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"What Has Changed? Black andMinority Ethnic Levels of
Satisfaction With theMetripolitan Police ServiceSince the London Riots."
by Herval Almenoar-Webster
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TIME SUBMITTED 14-SEP-2015 02:35PM
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CHARACTER COUNT 62056
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"What Has Changed? Black and Minority Ethnic Levels ofSatisfaction With the Metripolitan Police Service Since theLondon Riots."GRADEMARK REPORT
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InstructorThis is an excellent dissertation that is written toa very high standard and rigorously thoughtthrough, where you have included a clearintroduction that lets the reader know exactly andstrategically what you intended to arguethroughout.
Your usage of your primary sources is balancedby the secondary sources you have marshaled tobolster your claims regarding the relationshipbetween the MPS and the BME communities innot just Tottenham, your f ield site, but alsospeaks to broader concerns in the wider publicarena.
You need to do minor work on your transit ionsas they had a tendency (see main body) tocontinue the above argument, but this did in noway detract f rom what is a f irst class ef f ort.
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Comment 1This is an excellent conclusion to an excellent piece of work that maintains a high level ofrigorous crit ical engagement throughout.
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