Agenda

• Looking at thesis statements• Topic sentences• Quotes • Principles/Principals of composition

Thesis

• Does it explain the why or how of the topic? Why or how Hawthorne uses symbols, whether indivdual desire takes prescedence over community need?

Topic Sentence

• Do they all support thesis statement?• Do they contain literary feature/or

connect to theme or character development?

Words to avoid

• A lot (many)• Whole (entire)• Book (novel)• Things (be specific)• Stuff (groan)• I find myself (wordy)• Qualifiers of all sorts. (See Strunk and White)

– So, very, great, amazing, etc.

Titles of Books are UNDERLINED

• Or italicized.• DO NOT USE “QUOTATION MARKS”

for The SCARLET LETTER!

Quotes

• Connect and incorporate. See handout• Never end or begin a paragraph with a quote.

Writer should always have the last word. Quotes don’t serve as transitions to next idea.

• “quote” (78).• Capitalize first letter of quote if it follows : or ,

3 ways to incorporate

• 1. Embed it naturally into the sentence:

• 2. Introduce with states, or says,

• 3. Use : when presenting a quote as support or evidence.

1. Embed it naturally into the sentence: At that moment “the gloom of the earth and sky…”

2. Introduce with states, or says,: Hester admits to Chillingworth that she “felt no love, nor feigned any” (81).”

3. Use : when presenting a quote as support or evidence.

Hawthorne contrasts the dismal cemetery with one of natures’s beauties: “A wild rosebush covered in delicate gems” (2).

1.. Incorporate quote so that it is part of the sentence-

Miriam learns early on from her mother that “Like a compass needle that points north, a man’s accusing finger always finds a woman” (7).

2 Direct statement of a character: While evesdroping on Juliet, Romeo says,

“Speak again bright Angel” (1.5.24).

Often too long and not incorporated correctly

• But is she really such a negative token in Hester’s life? “The talk of the neighboring townspeople; who , seeking vainly elsewhere for the child’s paternity, and observing some of her odd attributes, had given out that poor little pearl was a demon of offspring.”

• The residents of Boston thought “poor little Pearl was a demon offspring” (74).

Using quote as example

3.Using colon:

Junior knows that he is not a girl magnet: “I knew that I’d be one of those guys who always fell in love with the unreachable, ungettable, and uninterested” (75).

3 parts of a quote

• Context (when it occurs)• Quote• commentary

Context The sky itself becomes a mantle of oppression when the narrator later speaks aboutQuote religion as another symbol of defeat: “It was

a Sunday…the sky was a blue that was at once overwhelming and ordinary” (132).

Comment Here the narrator uses the phrase “overwhelming and ordinary,” ironically. The conquerors’ religion is as pervasive as the sky.

Often too long and not incorporated correctly

• But is she really such a negative token in Hester’s life? “The talk of the neighboring townspeople; who , seeking vainly elsewhere for the child’s paternity, and observing some of her odd attributes, had given out that poor little pearl was a demon of offspring.”

• The residents of Boston thought “poor little Pearl was a demon offspring” (74).

1. Embed it naturally into the sentence: At that moment “the gloom of the earth and sky…”

2. Introduce with states, or says,: Hester admits to Chillingworth that she “felt no love, nor feigned any” (81).”

3. Use : when presenting a quote as support or evidence.

Hawthorne contrasts the dismal cemetery with one of natures’s beauties: “A wild rosebush covered in delicate gems” (2).

#1

• According to Aunt Augusta, using a fork is the proper way to eat fried chicken.

2

• He was angry when his car ran out of fuel.

3

• Your house is on fire.

#4

• She gasped when she saw him standing where she had been only seconds earlier. She had to shout his name over the trains moving in and out of the station. Weary and upset, she remained silent and evasive as they talked.

5

• The speech was long and boring

6

• He pitched the baseball into the upper right portion of the strike zone.

7.

• The movie Nurse Betty is a dark comedy. It is the story of a Kansas housewife who falls in love with a soap opera characcter. The movie is just fair, in my opionion

8.

• After months of hard work, he ran to tell her of his victory

In conclusion

Con: withClude: to shut

Conclusions

• One more thing: a person WHO• Not a person THAT

agenda

• Rubric for essay• Conclusions• Why Lear why now?• 1.1 read and watch

First…

Never say: “In Conclusion”

WHY?

It’s the conclusion (Duh)

(It’s like saying, “I’m going to talk now.”If you are already talking then why

announce that you are going to begin talking?)

So much is at stake in a conclusion

• This is, after all, your last chance to persuade your readers to your point of view, to impress yourself upon them as a writer and thinker. And the impression you create in your conclusion will shape the impression that stays with your readers after they've finished the essay.

• -Pat Bellanca, for the Writing Center at Harvard University

The end of an essay should convey…

• a sense of completeness and closure • a sense of the lingering possibilities of

the topic • Its larger meaning, its implications: the

final paragraph should close the discussion without closing it off.

Announcements• Essay due on Monday (grace day Tuesday

after that drops to B, then C)– Hard copy and turnitin please. – Format: double spaced 12 pt font

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• Rubric should be stapled to hard copy• Today a quick review on conclusions• Beloved MOnday

Conslusion• Cut the phrase: “In Conclusion”• Are main points reviewed with new

language?• Do you explain what has been learned to

reader from reading essay?• Have you placed discussion into a larger

context?• Please don’t end with a quote. • Writer should always have the last word.• Have you accidently placed thesis in

conclusion? (this happens because it all becomes clearer by the end.) Move it to intro.

Ways to conclude Place essay in a larger context:

- Conclude with a quotation from primary or secondary source that amplifies your main point or puts it in a different perspective.- A quotation from the novel or poem you're writing about can add texture and specificity to your discussion-An expert or the author’s own wordscan also add depth to your thesis.

What not to do:

• Don’t introduce new ideas that haven’t already been discussed in essay.

• Don’t end with a quotation. (Remember: writer should have the last word)

Read essay aloud at home

• Have you finally found what you wanted to say?

• Then go back to intro and change thesis.• Add Add Add.• Revise, revise, revise• Be clear, be passionate about your work. It

should represent your best thinking• Read the book again if you think you’re

missing the point, or can go deeper.