
popular restaurant, because of the slow service or high prices?
Perhaps you decided to buy something when you realized it was high quality.
Example Thesis: I don't recommend anyone to go to Pizza Man because the service was terrible, the place was dirty, and the prices were too high.
Example Thesis: I recommend a Samsung 2012 MP3 Player because the price is reasonable when compared to Sony, but it still has the same features, as well as an attractive display.
Journal 7: Review
Imagine you want to recommend a movie to a friend. You must tell the friend the good and bad points of the movie. You hope that they will watch it because it may change their thinking.
Example Thesis: I highly recommend Batman: The Dark Knight because of the incredible editing, the special effects, and the story.
Counter argument: Although some people think it was silly because it was not realistic, I think the movie can teach us about the modern world of globalization and corruption.
Journal 7: Review
Pros and Cons (good points and bad points)
before you write think about the pros and cons
Topic: Robinson Crusoe (Book)
Pros: A tale of adventure, poetic words, high literature
Cons: A sad tale, too difficult to understand, the beginning is too boring
How to write a film reviewHow to write a film review
How to write a film review
Watch the film, take notes
Look for quotes (I need 2 quotes)
Record the time of the quote that you want to use
Example: Gollum declared, “I need the ring” (Jackson 45:30) By the use of this quote over and over it becomes clear that Gollum is mad.
How to write a film review
The country
The year
The kind of film (genre)
The plot (the story)
The characters
Maybe: Photography, Direction, and Soundtrack
Impact on: you personally, use emotional words
Activity: Choose a topic and write a short review
movies concerts / live performances
books / authors computer games
college courses / professors famous buildings or tourist places
art shows / artists sports / sports teams
plays / theater / opera cars / vehicles
restaurants
Write 100 words, with pros and cons, give it a final grade (a clear confident judgement)
Journal 7: Review Have you ever discouraged a friend from going to a
popular restaurant, because of the slow service or high prices?
Perhaps you decided not to buy something when you realized it was low quality.
Every day we make these kinds of evaluations. Evaluation will also be an important skill during your college and professional careers. There will be times when you will need to evaluate things. Like before you buy something or even watch a movie. You must support these evaluations with well-developed, well-supported, and convincing arguments.
It’s important in these types of tasks to establish a clear set of standards for your evaluation and to support your judgments with reasons, evidence, and examples.
Journal 7: Review
Imagine you want to recommend a movie to a friend. You must tell the friend the good and bad points of the movie. You hope that they will watch it because it may change their thinking.
On the other hand, you may choose to tell your friend not to see the movie because it was terrible and a waste of time.
Journal 7: ReviewPopular Topics to write a review about:
movies concerts / live performances cultural events
books / novelists restaurants computer games
magazines / editors college courses / professors legislation / laws
websites art shows famous buildings or tourist places
musical groups / bands television shows sports / sports teams
artists cities / towns / countries parks / national parks
famous or traditional poems coffee shops /cafes / tea houses
CDs or DVDs software programs dance / singing clubs
Plays / theater / opera cars / vehicles
Journal 7: ReviewHelpful Tips in Choosing a Subject:
1. Choose a subject that you are interested in, but are not too familiar with. For instance, borrow an MP3 you haven't heard before from a friend, or attend a class in which you are not already enrolled. It is more difficult to write a balanced evaluation of your favorite song or a class you hate, than about something new.
2. Choose a subject that you can easily and repeatedly access. If you evaluate a movie, choose one that you have so that you can watch it again. Return several times to a restaurant or museum exhibit. It is often difficult to notice or remember important details after a one time visit.
Journal 7: ReviewYour Essay Must Have the Following:
1. A clear judgment (evaluation) about your subject. Give it a grade. Give it a thumbs up or down. Make your opinion clear and tell the reader right away.
2. Evaluate the correct things. For example, in a restaurant review, focus on the food, the service, the decor, the parking, the prices, etc. Try to research other reviews to give yourself an example of what to evaluate.
3. Support your judgment with specific evidence. If you say a book is "boring," you must give evidence. Write about specific pages that show what is boring about it. If you say that a pizza slice is "delicious," you must describe in detail what makes it so great.
Journal 7: ReviewElements to consider in writing an effective essay:
1. Choose your audience: Imagine your reader to be a stranger so that you will explain more.
2. Content: Is enough detail contained in the piece that the audience will understand your points and overall claim? Have you shown the reader about your subject rather than just told? Is the analysis comprehensive and clear?
3. Organization: Are the parts of your essay arranged into the best order for maintaining the reader's interest?
Journal 7: ReviewElements to consider in writing an effective essay:
4. Expression: Is the language clear, concrete, and specific? Do you use quotes? Did you use your references correctly? Does the language seem fluid and natural? Do we get to hear your natural voice?
5. Usage: Is the grammar good enough that the reader does not get confused? Are the grammar tenses used appropriately?
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Chinasmack.com – translated Chinese blogs into English
Boingboing.com – Western media trending website
Reddit.com – Western media trending website
Shanghai Daily p.2-3 – Chinese current events in English
21st Century – Chinese current events in English
English Weibo – Chinese current events in English
Useful English Websites for Current Events / Social Issues
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Activity: choose a controversial topic
List 3 good points and 3 bad points (PROS & CONS
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
Supporting evidence
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
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Essay 2: Structure
Introduction
Topic 1, your point, counterpoint, refute (response)
Topic 2, your point, counterpoint, refute (response)
Topic 3, your point, counterpoint, refute (response)
Conclusion
Essay 2: Argumentative Essay
Rules for Essay 2:
1.Research Essay (3 Academic References)
2.Argument, counter argument + refute
3.Who disagrees with you
4.One quote (1-3) Academic
5.Cannot use first or second person (I, you, etc)
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Meaningful Argument = Social Issue
1. Family: Growing Up, Love, Friends, Family, Child Raising, Entertainment of Youngsters, Population Control, Cloning/Genetics, Nursing Homes
2. Education/Jobs: Chinese vs. Western Education, Educating poor people, Educational facilities, Part time jobs
3. Health & Safety: Security & Police, Crime/Prisons, Censorship, Robot Spies, Medical Care, Drugs
4. Sharing: Resources & Energy & Land (food, water, oil, international aid, land/animals, etc)
Thesis = topic + opinion + reason (brief reason)
Must attach rough draft to get full score (no rough -20%)
Essay 2: Argument
Rhetorical question = a question that has no expected answer.
Ex: don't you think? Isn’t It?
Don't overuseIt can be used as a hook or to catch the reader's attention
Its not academic, and may seem childish if used incorrectly
Essay 2: Argument
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“ Quotes ”A few quotes are good (1-3 per essay)Must have at least one academic quoteDon’t forget the in text citation, or you will have
plagiarism!Put the in text citation right after the quotes:According to Kant on filial piety, he stated that
“family ties are important” (Kant p.66). I agree that having a strong connection in your family is important because...
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In text citation + works cited page
Lucky Smith writes in The Hunting Diaries that “I think people should have the right to own a gun and go hunting, because it is an age old custom which can make us feel more natural. We also get the benefits from cleaner meat and good exercise in the forest; hunting is a way of life” (Smith p78). last name and page number
Works Cited Page:
Smith, Lucky. The Hunting Diaries. Berkeley, California: Berkeley Books, 2010.
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When do you cite sources in your essay?
When you’re talking about an idea you got from something you read. paraphrase
When you quote from something you read or heard. Direct quote
When you want to give the reader some places to look for more information.
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Essay 2: Argumentative Essay
Essay 1: Profile
Essay 2: Argumentative / Persuasive Essay
use quotes and paraphrasing from other authors
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Essay 2: Argumentative
I want this essay to be your opinion, but I also want you to support your opinion with other author's opinions
At least 3 references.
At least 1 quote
You may also use 1 paraphrase
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Meaningful Argument = Social Issue
1. Family: Growing Up, Love, Friends, Family, Child Raising, Entertainment of Youngsters, Population Control, Cloning/Genetics, Nursing Homes
2. Education/Jobs: Chinese vs. Western Education, Educating poor people, Educational facilities, Part time jobs
3. Health & Safety: Security & Police, Crime/Prisons, Censorship, Robot Spies, Medical Care, Drugs
4. Sharing: Resources & Energy & Land (food, water, oil, international aid, land/animals, etc)
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Essay 2: Example
Title: Video Games are The Devil
Thesis: I don't think students need to use video games because they waste time, keep you from playing outside, and they will make your eyes bad.
T1 The first thing about video games that disturbs me is that they can take away precious time from students
T2 Secondly, I think students will not be encouraged to play outside if they have the latest games waiting for them at home'.
T3 Last but not least, using games a lot will make your eyes bad
Conclusion
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More Help
You can choose something that most people will disagree with, that can be more fun and interesting for argumentative essays
Choose your own topic, a topic not listed is better – it will be fresh and new
Write your real opinion, it is easier to have supporting evidence this way
You don't have to agree with me, or your friends, or anyone – I want to see original topics.
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Activity: supporting evidence
I support teenagers working. List 3 good points and 3 bad points
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
I support that people have the right to own guns. List 3 good points and 3 bad points.
1. 1.
2. 2.
3. 3.
2. bring home the bread / bread winner = main support(er) of the family
Ex: My father has always been bringing home the bread, but when he is on a business trip, it is my mother who takes the role of bread winner.
3. wears the pants (used for moms who are bread winners)
Ex: My mom wears the pants in our family
Useful collocations
4. to cash in on sth = to take advantage
Ex: Once Mary got the position as manager at the company I applied to, it was time to cash in on the situation / friendship.
Ex: The clever lad cashed in on tourists by selling hot chocolate and tea at the top of the mountain on a cold spring day. He was able to sell the beverages / refreshments for 70% more than market value!
Useful collocations
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Remember
At least 50% of people should disagree with you
Pollution is bad = No, nearly everyone agrees
Government needs to control companies more to prevent pollution even if it hurts the economy = Yes, about 50% will disagree
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Don't be afraid if 60% or more disagree. It may be more interesting 60% or more disagree:
Ex: Unfortunately, ...
Ex: Unlike many of my classmates, I think we should...
Ex: I may be different, but ...
Writing Task 1: Flow Chart
production, manufacturing process
As featured in the flow chart, there are ______ steps that ________.
Notice the general trends
For the conclusion, just paraphrase your introduction.
Illustration = diagram, illustrated figure, set of pictures, layout, drawing, representation of _______
T2: Synonyms1. talent = ability, skill, to have a knack for sth
2. to be born with talent = inborn talent = innate talent = raw talent/ability = god-given ability = to be endowed with gifts
3. a genius = a savant = an idiot savant = born a genius = a naturally born genius = gifted kids = hand picked by god
4. fostered talent = book smart, learned abilities, acquired knowledge
5. the age old question of nature vs. nurture = book smart vs. street smart
6. “hard work beats talent”Quote: “hard work beats talent when talent refuses to work hard”
7. on the other hand = to the opposite end
8. clever = street smart, to have moxy, to be cunning (like a fox), to be savvy, to have the right stuff, to be mentally deft
The university's bread and butter is student loans
Crushing debt
Interest rates
Filial piety
Activity: Choose one, write topic, thesis, supporting evidence
What is the most important quality of a good friend?
What do you think can make friends break up?
Why do modern people have fewer friends these days?
What do you think of the educational system in your country?
How can teachers encourage creativity in students?
Who is the most successful person you know?
Do you think an adventurous spirit is born or nurtured?
What kind of people are more likely to succeed?
Who do you admire the most?
Essay Types:You will write 2 essays and weekly journals
1. Remembering an Event (550-650 words)Something that happened to you. An interesting event that you remember clearly.2. Writing a Profile (550-650 words)You will describe something or someone.3. Proposing a Solution (550-650 words)You will discuss a problem and explain how to fix it
6. Journal EntriesThese will be given by the instructor. They will cover various topics.
Very similar to IELTS Task 2 questions7. Vocabulary Quiz
A weekly quiz on the target words
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Course Schedule:Lesson A Lesson B
Week 4 Essay 1: Choose your topic T2
Week 5 Essay 1 Rough Draft Due (550+ words)
Week 6 Essay 1 Final Draft WEDNESDAY(550+ words)
Week 7 T1 T2 J3
Week 8 Quiz J4
Week 9 Midterm
Journal 1
Different Shops
Write an essay comparing and contrasting the experience of shopping at two different kinds of stores. Use specific reasons and examples to illustrate the stores' similarities and differences.
Use 4 vocabulary words from Chapter 6
Journal 2
Choose an IELTS Task 2 question and answer it. Remember choose a trend or a problem. Then use the format “what are your opinions on this”
Use 4 vocabulary words from Chapter 6
Journal 3: Bucket List
A bucket list is a list of things you want to do in your life before you die.
Although this is a creative writing assignment, you must still follow the correct structure as usual.
250+ words, follow normal structure: Introduction, Body, Conclusion. Make a thesis
Journal 4: IELTS T2
Choose a science or technology based IELTS Task 2 question and answer it. Remember choose a trend or a problem. Then use the format “what are your opinions on this”
Write the question clearly and paraphrase it for the introduction.
250+ words, use 4 vocabulary words from Chapter 7
Journal 4: Tech
TOPICS: people's reliance on machines, government spending money for space exploration and development of new energy tech like ITER or CERN, military tech, functional robots
Will modern people forget basic survival and necessary skills like writing and cooking because they use machines too much?
How do you think people in the future will use robots?
Why do people long for tech?
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Journal 5: Small Arguments (250+ words)
1. Make your own argument about something that doesn’t really matter. It is not a serious social problem.
2. Be creative
3. Choose a small topic, narrow it down
4. It can just be a simple opinion
5. Describe your point and counterpoint (like a mini Essay 2)
5. Due Week 12 (Monday)
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Journal 5: Small Arguments (250+ words)
1. Make your own argument about something that doesn’t really matter. It is not a serious social problem.
2. Be creative
3. Choose a small topic, narrow it down
4. It can just be a simple opinion
5. Describe your point and counterpoint (like a mini Essay 2)
5. Due Week 12 (Monday)
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Journal 7: Review (250 words)
Write a review:
Choose a book or film and write a review about it.
Only one thing, clear opinion, give it a grade
Homework
Essay 2: Rough Draft (Next Wednesday)
Journal 7: Movie Review (May 29th)